Littlewing
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Name: Littlewing
Adorable name! I like it a lot, and I haven't seen it before.
Gender: Female
Cool
Age: 3 Years
A baby!
Tribe: Pure NightWing
Good, NightWings are ok....
Residence: Jade Mountain
Academy, otherwise Rainforest(I know you have a lot of these, but Tarsier and Littlewing are my only JMA ocs, soo...)
Okay. Still, JMA OCs annoy me, but... oh well
Appearance: Littlewing, relative to her name is quite small for a three year old dragonet. She has very dark indigo scales with a slight grey gradient near tail and grey underscales. Her etes ade sharp and brown with small flecks of yellow scattered throughout. Her wingspan is actually smaller than the average dragonet's, though she says she can fly just as fine, except she needs more frequent breaks to avoid overworking them. She had nothing but a silver ring bracelet on her front left leg.
Alright! I like the indigo scales. The gray is also cool, so are the eyes. I don't really have much to say, but I like it! Glad that it fits her name. Too many people tend to give NightWings names that make no sense, when really NightWings usually have names that are something to do with their looks or another thing about them.
Personality: Haughty and prideful, she often walks around as if she's a princess destined to rule the world, despite being many years younger than most of the dragons at the Academy. She's very picky but not exactly selfish. However, secretly she fears everyone, and she's scared they will all turn against her abd ignore her one day if she doesn't make herself known, leaving her hopelessly alone.
Ooh, I like it. It's kind of a personality that would fit a dragonet, I can see why someone so young would try very hard to impress other dragons. I like that she has flaws, that's always good. One thing though, I think you should add a little to this. Some things that interest her or annoy her or something like that.
Family:
Truthholder(Father)
Evershift(Mother)
No sibs, she was the only egg.
Alright. Evershift is a cool name, but odd.
"Backstory:
Littlewing was hatched before the volcano explosion, on a mountain crag. Truthholder had said her wings were so bunched together when she came out, it seemed like she had only tiny ones, hence her name, Littlewing. Her parents have ad been worried she would never fly, but eventually but slowly she did manage it. Littlewing inherited her mother's pride and her father's worry.
Her parents that been one of the few not entirely supportive of the RainWing experiments, but they did want to get off the island badly. When Glory was presented as their Queen, they barely hesitated, Evershift saying she would put her tribe's pride aside if they could 'get off the stupid island and raise their Littlewing in peace.'
After the war, Littlewing still acted extremely haughty and stuck up, and her father was worried this would carry on to adulthood, which would cause major problems. He asked the queen if she could send her to Jade Mountain Academy to meet dragons from other tribes, which should suppress this trait a little, and she agreed.
Littlewing was put on the Topaz Winglet last second. Her parent's plan backfired slightly though, since being around so many dragons made her want attention even more. She did eventually make friends, and is now a happy student in the academy.
Ah, alright, I like this backstory! She has a reason to be sent to the JMA, which is good. It's good that her personality ties into her backstory. Everything is pretty simple, and while it's good that she doesn't have a crazy tragic backstory, I'm curious how you could make a story out of this— it's not all that interesting. Like, it seems good for a background character or an rp character, but otherwise it doesn't seem very entertaining.
Overall
I'll give Littlewing a 7/10. Her appearance is good, and the name is adorable. I just think that maybe you could add a little more to her personality, and make something more interesting and original out of that backstory.
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