Name: Blossompetal

Hey that's a pretty cool name, it sounds so elegant!

Name reason: of her gentleness, like a petal.

Good reason.

Age: 18 moons

Huh she's pretty young to be a queen hmm? I think she's a little young to be a mother, it sounds like she'd have a hard time raising kids with the short experience and age... 

Gender: female

Sexuality: straight

Clan(s): CaveClan

Time Peroid/Era: an era when all the clans moved to a new territory and changed their names.

That's cool, but I wish you included which clan Caveclan used to be or why they're called Caveclan. 

Rank: Queen

Looks: soft white she-cat with sea blue eyes, a small scar by her paw and a blossom rested by her ear

She sounds so sleek and like she'd be really soft to pet, I love how you put the petal on her ear even if it wouldn't actually stay in real life, symbolical objects like those are always extra little details. But how'd she get that scar and is her fur long or short? What's her other body traits? 

Personality: A bit shy at times, kind, quiet, curious, a bit playful

A very common personality, it's very 'meh', when describing a character's personality you should describe how their life has influenced their personality and put it in more detail, not just point form. 

Abilities: is an excellent runner and swimmer

Interesting skills, but why? Does she have Riverclan or Windclan ancestors? Or is it just natural? 

Strengths: very good at hunting, swimming and running

Standard skills, remember skills aren't just physical capabilities! Like is she diplomatic, have a good memory, a good tracker, can memorize names and faces well, good at playing certain games, handling certain situations, etc.

Weaknesses: gets scared easily, is afraid of adders, rats and badgers

Classic cat fears, but that's not always a bad thing. Not everyone needs some crazy unique fear. 

Family: Peppercorn (father), Cornflower (mother), Honeypool (sister)

Love the names, but you really should of explained them a little more, like does she get along with them well? How'd they influence her life? Did she and her sister have a rivalry or is their relationship close? What they look like would help too.

Friends: Seedsprout (bff), Fernshadow (friend), Shadowcloud (friend) Leaffang (former apprentice),

Okay so they're her friends, but how'd they meet? Did they grow up together? Are they even from the same clan? How did their friendship form and what did it do for Blossompetal's character?

Crush/Mate: Snakeeyes (mate)

Same with her friends? How'd they meet and why him? What did he do to make her love him and does he love her back? Is their relationship a good one or a distant one? Details! 

Kits: Slykit (pretty orange she-kit), Lemonkit (golden she-kit) and Tinykit (tiny black and white tom)

I love the kits names and I'm glad you have them basic appearances! 

Backstory: She grew up as a normal WindClan cat. When she was an apprentice, her father was killed by an adder. She is gravely scared of adders now. She fell in love shortly after she became a warrior with a cat named Snakeeyes, she is now mothering his kits.

Okay but she's part of Caveclan? What about her mother/sister? What was her apprenticeship like? Why did she become a queen so early? What about her friends and her apprentice where were they? More please??

Others: none

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Originality and creativity: 17/25 She has a really cool name and it's nice to see just a white cat with blue eyes instead of the overused silver tabby. Hers and her family's/friend's names are all original and creative (my favourite has to be Peppercorn) and you got the most points in this category. 

Detail and effort: 12/25You really just offered the bare minimum for everything, I didn't see anything that struck me as effort or detail. Details most of all, she's a very 2D character as I know almost nothing about her. You also lost some points by putting nothing in the 'others'. 

Realism and Interest: 13/25Because there's very little to go off she's interesting in the fact that she seems to have some backstory (with her dad dying from an adder) but in all other aspects she's very plain and a bit bland and boring. I know nothing of her life growing up besides it being 'normal' without being told what normal is nor do I know of any of her relationships with her family, friends or mate. There's some more points Odd for her having an apprentice but also being a queen at 18 moons. For this to work she would of had to have the shortest apprenticeship allowed whilst being given an apprentice immediately upon becoming a warrior for Leaffang to have had a proper apprenticeship and even then it's pushing it, who gives an apprentice to a inexperienced new warrior?