Name: Smoke Path

Coolio.

Age: 31

Almost 3. Still pretty young.

Clan: Mountain Clan. They are called this because they live in a valley surrounded by vast mountains.

Sounds pretty. I wanna know more.

Rank: Warrior

Sounds good.

Gender: Female

(All of these have been girls so far, right?)

Personality: Smoke Paw is anxious, and shy.She gets scared easily, but she's a great cat when you get to know her. She's also a little too honest.

A jumpy kitty. Why you anxious, Smokepath? Negative and positive, I like it.

Appearnece: She's a gray cat, with a mask of  black and gray. She is a little small, but next to an averaged sized warrior, it doesn't make a big difference.

Chill. The mask sounds cool, but not sure if that's an actual marking cats can have?

Abilities: A strong jumper, she has amazing lower body strength because, as a kit, she was always jumping on the leader's rock.

Cool. Strong legs. And a real reason for it, I like it.

Likes: Bluebirds, mice, and sparrows. She loves the scent of the mint that grows around camp.*

How aesthetic.

Dislikes: Voles and shrews. She really hates stumbling into a worm or two when they go through the Valley Tunnels, when their not climbing.

Icky.

Fears: Hights. When she was an apprentice, she was practicing climbing with her mentor when a loose stone made her fall off balance, and she flew down. Thankfully, she only had a broken leg, but it gave her a permanent fear.

Scary, and a good reason too.

Backstory: Mountain Clan had lived through a plentiful newleaf, greenleaf, and leaffall, so they we're unprepared when twolegs brought strange animals into their territory. They dubbed them Blood Teeth, for where ever they went, their teeth we're stained with the blood of warriors and prey. Many cats were lost during this time, when she lost her beloved,Swift Cloud. But, finally, the warriors banded together and drove the Blood Teeth out of their territory.

Okay. What animals were the Blood Teeth? And I want to know more about her beloved.

Family: Running Stream was her Mother, Raging Fire her Father. Her brother was Flame Strike, and she had no sisters.

I like those names.

Other Important Cats:Her kits were Blossom Fall(She Cat), Russet Stripe(Tom), Bat Wing(Tom), and Mint Kit(She cat), who died at four moons old of a sickness during Leaf Fall. Her mate, as mentioned before, was Swift Cloud. Her Freinds are Ivy Dream, Sunrise Watcher, Sunset Song. Her Enemy is Lake Fall.

Blossomfall is a canon name. Other than that, I like them. Why is Lakefall her enemy?

I think that's it. :P

:P

Overall score: 8/10

I like her quite a bit. Some details need clarification, but other than that, good job!