I just entered it to be reviewed by LollipopHQ and the reviewer, BloodyTurtle gave me some good advice on how to improve it.
Here is what they said:

Using BloodyTurtle's advise I have decided that I am going to finish the rest of the book and then go back and edit it changing character descriptions and I'm also going to change the title to make it more unique and interesting.
I hope you are enjoying it despite grammar mistakes and lack of description!
Thanks so much for understanding!
I love you all!😘
~Luna