Name - Nightshade

All good here, Nightshade is a lovely name

Age - Six

Aight

Gender - Female

mkay

Tribe - NightWing

right

Rank - Student

cool

Residence - In a NightWing-RainWing village, in a small hut with pretty flowers and vines surrounding it.

descriptive. I like it.

Family - Larkspur(mother), Nightjar(father), Silencebringer(older sister), Stargazer(second youngest brother), and Afterglow(youngest brother).

I love the names!

Friends - Tempest(haha was a pegasus too on TGH MB), Valiant, Irukandju, Snowdrop, Cinnamon, Iridescence, and Vanilla.

amazing names. ive never heard of Irukandju before. don't even know how to pronounce it. And Tempest is my favourite MLP character lol

Enemies - Aster, Bracken(tail hehe), and Darksnout.

DARKSNOUT AND BRACKEN OML I LOVE THIS

Abilities/Strengths - She has weak fire breath, not so powerful mind reading, super weak animus skills, can swing around trees by her tail at longest, an hour, and is pretty strong and athletic. She is also good at poisons, creating clever and intelligent plans, and like adventurous things. Hunting is also one of her good skills. Flying.

why does she have weak flame breath? and why is she a weak animus? im not saying its bad; its great you've given your character flaws. but pls explain why

Weaknesses - Usually bullied for her looks, semi-fragile mind, not normal skills she is taunted for, fighting in battle, being a bit clumsy on open land. 

all good except the bullying thing. I get there are a lotta douchébags out there, even in the dragon realm, but the bullying is too cliché

Backstory - Nightshade was born with her sister in the same clutch twenty years after the start of Jade Mountain Academy. She was born under one, bright full moon in which her Silencebringer also inherited mind reading in which she is stronger at as she was born first but no animus skills. Since her father and his family is all NightWing but her mothers family has mixes of RainWing, SeaWing, and SandWing. I you go to Darkstalker time, MudWings and SkyWings. Anyways, a few years after her birth, her two younger brothers hatched and would have had another sister in her brothers clutch except some stupid RainWing stomped on it and Nightshade took vengeance by poisoning her so she would feel the pain but not kill her. She first poisoned when she was four. Glory soon noticed her skills and suspected her of making the female RainWing, who's name is Aster, sick so she warned Nightshade that if she did that again, she'll kick her out. Nightshade obeyed and the Glory sent Nightshade to JMA at age five in which she was bullied and harassed but learned from it, as one almost killed her, leaving a jagged scar on her snout and face. She made some good friends within her winglet as well as her few friends from the Rain-Night village who accompanied her. Tempest, Valiant, and Iridescence. Nightshade then turned six and now her story continues

.good, I guess? the way it's worded is a bit confusing, but I get the general idea. also, I can see why Nightshade would hate Asper. what a jerk. but poisoning?? three moons xD

Other - She has a silver chain with a nightshade flower attacked as well as a vial of poison. The flower is enchanted by her crush, Irukandju, as she(Irukandju) enchanted it to protect her from harm unless it caused death and/or Irukandju died and/or the flower is crushed. The poison is also just in case. Her scar comes around from the left eye, sharply jaggedly going right than trialing left and then ending in small jagged edges that end on her snout.

 good! I already love Irukandju and Nightshade. SHIPPER POWERS ACTIVATE

Appearance - Her scales are a dark violet with midnight blue and black tones. Silver-like star dots are sprinkled all over her scales like freckles as with black points(like horses) and a more lavender than sky blue underside. Her wings are a little bit lighter than her body and she can slightly changer her scale color by a bit. Her left eye is midnight blue, the other a dark violet. Her body is a little slimmer than a regular NightWing but maintains the shape but with a prehensile tail. Her scales are also a little lighter than regular NightWings. She also has an silver armband with amethyst stones inset, on her right arm, and the necklace mentioned.

great!

The good:

This character is awesome! I love her already! 

The bad:

Honestly, there's nothing bad about her. Except maybe the backstory is a bit badly worded.

How you can improve:

I honestly don't think this character needs improvement tbh she's already perfect

OVERALL RATING:

9.5/10 - the only points deducted were due to the backstory and heritage being a bit confusing, but other than that, this oc is awesome!!

NOTE: I am no professional at rating OCs. if you are still unsure, i suggest taking this DeviantArt test here (works for females and males): https://www.deviantart.com/chartonk/journal/Wings-of-Fire-Mary-Sue-Test-Challenge-BLANK-626468091

PREPARE TO BE SHIPPED BTW

NIGHTANDJU4EVER

I LOVE THE NAME IRUKANDJU IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL