Surprise! I finished these results already! Three specialized categories done in ten days 💅

When I lock in, I lock in.

Anywho, let's get into the results.

Hello, everyone! Welcome to the results for the ROTY poetry category! This is yet another specialized category done! Three in a row! Woo-hoo!

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I'm especially emphasizing that ^^ here since this is a poetry category, and poetry is some of the most subjective art, in my opinion. This is one of those genres where bending grammar and structure for sake of theming is basically required, so please take everything with the usual grain of salt.

For an additional prize of 10 votes on any book of your choice, guess the word count of the reviews (excluding the intro and outro notes; just the raw review word count).

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Please use only whole numbers and not ranges, so instead of 10k-11k, please put either 10k or 11k

Last category, the word count was 12,871 words, or 35.5 pages. Screenshot below! The word and page count are in the bottom right hand corner.

That means the person who guessed it the closest was kemorgan65, with a guess of 15k words! Awesome guess! The second-closest was NotEvenEstella with 17k! Both of you had great guesses!

To the two of you, I will be giving ten votes to any story of your choosing! You can tell me which book you'd like me to vote on here, on my mb, or anywhere, really!

Categories being judged: Rock, Best Pop Solo Performance, and Experimental

Categories to be judged soon: K-pop and Disco

Now, let's get into the results. There will be third place, second place, first place, and two honorable mentions. Congratulations, everyone!

Everyone scored over 30, which is super impressive. Good job to every poet! You all did great!

3rd Place

The ANATOMY of HEART by SubhankiIndia

Review:

Creativity: 8/10. The creativity of this collection is good! There are unique structures and themes throughout, making every poem feel fresh yet still cohesive, which I'll talk about more in one of the future sections.

Another thing is there are quite a few creative moments throughout. For example, the Leave yourself to you poem touches on themes of surrender, identity, and detachment. Lines like "don't think much of what you have done don't think much of what you need to do" have a kind of meditative, almost stoic mindset. The tone being so introspective is what gives this poem its charm, and I liked it! Even when the poems aren't following an obvious rhythm or structure, they feel cohesive and like they belong, which I appreciated.

Suggestion-wise, not much! My only suggestion for this category is there could be some tweaks to how much is packed into one line, as occasionally there was a lot all at once. Lines like "If this home is my sole identity then I have failed to understand myself for an eternity, at end nothing matters as such, so..." (Leave yourself to you) pack a lot of ideas into a small space. Good ideas, don't get me wrong, though breaking this into shorter segments or rephrasing for clarity might allow the emotional weight to land even stronger than they already do.

But, overall, that's a small thing in an otherwise very, very creative collection, so this section deserves a high score!

Timelessness: 8/10. This is the memorability and emotions category, and I think your themes and emotions are awesome here! I love the concept behind this collection where it's all about the heart, making everything feel cohesive and fun to read. This is probably the most cohesive collection in this category, so great job with that!

I Am was my favorite poem of the bunch, as it had memorable lines like "In this paradox of existence." Those kinds of lines stand out and present the theme in such an interesting way. That poem, in general, was very good and did a good job displaying its themes in a succinct manner. It wasn't too long, but it also wasn't short enough that I felt like there wasn't enough content.

Another example is in the The Walls poem, there were great lines like the opening being "The day ends, almost every day, with a question." That's an awesome line that sets the tone instantly, and it's also just plain memorable. That's a line that will stick with me. Even if that right there was the entire poem, it'd be memorable, so you do a good job with your openings and endings!

As you can probably tell based on the high score, I don't have much in terms of suggestions. I typically do this section last in my reviews, so all of my suggestions were written already or will be written. I had the suggestions about considering tweaking some of the lines to potentially strengthen some emotions, and I have some flow tweaks that could be made that I'll get into soon. Overall, though, the emotions were strong and made for a highly memorable collection!

Structure: 8/10. The structure present throughout the collection is good! There are many poems that feel well-structured and like they have clear technical and creative structure, making for the best of both worlds!

One example of great structure was The Walls, where the final lines introduced a subtle twist regarding the walls: "praying the walls never get their freedom of speech and expression." It's witty, original, and even slightly chilling. In my opinion, this shift brings tension and personality, which elevates the poem's emotions, and all of that is possible thanks to the way you built the emotions over time.

When the structure is good, there isn't too much to say other than it was good, so you did a great job!

When it comes to suggestions, there were some moments the language felt a tad inconsistent (tonally, anyway). In the Envisage poem, for example, the stanzas have emotional clarity and specificity, while the intro and outro lean a little more abstract and philosophical. If the poem struck more of a balance either by slightly simplifying the frame, or deepening the imagery all throughout, it could help the poem feel more cohesive.

Another thing is there could be more sensory details in certain areas. In The Walls, there are lines like "concrete walls held together by silence." That's a great line that's vivid and sets the tone, though some other moments could benefit from more sensory language to ground the emotional state. What does the room feel like? Are there specific sounds, shadows, or textures that could amplify the mood? Now, I'm not saying that's necessary by any means as I still overall like the poem and the lines throughout it, but it's something worth considering for future works. Overall, though, the structure was great and deserves a high score!

Flow: 7.5/10. The flow throughout the collection was good, with there being many solid lines that flowed off the tongue well and made sense for the narrative you chose to go with. I mentioned some lines earlier that stood out and made each poem feel fresh and unique, but I'll give some more. I want to bring up The Walls again since it was so good: the repetition of the grand question of why was interesting, and starting the poem the way you did was awesome!

Another example would be the ending of the poem Vicariously through my mind, which tied up the poem exactly as needed. It rhymed and was just a general banger of an ending line that flowed super well. Or the opening of Silent Observer, with the first two lines setting the tone immediately and starting off in a thought-provoking manner.

Everything rolled off the tongue well and narratively made sense. The way the emotions were built up over time, even if that time was very short, was great!

Suggestion-wise, I have a couple of critiques that I'll leave below.

There are some occasional moments of awkward phrasing. Let's look at this: "now, that you have ascended this mortal realm"

And: "improvise these incidents Written under destiny's poetic license"

These lines have good ideas, but they can feel a bit stiff or overwritten compared to the rest. A simpler or more grounded phrasing might make these framing lines more emotionally direct and tonally consistent with the rest of the poem.

There are some slight rhythm inconsistencies as well. For example: "on his shoulder so petite and trivial"

Here, that line feels a little clunky in comparison to more fluid lines like "a mother who just got sent in response to her prayers..."

So, a few trims or rephrased lines could help the poem's rhythm breathe more naturally.

Similarly, sometimes there are lines that could be tweaked to stick to the style of the poems. For example, from The Walls: "Every general or questioning conversation Requires a speaker and listener." These lines felt a little too matter-of-fact in a poem that otherwise leans into lyrical and emotional territory. For these kinds of lines, consider reworking or tightening so they flow more poetically.

Overall, though, the flow is pretty solid and does a good job keeping the reader immersed.

Album Presentation: 8/10. The title is spelled as The ANATOMY of HEART, which is interesting capitalization, and the title also fits in perfectly with the concept of the collection, which is great. I feel it could flow smoother as The ANATOMY of the HEART since Heart typically needs an article, but I can understand why you omitted it. All in all, it's a good title.

As for the blurb, this is the blurb:

Though anatomically same,
Every heart is different-
Each singing a unique song

A book where stories are told in verses~

This is interesting and hints at what's to come. There could be more detail given (when I say "more detail," I mean like one or two more sentences more clearly establishing the poetry collection and what your goals are with it), but it's still overall a good blurb with good grammar, it's just a tad vague, that's all. Still, I like the poem you included in the blurb and found it intriguing!

As for the cover, it's a great cover, as I alluded to in the ROTY introduction chapter. I love the image chosen and the way the font of Heart has a retro vibe to it, almost like a TV screen or something. The colors are consistent and are visually appealing, and the cover being of an actual heart makes sense considering what the collection is about. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the cover!

Total: 39.5/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) Anchor by Novo Amor (Not Explicit)

- This is a beautiful love song meant to have comforting vibe, and that it does. It's a great song on its own, but I think it works as a good one to open this playlist since it sets the tone for the heart well!

2) Hours by Josh Makazo (Not Explicit)

- This song is a little more RNB than the previous song, but it carries the same theme of devotion and love to another, which I think is perfect for a collection about all the fundamentals of the heart. This song has an almost melancholy feel to it as the singer searches through his memory for the one he loves, spending all his hours thinking of his lover. For those reasons, I think it's perfect for this collection!

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

2nd Place

Secrets of the Shadows by Sohinigoswami

Review:

Creativity: 9/10. All of the ideas presented throughout the collection are good! There are some in there from my prompt contest, so I've already seen them, and then there are others that are completely unique. Basically every poem experimented with a new style, making everything feel fresh every time I pressed continue. Not a single poem ever got bland or felt like the style was repetitive because you were pushing yourself to try new things. This collection really did feel like secrets of the shadows, but like the shadows of a poet's mind unveiling more the more new poems you post.

The ideas felt cohesive despite all of them feeling so different because they were united by your passion for the words you were saying, almost like I could feel them oozing off the screen and into my mind. Okay, sure, maybe I'm being dramatic, but I'm a redheaded Cancer who can't grow past 5'2 despite being in my twenties, so can you really blame me for being dramatic? The point remains that the collection is beyond creative and did a stellar job not only choosing ideas but also presenting them on the page, but I'll talk more about the awesome execution in the next three sections.

Suggestion-wise, not too much, as you can probably tell based on the near-perfect score. I don't give out 9s very often, especially in specialized categories where the judging is stricter, so really the tiniest of things factored into the score. Really the only suggestion I have is there were unclear moments that hurt the overall emotional impact of the piece and occasionally held the ideas back. However, I have an explanation for this written later already, so I'll let future me explain. I don't want to take off much for it, though, because I think this poetry collection is extremely creative and deserves a high score not only in this section but as a whole in this contest.

Timelessness: 9/10. This section judges the memorability and emotional impact of the piece, almost like an overall score of the work right in the beginning of the criteria. Here, I'd say your poems are pretty memorable. All of them have memorable lines and stanzas, and they experiment with their styles so much that you remember them based on that experimentation alone, and they're topped off by awesome themes.

For example, Silent echo was a fantastic poem with an amazing opening: "Tell me what you wanna hear, a love sonnet or an elegy for your dear?" That's a great opening! The "wanna" felt like it could have been "want to" considering the elegance of the poem (so the slang "wanna" was a tad out of place, in my opinion), but honestly, when the opening line is that banging, who cares about essentially a couple letter difference? It's an awesome opener either way, and it set the tone immediately.

Mourning bird was another good one (they're all good, but y'know, just thought I'd point out some of my favorites). I commented on it a while ago, and returning to it again for this contest brought me back to those emotions. I loved the repetition of asking the mourning bird what it was truly mourning for. Like another commenter said, it's very interesting how this is a mourning bird, not a morning bird, making for a nice twist on the concept, and I'm also glad this one was shorter. You have longer poems, though this one felt like it needed to be short, so that was a good choice to heighten the emotional impact.

The play, pause, replay refrain in the poem of the same name was another interesting creative decision that amplified the emotions readers felt. Just three words, yet their placement within the text is what gave them such strength, and there are creative decisions like those littered around the entire collection, making for a read that never dulled!

Suggestion-wise, just like the last section, not much. It's a near-perfect score for a reason: this is a very memorable collection. All of my suggestions will be explained in the next two sections, though to strengthen the emotional impact further, there are some tweaks I recommend to the general flow and occasional disjointedness, but I'll go over it more in the next two sections.

Overall, though, the poems were all emotional and featured great themes I think will stick with readers.

Structure: 8/10. If I'm not mistaken, I've said this in the past about your work, but I'm gonna say it again and probably will say it again the next time I review your work, too: I think your dedication to playing around with your structures pays off, as your poems feel like individual tales, yet at the same time, they feel like they belong in the collection. Nothing feels out of place, and I didn't have to reread anything because I felt like I didn't understand it or there were big errors that took me out of the collection. There were some small errors I'll cover in the next section, but nothing major that broke immersion, which is great.

Every poem experiments with some new style and/or theme, and I really respect that. There's nothing I encourage more than truly experimenting with your writing, because even if it doesn't work, at least you tried a new style and expanded your horizons. But either way, the experimentation works in your favor since it gives us readers a chance to see all the new concepts you have in your mind, and I wanted to appreciate that. The structure of this collection is overall great and works super well.

Suggestion-wise, not much, just some small things. I don't have many critiques for this collection as a whole, just some minor tweaks that could help with readability and emotional impact. I'm best at explaining with examples, so let's look at one below.

From timetorn: "neither tears nor petrichor." Here, this line is atmospheric, but pairing them feels slightly disjointed, and by that I mean the abstract and the sensory feel like they don't fully blend here. Similarly, "smudged blues form a crown of frowns" is visually interesting, but might be a bit too playful-sounding for the otherwise heavy tone, and tweaking it could be beneficial to further bringing out the emotions.

From Play, pause, replay: "I remember forgiving as soon as it left your lips—they caught mine in a kiss—for I had never tasted an apology before; it tasted sweet."

Here, this line felt unnecessarily long, especially when compared to the others since it stands out for being the longest in the entire poem—by far, too. That's not inherently a bad thing by any means, but it could be interesting to tweak it, as it feels a bit weighed down by the em dashes and semicolon. Tightening the line or breaking it a bit differently could help the punch land more cleanly and clearly. When it comes to em dashes, I recommend using them very, very sparingly, as they can really bring the pacing to a halt depending on how they're used.

Overall, the structure is very good throughout the collection, and everything felt cohesive.

Flow: 8/10. There is a lot of unique word choice that bring the lines together and make for a steady flow. For example, from timetorn, the opening line being "Fresh pages of ink irk me..." was a fresh (pun intended) set of words I've never seen before. Ink is irking the narrator? How does that happen? That just makes me curious to read on and see what's going to occur, so you did a great job sparking intrigue with that initial hook.

The vellichor makes another appearance here. Dreaming of freedom had it, too, so it makes the poems feel connected when you have that throughline, but it also didn't become so frequent that it became repetitive, making for nice balance.

Another thing is many of the poems have great creative choices. For example, in dreaming freedom, the lack of strict punctuation along with the capitalization work with the tone, not against it, and it's almost like the piece reads like someone processing trauma or heartbreak mid-thought, which adds to the realism and emotional weight.

All of the poems have a unique emotional element heightened by those kinds of creative decisions that flowed well within each poem, so great job with that!

Suggestion-wise, just a couple of things where there were some minor moments where I felt the text was either unnecessarily unclear or could have been tweaked.

Examples from dreaming freedom:

"cutting all strings, setting them free and then cutting all lose strings". Did you mean "loose" here? The "lose" sounds off, and I would recommend spelling it as loose.

From Play, pause, repeat, there's another moment where there seems to be a spelling error with this: "Drowing, drowning". I would recommend tweaking that to be drowning.

Another example: "jog up much of my fading visionary" (dreaming freedom) could be potentially smoother as "jog much of my fading visionary." But just potentially, not definitely, as it depends on your vision for the piece.

So these are small things, but sometimes it felt like there were typos or like the flow could be tweaked just a tad by tweaking some of the word choice, as shown above. Overall, though, the flow is very good and does a great job keeping the reader immersed in the work!

Album Presentation: 8/10. The title is Secrets of the Shadows, which is a good title that fits in with what you're trying to convey with this poetry collection. It's capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, and it attracted me upon first viewing. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the title.

As for the blurb, it lets the reader know what they're getting into. You state it's a sad/dark poetry collection and even have content warnings at the end, which is a nice touch. It's a more cinematic blurb where you explain the concept in an abstract way, which I found interesting.

Suggestion-wise, it could be a tad smoother. Here's the first sentence: Shadows are pretty sweet as shade from the afternoon sun yet it is shadows that we fear while out on an evening run. And here's the fourth sentence: Except when it's the night and we realise our cold lonely souls cannot find peace without seeing them for we all fear the unknown.

For those two sentences, I would recommend some clarity. If you read them out loud, you may notice that their flow could be improved since they sound a bit jumbled.

Consider: Shadows are sweet as shade from the afternoon sun, yet it is shadows we fear while on an evening run.

I just removed a couple of words and added a comma, but I kept the core of the sentence the same. If you read the first version of the sentence out loud and then the revised version, you may notice how much smoother the revision rolls off the tongue, and it feels more poetic, hence why I'd recommend considering tweaking it.

And: Except when it's night, and we realise our cold, lonely souls cannot find peace without seeing them, for we all fear the unknown.

Here, all I did was remove "the" from "the night" and added commas, but no other changes to the word choice. I can understand breaking punctuation rules in poetry, but the blurb here is not a poem, and there are other commas in the blurb, so excluding them from those two sentences I pulled as examples was a bit inconsistent, hence why I recommend including the commas so the sentences flow a bit stronger. Otherwise, though, the blurb is good.

As for the cover, it's a beautiful cover. It's visually cohesive with all the text hierarchy looking fluid. The butterfly image with the skulls instead of wings is extremely interesting and fits a poetry collection—especially a dark one—well. The font fits in with the overall style, and the cover is very visually appealing. For those reasons, I have no critiques!

Total: 42/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) We Lost by Lorien Testard (Not Explicit)

- Okay, maybe I should stop recommending Expedition 33 music since I acknowledge my personal bias toward it (it's my favorite game ever created), but come on, this powerful instrumental is just an absolute banger. Considering there are powerful poems in your collection, I think this fits well. It's great for the poems like Happy ruination, in my opinion.

2) Watching planes take off by Lloyd Vaan (Not Explicit)

- Contrary to the previous track, this instrumental is far calmer to reflect the calmer pieces. It's a beautiful track that feels like walking through a beautiful forest. Maybe even a magical forest. Am I just being dramatic? Maybe, but what better time to be dramatic than when talking about art?

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

1st Place

Scarred Hearts Seldom Bleed by MonochromeSayantan

Review:

Creativity: 10/10. This collection of poems not only experiments with its themes but also its style. There are elegies, lyrics, sonnets, and far more, so when it comes to the structure of the work, it's diverse. The very first poem is an alliteration poem that uses only A words, which I thought was a creative way to start off the collection!

Every poem felt like a new roller coaster ride. There were engaging themes presented in engaging ways with fresh word choice and metaphors, and I'll get into the awesome lines I liked in the later sections, but for now, just know I loved a lot of lines and stanzas throughout my reading experience, and I thought all of your ending lines were excellent.

I also appreciate that you gave footnotes and your little thoughts on all of the poems. It's always nice to see what a poet thinks about their work, and having those footnotes gave great insights. I hope you keep doing them! On behalf of readers, or at least me, I'm always reading a/ns to see the poet's/writer's thoughts, so I really liked those footnotes!

Overall, the creativity of this collection was outstanding, and I have no criticisms for the creativity here. I was never bored or found myself thinking the poems were starting to sound the same, which can sometimes happen when I'm reading a collection. All of the poems were unique structurally and also had great themes to take them to the next level.

Timelessness: 9/10. This section refers to how memorable the poems are, and how they feel like they'll stand the test of time. For me personally, I really enjoyed these poems and thought all of them stood out in their unique way. Not only are all of them creative with different structures, flows, and themes, but they're also creative in terms of the general word choice and experimentation. Every poem brings something new to the table, and there wasn't a single one I didn't enjoy, which is not a statement I make lightly or one I'm saying to butter you up—I genuinely enjoyed all of them.

There are countless lines and stanzas that I loved and had to sit there and stare at my screen for a moment after reading. Sometimes when you read something that impactful, you do need to take a moment to just chill and recalibrate, y'know? So I was very pleased with my reading experience here and thought you knocked it out of the park. It's safe to say this collection is one that's going to stick with me, and that means you deserve an extremely high score for this category.

Suggestion-wise, not much. I just have some suggestions I'll go over in the next two sections about how there could be some smoothening in some areas to make everything feel more cohesive and, by extension, potentially strengthen the emotional impact even further, but otherwise, the poems all feel very memorable and like they do their jobs to stick with the reader. I'll go over my suggestions with examples in the next two sections.

Overall, the poems all convey incredible themes with great writing to make them stand out from other poems on the site.

Structure: 8/10. The structures of the poems are all very good. I'm so glad you decided to experiment with your writing and work with new kinds of poems. Starting off the poem with an experimental alliteration poem was a risky move, but it paid off since it caught my attention and set the tone for the rest of the collection. I'm also glad the collection was relatively short. I have no issue with longer collections, though there's something satisfying about reading all these poems in one sitting and having the time to reflect, since sometimes it takes a really long time to read those longer collections.

I felt like the very structure of which poems you chose to publish in which order was great, as every poem felt like it flowed into one another, even the one you wrote in the past moving into the lyrical poem after it. Every poem felt purposefully placed, which not only gave the collection good structure but good flow as well. All really good stuff!

Suggestion-wise, there were some moments where the lines felt like they could have been tweaked. I'll talk about the Ink of Memories poem, for example.

In that poem, there were a couple of lines that didn't feel as natural as they could have. For example: "To the remnants of ruined reminiscences of a realm of repose..."

That line started to get a little long/started to drag a bit for me. I was wondering what the purpose of the reminiscences was since the line seems to work without it as simply "To the remnants of a ruined realm of repose." I can understand wanting to make it sound more like a fragmented memory or something of the sort, though for me, the line just started to get a little lengthy because of it, and the alliteration felt a tad forced.

Another thing is phrases like "remnants of ruined reminiscences" or "withering memories" double-down on the emotional tone of nostalgia, and while the tone works well within the poem, too much layering might lead weaken the impact. Some variation, like tension, hope, or even irony, could give it more dimension, but that's just a could be and not a must, so it's something worth considering but not something I'm saying you have to do.

Lastly, there was this line: "The light now does behind the darkness hide!" I felt this line could have been rephrased a bit since its structure felt a bit reversed/unnatural. I kinda get what you're trying to say here with it, though if you read it out loud, you may notice how it sounds a bit awkward and could be rephrased.

Overall, the structure of the poems was very good, and your experimentation with the structure paid off and made for awesome lines, stanzas, and overall poems.

Flow: 8/10. There was very solid word choice present throughout the poems. For example, the last line of the second poem, "Like my whispering goodbye," ended the poem on a chilling note that I loved. It was great within the context of the poem, but even outside of context, it's a great line that surprised me, but in the best way possible.

In general, there are so many memorable stanzas and lines from this compilation. Even when I have critiques, I still think the lines are bangers, and that includes this one, which is my favorite from the entire piece:

You'll laugh not because you've lost your love,

But because you've had one (poem 7).

What a banger. Those are awesome lines that made me stop and say, "Wow." I had to take a break to process them. What I admire most about these two lines is the fact that they really are pretty simple. There's no complex vocabulary or sentence structure: it's just a good use of words. You have the poems full of the complex side of language, and then you have this simple yet powerful piece that says so much with so few words, and I wanted to take a moment to appreciate that.

Of course, it's fine and even recommended to have complex imagery and language, especially in poetry, but I honestly think the most impressive authors/poets are the ones who manage to say so much with simplistic language and smaller bursts of words rather than full paragraphs. So I just wanted to take a moment to appreciate how you not only have impactful poems with complex language, but also how you take more simplistic language and make it something special.

Word choice-wise, not much to say in terms of suggestions. There are some words I noticed you liked to use a lot, and downsizing on them could be beneficial, like oscillating is a word I noticed quite a few times throughout. For example, I noticed oscillating used three times in a row in poems 3, 4, and 5. I'm not really taking poem 3 into account for the general score since you wrote that one in the past, but oscillating is still present in 4 and 5 as well. Downsizing on using that word could be beneficial since it's clear you're very good with language, so some diversity with those kinds of words could be beneficial and also a fun challenge.

Onyx and forms of adorn (whether it be just adorn or adorned) are more examples of words that were used somewhat frequently. I typically advise against using words like onyx, adorned, and cascaded too much anyway since they're extremely, extremely common. I actually struggle to remember the last time I read something that hasn't had those words in it, often on more than one occasion, so I typically advise against those words more than once, even in a collection of varying poems, except for in rare cases. So none of these things are big deals, but still something worth mentioning.

This is a really small thing, though in your dark poem, In the Vales of Death, it ends with this: Never did Death feel so blissful, except that one time! Awesome line—all of your ending lines are good—though my one very minor critique is I feel it didn't need the ! at the end. I know it's such a small thing, though considering the darker tone and somber language, having the sudden exclamation felt a bit unnecessary, though that could be just a me thing. Still a good ending line either way, and the capitalization of Death was great.

Overall, the flow of the poems was great and kept me immersed the entire time. There were amazing lines and stanzas that caught my eye, and the word choice was all in all good.

Album Presentation: 8/10. Scarred Hearts Seldom Bleed is the title of this poetry collection, and I think that title works well! It's capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines (which is just what I go by for reviews since it's easier), and it definitely has a poetic feel to it. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the title.

As for the blurb, it's exactly what it needs to be. It directly says this is a collection of romantic poems and then neatly lists the themes. There are no SPAG errors, and it's short and to the point without being vague or over-the-top. That's exactly what a poem collection needs. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the blurb!

As for the cover, the background image is perfect. It matches the title exactly as needed and is visually appealing. The simplistic background color and font/font color also made for a great cover. My main suggestion is it could be interesting if the cover were a bit bigger. And by that I mean it could be beneficial if the image and font took up more of the screen, as it feels a bit small and like there's a lot of blank space. But other than that, I liked the cover.

Total: 43/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) Calico by DPR Ian (Not Explicit)

- DPR Ian is truly an underrated artist, as all of his songs are so full of meaning (and also just bangers). Calico is a metaphor for the feeling of disappointment you get from being taken advantage of. DPR Ian is known for using abstract metaphors, such as his song No Blueberries, where the blueberries are a metaphor for his battles with his inner demons and how the blueberries represent a catalyst for a mood shift (in his case, it has to do with bipolar). Songs are like poetry, right? DPR Ian takes his music and makes it all poetic and full of figurative language, hence why I think his entire discography fits this collection, but I think Calico is a good one to start with since it has the right vibe for the collection, and it's also a great metaphor.

2) Let You Break My Heart Again by Laufey (Not Explicit)

- This beautiful song is a bit different from the previous song, but I don't know, I feel like it fits the collection well, so I have to include it despite the differences. It's an adorable song that feels like the kind of song you'd listen to while reading poetry, y'know? So, for those reasons, I think it's the perfect song for this collection!

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

Honorable Mention

Abyss ~ Poetry by thetorturedpoetess

Review:

Creativity: 8/10. The idea behind this collection was good. I read it from Numb upwards since that's the publication order, and it really felt like falling into an abyss, like an ethereal journey where you're taking us with you through cycles of emotions. I'll go into the specific poems I particularly liked throughout the review, but speaking generally, the collection is packed with emotions and unique themes that makes it stand out. You also play around with your structures and styles, making it so the poems all feel fresh and different from one another, but it's also not so different that they feel like they don't belong in the collection. They all fit the overall vibe of the collection, if that makes sense. There's just a certain atmosphere this collection has, and all of the poems feel like they just fit, y'know?

But, anywho, that aside, the general creativity of this collection is good, and it's oozing with cool themes/concepts that you explored well with solid lines and stanzas I think will make every reader interested in reading more. I'll give some more specific examples of things I liked later on, but for now, just know I liked the creativity!

Suggestion-wise, not much, as you can probably tell based on the high score. My main one was I wasn't a huge fan of the underlining in the first few poems. Many of the words underlined felt random, and it also sometimes led to the underline expanding into the space beyond the word. Not a big deal by any means, but eliminating the underline under the space between words could help with readability. That said, that's a nitpick more than anything, and the main thing is to consider less underline since there was a lot of it, and I wasn't entirely sure of its purpose since it wasn't just one poem, but it also wasn't all of them.

There were also some times where the lines could have been downsized on, but I'll get into that in the flow category.

Overall, the collection has strong creativity that kept me engaged!

Timelessness: 8/10. This category refers to how emotional and memorable the collection is, and as you can probably tell based on the high score, I thought they were very emotional and memorable! I'll give some examples of what I liked below, but just as an overall to start, I thought the emotions you chose to write about were very good.

My personal favorite was Kings And Queens, as I thought the flow of that one in particular was great, and the last few lines were amazing. I loved the theme and how every line built up and up until the end, almost like we were there within the world of the poem, dancing with it. It felt like a mix between a cinematic story and an outsider's point of view, where we went back and forth between getting a personal look at the characters and a more general look at the themes. It was a great balance and strong narrator voice.

Another thing is I liked the personification of love in Love : A Mystery and how you capitalized It in this line: And to be honest, It doesn't care. The full stops/periods after every line was a nice touch, too, giving the poem more weight. The punctuation throughout the entire collection felt very purposeful and powerful.

So, as you can tell, I liked the collection quite a bit and don't have many suggestions! I write this section last, so the suggestions I have tend to be saved for later or were already said in the creativity category. There were some moments the text could have been downsized and more fluid to help bring out more emotions, though that's not a huge deal, and I also thought the underlining took away a little bit from the emotions in the most recent poems, but I'll explain the fluidity more later, and I already talked about the underlining, so I won't go over it again here. All in all, the poems here are very emotional and stand out from other collections on Wattpad!

Structure: 7.5/10. I think the structure of the poems is pretty good! The lines often feel complete and emotional, making them stand out and properly convey the messages you want to convey. I mentioned earlier that I particularly liked Kings and Queens, and the structure in that poem felt cohesive and easy to read!

Outside the technical structure, there is also good general narrative structure. For example, I Don't Wanna Fall In Love begins with the speaker in denial (hence the title of the poem), but then it cycles through inner conflict, nostalgia, desire, fantasy, self-doubt, and ends with a kind of resignation, but a quiet one. It's a journey that feels like it comes full circle in a satisfying way. It's not the fairy tale the narrator might yearn for, but it is a satisfying conclusion and even more emotionally impactful because it's not some fairy tale: it's honest. So that narrative cohesion was interesting and made for good narrative structure.

Suggestion-wise, I have three, but all three are smaller things. One is you may want to consider spacing out Numb more. Not only do I think this could elevate the emotions of numbness by isolating more lines (i.e., maybe the bold & underlined sentences are separated from the stanzas), but it can also help with the readability.

I'm only going to mention it since I already talked about it, but the underlining threw the structure off a bit for me, but I only wanted to mention it briefly, so let's get into the next small thing.

Structurally, I is inconsistently capitalized in I Don't Wanna Fall In Love. It's not a big deal by any means, though some more consistency with if you capitalize i or not could be beneficial, as the lowercase felt purposeful, but the capitalizations did not, at least in my interpretation.

Overall, the structure is pretty good, and I only had a few recommendations.

Flow: 7/10. When it comes to the flow, I'd say it's pretty good! The poems roll off the tongue well and feel well-planned, well-written, and well-executed. The ideas and creativity are there, and the words on paper effectively give them more weight.

Along with that, there were many moments throughout that I loved. Some examples:

"butterflies of giddiness" stored in a "deep dark dreary hole"

"wilter the flowers, shut the window, kill the butterflies"

"dash of desired destiny... not gonna turn out to be a bittersweet victory"

All of these metaphors are vivid, and the speaker's internal conflict is shown clearly through those types of lines. There are also many smaller details that support these already great lines. By that I mean the lines about finding "small notes and letters" and dancing in the rain all make the imagined love feel more raw, and by extension, that also makes the loss of it more impactful.

Long story short: these details ground the reader in the text and convey the emotions effectively. So, all in all, when it comes to the flow, there are awesome lines and moments where the language is vivid and really hooks us in.

Suggestion-wise, there were some grammatical tweaks that could help with the flow. I'll give some examples below.

From Numb:

That sucked out the happiness out of her rosy cheeks

Consider: That sucked the happiness out of her rosy cheeks

Also from Numb:

because the world is no more willing to lend a ear.

Consider: because the world is no more willing to lend an ear.

Though even with the grammatical tweak there, it's a good stanza, so it's not a big deal.

Another suggestion I have is to consider downsizing at times. Throughout the poems, some lines felt a bit overexplained or wordy. I'll give some examples below.

"the fairytale which is a blissful mixture of a pinch of pure perfection, a dash of desired destiny, a tablespoon of elation..."

These kinds of lines are creative, don't get me wrong, but also perhaps a bit long-winded. One thing to consider is if streamlining the metaphor might give it more punch.

Another example: "in cages of torture so that it will perish to death" (ity). Here, perish means death, so there's no need for the "to death," otherwise the line is essentially saying "in cages of torture so that it will suffer death to death," so that's one area where the words can be downsized on by removing the "to death."

I don't mean to sound like a broken record, but another thing is what I mentioned with the underline where it disrupted the flow a bit for me. I read it in reverse order since that's the order it was published in (starting from Numb), so the underlining popping up later and then staying was a bit hard to adjust to for me, especially since when it was briefly put in other poems, like Numb, it felt far more purposeful, so that's just a small thing but still worth mentioning.

Overall, the flow is pretty good and features many good lines and metaphors that kept the reader immersed, there could just be some tweaks to the grammar and occasional wordiness of the text.

Album Presentation: 8/10. The title is Abyss ~ Poetry, and seeing as the general concept of the collection is misery, that makes sense! It's capitalized correctly, sets up what the collection is going to be about, and ties in with the blurb, therefore I have no criticisms!

As for the blurb, this is the blurb:

maybe this is how its meant to be :
me, floating in the abyss of my misery

This is an interesting blurb that reflects on the title nicely with pretty good grammar as well. Everything is spelled correctly and makes sense. The suggestion I have, though, is to consider giving a little more detail, maybe like have that opening and then underneath it have a brief summary (even just one to two sentences is fine; poetry collections don't need anything complex, in my opinion) selling the readers on what they're about to read (i.e., letting them know the themes of the poems you're writing, if there's a particular structure/style you mostly write in, if you take requests, etc.) could be interesting to see, as the blurb is the area where you really hook the readers and sell them on clicking on the first chapter. Overall, though, I still like how the blurb currently there ties into the Abyss title, as that was a nice touch!

As for the cover, it's a simplistic cover of a forest with the name and poet's name. I like the font on the Abyss and thought it matched the background image and overall tone of the cover well. It's a simple cover, but it works since it reflects exactly what the collection is going to be about. For those reasons, I have no criticisms.

Total: 38.5/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) My Tears Are Becoming A Sea by M83 (Not Explicit)

- M83, truly one of my favorite artists right now due to songs like this, where the song is ethereal and sounds like you're floating. Considering this collection makes you feel like you're floating emotion-wise, I feel this song reflects that well. It's also just a great song with powerful emotions poured into it.

2) milk cassette x.mp3 (slowed) by analog_mannequin (Not Explicit)

- This slow instrumental has a calming vibe for reading a poetry collection. Like the previous song, it feels like the kind of song you'd listen to while floating away, which I think fits in with the whole Abyss theme you have going on here. It's also just a banger of an instrumental, and I chose the slowed version since I think it better reflects the mood of the story.

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

Honorable Mention

How I'm Feeling by Pviscelle

Review:

Creativity: 7/10. The idea behind this poetry collection is good and is the heart of what poetry should be: emotions. This quite literally is a poem collection about feelings and the bottled-up experience they bring, so I thought the general idea of the collection and its execution was interesting and creative. There were also great moments and full poems that were oozing with creativity, like the opening poem, Hell. I thought that was a great opener that set the tone for the rest of the collection well. It was personal, emotional, and powerful, which reflects on your creativity and the way you said so much with so little. So, all in all, good job with the creativity and how you executed said creative ideas!

Suggestion-wise, for future poetry collections you may post, my main recommendation would be to consider expanding and experimenting more with the work, as the majority of the poems could be read in a matter of seconds and had very similar structures. Now, to be fair, brevity is the soul of wit, so I'm not saying long = good since it's actually the opposite in creative writing, though what I am saying is it could be interesting to see you expand on some concepts since the vast majority of the poems are extremely short. For example, His and Lost I felt could have been expanded upon since there were interesting concepts. I was curious to know more about who "his" was and what the theme of the poem could have been. Same with Lost where it introduced an interesting concept but felt like it was cut short. Not all of the short poems felt this way—like Hell, for example, felt like it was the perfect length and required that briefness—though some could have been expanded upon, if that makes sense.

Overall, this is a creative idea for a poetry collection, and the execution is pretty solid, too.

Timelessness: 7.5/10. This is the memorability category, judging how memorable and emotional your poems are, and I'd say they're pretty emotional and memorable! The Shadow and Hell poems in particular stood out to me as emotional and memorable, with Hell toying with so many emotions with so few words, and Shadow being a bit longer than the average poems and using that length effectively to bring about unique ideas. The Glistening Sun line, for example, was a great line, and I also loved the line "Eternities are brief to last." Those kinds of powerful lines are the ones that will really stick with your audience and punch them in the gut, and I mean that in the best way possible. Never thought a punch would be fun and positive, but in this case, yep, a gut punch is good!

Suggestion-wise, this category is almost like an accumulation of everything I have to say, so all of my suggestions either have been or will be said. My suggestions are that it could be interesting if in future works some of these kinds of emotions you covered here were explored in further detail, giving us the audience more time to see your creative mind and ideas. There are also some critiques I have of the flow and structure that could help really emphasize the emotions, but I'll get into that in the next two sections.

Overall, this poetry collection is memorable and has strong emotions present throughout displayed through unique, powerful lines.

Structure: 8/10. The structure present throughout is good. The poems feel like they all belong in the collection, as they all cover a unique emotion. Sometimes it even feels more stream-of-consciousness, and I mean that in a good way where the poems feel very raw, which fits in with the general structure (and concept for the collection) you're going for here. The poems themselves are structured correctly as far as I can tell, so that's good to see! When the structure is good, there's not much else to say except that it was technically good, so great job!

Suggestion-wise, not too much. Tonally, sometimes the tone shifts a bit between different subjects. For example, from Shadow, the tone shifts between romantic warmth and cosmic metaphor ("glistening Sun," "eternities," "heavens can be split"). Both work well, but the transitions between them could be smoothed for cohesion since these metaphors happen almost back-to-back and can have a little bit more time or transitions invested into them.

And also what I mentioned before where it could be interesting to see some more diversity with the structures. Some experimentation for what kind of poems you create and how they're formatted could be interesting. I.e., maybe a new poetic style for every new emotion you're experiencing that matches the emotions you're trying to present. That's just one random idea, but it's worth considering for future collections you may do.

Overall, the structure is pretty solid and works for the poetry collection.

Flow: 7/10. When it comes to the flow, it's all in all pretty good and keeps the poems moving at a good rate. I mentioned a few lines earlier that I particularly liked, but most of the lines throughout the collection were good and kept me interested. All of the lines are split where they need to be for the best emotional impact, leading to good flow throughout the collection. For example, from Hesitant, Stubborn, Scared:

There's so much to say,

Between us,

I thought it was great how you cut it at "between us" and separated it to further amplify the emotions there and bring the theme to the forefront. It's a small thing to point out, but these small moments are what make poetry great, and your collection is packed with small detail I loved!

Live Or Let Die is another one that has great flow not only with its structure but also its word choice, as I enjoyed all of the word choice throughout that poem. That was probably one of my favorites, and I actually read it more than once since I was hooked on it!

Suggestion-wise, just a few things to keep in mind for future works. Let's look at The Voice for this set of suggestions. The meter is irregular, which is fine in free verse, but here it feels like it wants to be rhythmic without fully committing, so lines like "I was no meaner for the last So I had moved" are slightly choppy. A more intentional line structure or rhythm could make the delivery smoother, but only could since it depends on your goals with the poem.

Here's a line from The Voice: The other with mists and dew. Here, some of the imagery could be sharpened a bit. Taking that mists and dew line, the phrase "mists and dew" is pretty, but the overall imagery in the poem is somewhat sparse. A bit more specificity could help deepen the mood without sacrificing the minimalist tone, but it really depends on how much imagery you want in each poem; it could just be interesting to see some more.

Like I mentioned earlier, some of the transitions between metaphors could also be tweaked, but that's a very small thing.

As for the SPAG, it's good, and I didn't notice any major errors that detracted from the flow!

Overall, the flow is pretty good throughout the collection and does a good job keeping the reader immersed.

Album Presentation: 9/10. The title is How I'm Feeling, which is capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, although I'm okay with different capitalization in poetry especially, but that's just a nice touch. It sounds exactly like a title I would expect to see on a poetry compilation, so it makes sense! No critiques of the title!

As for the blurb, it says exactly what the poetry collection is: a poetry collection featuring bottled-up emotions. That's what the collection is about, so, yeah, exactly what it needs to be, right? It could be interesting to get just a tad more detail about what kind of poetry you write, like maybe free verse or something, though poetry collections typically don't need any long blurbs or anything, so that's not a huge deal. It's all in all a good blurb.

As for the cover, it's awesome. Sulkytae did a great job with it. The font is unique, the image is colorful but consistent with its color scheme, and the image itself was a great choice for what the collection is about. It perfectly captures what the collection is going to be about, and for that reason, I have no critiques! I also like the cover you made for it that you showed in the cover chapter.

Total: 38.5/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) is this really it? by abandoned dog (Not Explicit)

- This song is an instrumental, though during the song, you can hear voices and even shouts in the background. I was sampling instrumentals for this category since I think instrumentals fit poetry really well (I feel you want something non-distracting while reading poetry, y'know?), and even though I was working on the playlist for another person, I had to stop as soon as I heard this song and come put it under your playlist since it just felt like a perfect representation of your collection. It felt like the emotions were bottled up and in the background, fighting to be heard over the music, but it's not loud. Both the music and shouts/voices are quiet (relatively), and they feel hidden. I thought it was a beautiful song that captures the essence of what this collection is about.

2) August Underground by Ethel Cain (Not Explicit)

- Ethel Cain is perfect for poetry collections, in my opinion. She's a wonderful artist with incredible lyricism, though this is one of her instrumentals with light vocals but no words. Like the previous song, I felt like this song just fit with your collection. All of Ethel's work kinda fits, though, so this is just scratching the surface.

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

ALL REVIEWS:

FEELINGS MEET FICTIONS by TEJALKAUR4554

*Note from Raven: You scored very highly and were so close to an honorable mention. For your hard work and high score, I will be giving additional votes and comments on a couple of your works as prizes for your amazing collection!

Review:

Creativity: 10/10. The creativity is off the charts here. This is an awesome idea for a poetry collection where the fiction you consumed growing up has now turned into your own work of art. Both of the poems in this collection are vastly different from each other yet still feel cohesive with the overall idea of the collection, with both being about figures in media, just presented differently where one is more of a narrative and the other is epistolary. I've only seen one poetry collection remotely similar to this, but it was about musicians, not fiction, so it's safe to say this collection is extremely unique, and it's also handled well from a writing perspective where the ideas are presented in solid ways!

For all the reasons listed above, I have no criticisms for the creativity and think you all in all did a good job not only thinking of ideas but bringing them to life on paper!

Timelessness: 7/10. This criteria refers to the emotional impact and general memorability of your poems, and here, I'd say your collection has a good presentation of the emotions that made it memorable!

The idea for the collection, like I mentioned in the previous section, was solid and memorable. It stands out from other collections and has the potential to keep growing and becoming even stronger than it already is. So when it comes to the concept, you did a great job!

As for the two poems in particular, they both have good emotions, too! For example, the second poem has a nice feeling of growing up and missing the presence of someone who shaped your childhood in a way that's hard to fully express. The nostalgic moments aren't just nostalgia—they have a lot of heart and soul and recreate the emotional moments, especially with how honest and specific the narrator's voice is, using lines like "The prank with the rat" to show specific memories without going overboard with them. I thought this made for a nice balance between progression within the letter and taking a moment to reflect on memories, so that's yet another thing you did awesome at!

Suggestion-wise, since this is like an accumulation section of my overall thoughts of the poems, I'll be going over my suggestions in the next two sections, though I mostly had suggestions regarding keeping the tone consistent since the tone did feel a tad inconsistent in certain areas, and I have other suggestions regarding diversifying word choice and tweaking the structure to help with readability. Making these tweaks could improve the emotional pay-off of each poem. But again, I'll get into these things later since I already wrote explanations for them in other sections (I write this section last, so everything's already been written). I still wanted to mention them, though, to explain the score.

Overall, the poems have strong emotional foundations and great potential. I'd be interested in seeing you expand on this collection since there is awesome creativity oozing from them that you have a knack for!

Structure: 7/10. I like how you used different structures for the two poems! The epistolary yet poetic format of the second poem was unique and caught my eye, but the first poem had good structure, too! Both of them did their jobs to enhance the narrative you were telling, and I found it interesting how both poems had a clear narrative that made these poems feel almost adventurous and like a journey.

Along with that, the structure of how the narrative itself unfolds is good. For example, in the first poem, there's a clear progression from shock and grief, to helpless anger, to magic and emotional reunion, and this clear arc gives it strong narrative structure. The moment when Ash begins to revive and Pikachu's "drowning universe strived up to the shore" is the cherry on top and a genuinely touching resolution.

In summary, both poems had interesting structure that kept me engaged!

Suggestion-wise, I have a couple. Firstly, there are some punctuation inconsistencies where sometimes it's correct and other times it's not. For example, from the second poem: "transformed my life , magnificently." Consider: "transformed my life, magnificently." And: "And all those times when we took revenge from Gian and Suneo ?" Consider: "And all those times when we took revenge from Gian and Suneo?" So there are occasional extra spaces between the words and punctuation. Not a big deal, but still something worth mentioning.

For the second poem, my second suggestion is to consider tweaking the structure with more paragraph breaks. It's a freeform poem/letter, so less breaks are expected, but breaking it into even just a few sections or stanzas could enhance readability. As it stands, it reads like a heartfelt prose letter in poetic language, and that's good don't get me wrong, but to emphasize the fact that it's epistolary, some formatting could help highlight the emotional beats.

There were also grammatical errors that impacted the sentence structure, but since that impacts the flow more than the structure, I will go over the errors there, but I thought I would mention it regardless since it does factor into this section as well.

Overall, the structures present throughout the two poems were good and matched what you were going for with the themes of the poems.

Flow: 7/10. The flow throughout the two poems is good! I thought you did a good job presenting your themes/concepts, and there were plenty of lines that I enjoyed.

For example, here are some lines from the first poem:

"Crystals of life"

"Just a matter of 'time' who played a cruel clown"

"Numb at the scene, lamenting their feelings and thoughts"

These were all lines that I enjoyed. Crystals of life was a metaphor for tears, and I thought that was very clever while also sounding pretty. Just a matter of time who played a cruel clown was another creative part with clever word choice. Numb at the scene, lamenting their feelings and thoughts is another great line that expands on the feeling of grief you were setting up.

The general voice of both pieces was also good. The voice is full of personality and style, making it more memorable as a result. It also flows well with the concept of the entire collection being about reflecting on childhood media, so I really enjoyed the general experience of reading since the voice was so clear!

Suggestion-wise, a few things. Firstly, I would very strongly recommend not using abbreviations in what is meant to be spoken dialogue. At the end of the first poem, there's this: " Tell me something I don't know. lol" , you said. Consider: "Tell me something I don't know," you said. Abbreviations can risk bringing the readers out of the text since most readers prefer not to see abbreviations like lol, omg, brb, etc. in works unless the characters are texting, hence why I recommend straying away from any abbreviations unless the characters are texting.

Grammatically, there are some moments where sentence structure becomes confusing or awkward. For example, from the first poem:

"The sight of your petrified body, so horror."

Consider: "so horrifying" or "such horror."

"Froze the blood in my veins like ice in glacier."

Consider: "like glacial ice" or "like ice in a frozen stream" or even "Froze the blood in my veins like a glacier."

"I would never it for the Universe"

Consider: "I would never trade it for the universe."

"Sorry for wrinkle on the paper"

Consider adding a "the," so "the wrinkle."

Another thing is the tone could be tweaked a bit. For the first poem, the tone shifts between dramatic (i.e., with lines like "Betrayer!") and sentimental (i.e., with lines like "my eyes felt so blessed"). Both tones work and aren't bad individually, but some transitions are abrupt. A little more consistency could improve the cohesion.

In terms of word choice, words like "life," "crying," "body," and "feelings" appear multiple times. This repetition isn't inherently bad, especially since there is a lot of repetition used in poetry, but some variation in language could benefit the emotions.

As for the second poem, the poem is a bit long, which is not necessarily a bad thing for a letter poem, but some sections meander slightly or repeat ideas. A few gentle trims could help maintain focus and emotional momentum, especially in the final third where themes of missing Doraemon reappear multiple times.

Overall, the flow is pretty good and does a good job keeping the reader immersed in the work, though there could be some tweaks to the grammar.

Album Presentation: 7/10. The title is FEELINGS MEET FICTIONS, which is in all caps and clearly purposefully so. It sums up exactly what this collection is about: your feelings regarding certain fiction works. I think the title could also work as FEELINGS MEET FICTION since fiction tends to flow off the tongue stronger as fiction instead of fictions, even when referring to multiple works, but considering the purpose of the collection, fictions works fine enough, too. It's a good title that works for the collection!

As for the blurb, it tells the audience what to expect and gives more detail than I think most if not all of the blurbs in this category, so you have a great advantage there. You tell us a quick backstory and then clearly state

This is the blurb: My childhood's source of entertainment was all about Shinchan, Doraemon, Pokemon and other amazing cartoons and Anime . I used to watch them for fun back then but now, as a teenager, I have a power of expressing feelings and emotions using words. So how about I unite my feelings with fictions and make something ineffable? (a collection of poems where the union of my feelings and my favourite fictions is cherished )

The creativity behind the blurb is good, and I have no critiques for that. The only critiques I have is it could be smoothened from a grammatical standpoint, as there are a couple of errors.

Consider: My childhood's source of entertainment was all about Shinchan, Doraemon, Pokémon, and other amazing cartoons and anime.
I used to watch them for fun back then, but now, as a teenager, I have the power to express emotions using words. So how about I unite my feelings with fictions and make something ineffable?
(a collection of poems where the union of my feelings and my favourite fictions is cherished)

I didn't make many changes, just removed "feelings" since feelings and emotions are basically the same, added some punctuation, and removed the extra space between cherished and the ). Other than the grammatical stuff, the blurb works!

As for the cover, it's cute! I like the bottom part of the cover and how it perfectly shows what the collection is going to be about. I also liked the font of the title card and thought it fit in with the overall tone of the cover and collection. The only suggestion I have is the top part with the hand heart felt a little unneeded, as the bottom of the cover perfectly shows the meaning of the collection and is visually cohesive. The bottom part could be shifted to be the entire cover, though that really depends on your goal with the cover. I'm far from a graphic designer, so I would definitely recommend getting a second opinion prior to making any changes. All in all, it's a good cover.

Total: 38/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) Lonestar by Monet Ngo (Not Explicit)

- I think this song is a great vibe-setter for the playlist. It's a cute song with a funky beat that isn't too loud or in your face. It's more laid back and reflective on the singer's life and love, which I think captures a dream-like feel that this collection is going for. For those reasons, I think this song is a good start to the playlist!

2) On My Way Out by Joji (Explicit—I don't know why Spotify has this marked as explicit, though, since there are no curses or graphic content, so I think it's a mistake on their part and not actually explicit, especially since I looked into it and couldn't find anyone else marking it as explicit)

- This beautiful song feels ethereal to listen to, almost like you're getting transported to another world, which I think fits the fiction theme you have going on here. It feels like floating away to somewhere in your mind, and I think that makes it the perfect choice for this collection's playlist!

Link to the playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

Luminous by canvas_of_words

Review:

Creativity: 7/10. This poetry collection is full to the brim with unique ideas. No one poem covers the same topic, and there are plenty of unique poems in here that intrigued me, like the that girl. poem that dealt with the want to be remembered, which isn't something I think I've seen done in poetry in a long time, so that was nice to see!

I think all of the topics you chose were phenomenal, like the gestures of kindness. poem commentating on how basic human decency has basically gone out the window nowadays. Destiny. was another good one with an awesome idea. Really, I have no critiques for the themes you chose to write about, as they all were amazing and kept me hooked!

Suggestion-wise, it could be interesting to occasionally include more abstract poems with more figurative language and advanced vocabulary. I say that because in the beginning especially, many of the poems were very direct and matter-of-fact, directly telling us all the emotions. Like fears. directly tells us all the fears, and the poems before it were pretty matter-of-fact, too.

Colors. is more abstract and packed full of rich language, and I loved that one. It was an interesting change of pace that handled its vocabulary and figurative language well. So it could be interesting to see some more poems like colors. that are a little more abstract and experiment with the figurative language more. I enjoyed the more simplistic poems, too, and abstract doesn't automatically equal good, so I'm not saying throw vocab and figurative language around for sake of it, but if you get inspired and have an emotion you think you can portray more abstractly, it could be interesting to see that!

Overall, the ideas here are awesome and feel so unique from what I've seen, though it could be interesting to see stronger word choice throughout the collection.

Timelessness: 7.5/10. This is the emotions and memorability category, and I think this poetry collection has strong emotions and memorability that make it stand out from other collections on Wattpad. There were quite a few poems in this collection that stood out to me, with my favorite being that girl. since it had such an impactful and relatable message and ending. I liked how you made us care for the narrator without us ever knowing her name.

I will probably end up gushing over the concepts time and time again throughout this review, but really, the ideas are amazing and all convey interesting themes that will make readers sit down and think, and truly think, so even though I've already said it and will say it again, I cannot praise the ideas enough since they make for such fresh, engaging poems I loved reading.

Suggestion-wise, this is like a criteria that's an accumulation of my thoughts on the work, so I don't have any specific suggestions right now since all of my suggestions are things I've already said or will say in the next two sections, though I will briefly summarize for sake of stating where points were taken off. There was what I said before about how it could be beneficial to strengthen the sensory detail and consider going more abstract at times, and there are also some structure and flow critiques I have that I'll get into in the next two sections.

Overall, the collection is memorable and has strong emotions behind it, with all the ideas being fresh and unlike anything I've seen from other collections.

Structure: 7/10. The structure of the collection is good, with every idea feeling like it belongs in the collection, not to mention every idea within the poem is hooking and entertaining. The structures change throughout the collection, switching between different stanza styles and feeling unique, which makes the poems more engaging. I particularly liked the structure of strangers. and felt it effectively conveyed the desired emotions. When the structure is good, there's not much else to say other than it's good, so good job with the structures!

Suggestion-wise, I have a couple. There are some times I felt there could have been some tweaks to how things were presented. For example, from moments.:

Those are the moments
I'm talking about,

the ones we should keep
in our hearts forever.

Earlier, when I mentioned it could be interesting to have more abstractness to some poems, that's an example of a place where I feel instead of directly saying "I'm talking about," there could be more abstractness to it to give the moments more of an otherworldly, ethereal feel to them, especially considering this poem compares those moments to heaven, so having some more abstract, heavenly language could be beneficial to making it feel more structured with the theme of the poem.

In general, other poems could also benefit from more sensory details, like shreds. In that poem, some images are vivid (the feet bleeding on a harsh road, the soul shattering), but other areas rely more on general phrasing. Adding a few more specific or sensory details could heighten the emotional impact even further and give not just that poem but other poems more structure and flow.

Another thing is a small thing, but the example from before could also work as:
the ones we should keep
forever in our hearts.

I only bring that up because it could be more elegant that way, but that could also very well be a me thing, and it's not something I'm saying you have to do by any means.

Similarly:

"Stay on the safe side, because you don't know, you don't know 'bout the things that determine your path."

Here, this thought is important, but the phrasing meanders a bit, and it could gain strength with a more condensed expression. That may seem contradictory to what I just said about being more abstract, though here, on the opposite end, it could be beneficial to cut this up a little more and maybe remove the first "you don't know" to have it flow as "you don't know 'bout the things that determine your path," but again, just a random suggestion and not one I'm saying will 100% work, but something worth mentioning either way.

Overall, the structure works for the collection and does a good job keeping the readers immersed in what you're saying.

Flow: 7.5/10. The flow of the poems in this collection is good! There were many lines I liked that stood out to me, like this one: "Red is like a delicious cherry" (colors.). That line stood out to me. Not sure why, but I just really enjoyed it. I also liked the entirety of sweet life o' mine and thought the word choice and light feel it had was fun and refreshing. That poem flowed together especially well with all the o' words and how you tied it to the themes.

There are a lot of other good lines throughout, such as this from live for me.:

if anything happens,

live for me.

This is a simple but powerful line that ends the poem on an emotional note. Overall, you do a good job ending your poems, which is imperative to having good flow!

Suggestion-wise, just a few things. Grammatically, there were some moments that could have been tweaked. I'll leave some examples below.

When genuine laughter
fill the air, (moments.).

Consider:

When genuine laughter
fills the air,

From shreds.: I don't understand, I might never will

"I don't understand, I might never will," sounds like a grammar slip. Consider: "I might never" or "I may never will" or even combining into something cleaner like "I may never understand."

From wither.:

those pretty flowers,

tiny, but pretty

Consider:

those flowers,

tiny, but pretty

That's depending on what you're aiming for with the repetition of the pretty. I can see why it could be repeated, though personally, I also felt the first one could have been removed since there's already repetition present throughout this poem, and too much could risk getting a bit too repetitive.

And I don't mean to keep repeating myself, especially considering my last point was just about repetition, but having more sensory details could also help with the flow and elevate the themes and emotions even further.

Overall, the flow is good and feels cohesive, staying pretty tonally consistent throughout and handling all its messages with care.

Album Presentation: 8/10. Luminous is the title of the poetry collection, and it's a good one! It's capitalized correctly and fits in nicely with the cover. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the title!

As for the blurb, it's as follows:

"Sometimes the eyes need to close
for the mind to open up."

This is intriguing, though I would recommend having some general information about the collection in the blurb, such as how you do it with Quiddity after the poem in that collection's blurb. Since you take requests, it could be interesting to put that in the blurb as well. So the blurb is intriguing, though it could be interesting to have a small expansion like your Quiddity blurb.

As for the cover, I love it! It's a beautiful cover that feels exactly like a cover I'd expect to see on a poetry collection. It's nicely organized with clear fonts and designs while maintaining a simplicity that makes it visually appealing. The colors are consistent and really set the tone, feeling like they match in well with the title. I have no critiques of the cover!

Total: 37/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) Redemption by Eternal Eclipse (Not Explicit)

- This instrumental has many string instruments in it to give it a powerful feel, yet it doesn't feel over-the-top for the vibe of this collection. I think it's a solid song to start the playlist off with and set the tone well!

2) Televangelism by Ethel Cain (Not Explicit)

- Ethel Cain is perfect for poetry collections. I gave at least one other person in this category an Ethel Cain song, and for good reason: she's an absolute legend of an artist with her incredible lyrics and powerful instrumentals, including this one that really hits your soul hard. I think it perfectly matches the vibes of this collection, and it's also just an awesome song.

Link to the playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

My Poetry Collection (English) by itsmethesmc

Review:

Creativity: 7/10. This poetry collection covers a wide variety of emotions, and no one emotion present throughout is the same. There are also a few times the structure was played with, like how Horse-riding, Lost, and Butterfly all featured unique structures that set them apart from the rest of the poems. This was a creative approach that made the poems feel more unique!

I also appreciated that many of the poems were on the longer side (by poetry standards, anyway). It made each poem feel like an individual journey, and it also gives more time to flesh out these concepts more. A lot of poems I read feel so short and like they had a lot more to say, but here, you say everything you need to, which I appreciated.

In summary: this was a very creative collection that I enjoyed!

Suggestion-wise, my main suggestion would be to consider diversifying how you present the emotions in the poems. For example, let's look at this line: I was happy cuz I love rain (Wile E. Coyote; poem 4). What I'm suggesting is when you're writing your poetry, consider asking yourself "Is there a stronger way to say this?" Most of the emotions are told to us like this, where we're told exactly what the narrator is thinking and feeling. If they're happy, angry, sad, feeling useless, etc., we know since that's directly said. Consider bringing in more abstract language and figurative language. Consider alternative ways to show us this happiness through more advanced vocabulary. I'm not advocating for just throwing big words around since that doesn't automatically make a poem good. Some of the best poems I've read have actually had extremely simplistic language, so it's not necessarily about the language itself but rather how you use it, though advanced vocabulary is also a good fit for many poems, hence why I mentioned it.

My other main suggestion is to consider downsizing on how much repetition is used. While the structures of the poems and the general themes were unique, the overuse of repetition within the poems themselves sometimes made the poems sound similar if not identical to each other. By that I mean all of the poems have something repeated a lot, like "you became" in the You poem, or the "my fault" in the poem My Fault. It could just be interesting to have less repetition since it can get not as engaging as before when a lot of poems not only use it but use it a lot within the individual poems.

Overall, there is a lot of potential with the creativity here, and there are creative structures presented throughout the poems published thus far.

Timelessness: 7.5/10. This section refers to how emotional and memorable your poems are, and I'd say they have strong moments that make them stand out from other poem collections on Wattpad. Like I mentioned in the previous section, your collection features creativity with the ideas it covers, often having unique themes in every poem that don't get stale, and that makes the collection emotional with good memorability!

The pieces have unique structures that gave them extra memorability, and I liked Heartbreak in particular since it touched on deeper ideas and handled them well. There's certainly a lot to enjoy with this collection, and I thought you all in all handled it well! I left some comments on specific lines I liked, though all of the poems had at least one line I thought was awesome!

Suggestion-wise, my suggestions for this section tend to be the things I've already said or will say. The general presentation of the poems could be tweaked with the amount of repetition there was along with more power given to the emotions present through diversifying how the emotions are presented, and there were some structural and flow critiques I have that I'll go over in the next two sections. Still, though, the poems are memorable and deserve a good score.

Structure: 8/10. The structure of the poems is pretty good. Like I mentioned earlier, you experiment with the structures in several of the poems, making the structures feel more unique, yet they're also consistent and don't feel like they're breaking any poetry rules, at least not without purpose. The general flow is good, too, which feeds into the structure since it makes everything feel more put together and easier to read. All in all, you did a good job with this section.

Suggestion-wise, not much, as you can probably tell based on the high score. Just two things. One is there could be some tweaks to help everything feel more connected in terms of its tone. For example:

I'm not who you wanna be with
I'm not whom I see in the light (Me; poem 5).

When it comes to that excerpt, the structure of it could be tweaked a bit since it feels a bit contradictory to have casual slang like "wanna" right before formal, more archaic language like "whom." I feel it could work stronger as "who you want to be with." It's a small change, but it could help keep the structure of the language more consistent.

There is also inconsistent punctuation that doesn't seem intentional. By that I mean sometimes you'll punctuate correctly, other times there are extra spaces between the text and the punctuation mark. For example, from Heartbreak:

You won't come to me ,

At any cost .

Consider:

You won't come to me,

At any cost.

I say it doesn't feel intentional because it goes back and forth throughout the collection where sometimes the punctuation is put next to the text, and other times it's spaced out, so I would recommend some more consistency. Not a big deal and won't factor into the score much, but still something worth considering.

Overall, the structures present throughout the story are good and do a good job immersing the reader in the themes you're conveying.

Flow: 7/10. The flow section refers to how your poem feels to read, and it also looks at your general writing and how grammar is handled. The writing is pretty good and does a good job keeping the readers settled in the moment. I was immersed throughout my read and enjoyed all of the poems. There were also great lines throughout that I enjoyed, such as this from Heartbreak:

I thought I found euphoria,

But it was all fake.

I really liked those lines and thought they effectively conveyed the tone and overall message of this poem. I also liked your usage of the word "euphoria" here and thought it was good word choice. Heartbreak was, in general, a great poem with a lot of awesome lines that I enjoyed!

Suggestion-wise, just a couple things. Grammatically, there were some moments that were inconsistent and could be tweaked. Breaking traditional grammar and spelling rules is of course okay for poetry, but there were moments where the breakages didn't feel intentional, and if they were intentional, I'd still recommend tweaking them since the moments impacted the flow.

For example: And I were Indecisive (My Fault; poem two). Consider: And I was Indecisive (if the indecisive being capitalized was intentional, it can stay capitalized, if not, then it should be lowercase).

Another example: Did I continue or I stopped (Wile E. Coyote; poem 4). Consider: Did I continue or stop

Another example, this time from Heartbreak: I thought she is my friend. She showed the true colors. Consider: I thought she was my friend. She showed her true colors.

Another from Heartbreak: Soon the angel changed the forms. Consider: Soon the angel changed forms.

So those are just some examples of ways the flow could be smoothened, but otherwise, the flow was good and featured many smooth, engaging lines I enjoyed!

Album Presentation: 5/10. The title is My Poetry Collection (English), and it's great that you include that it's English to clarify that for readers. It's capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, which is the typical writing format for creative writing pieces. Suggestion-wise, it could be interesting to give this collection a more specific name to attract readers. For example, user SeraDrake has their short story collection titled as Morsels, and another user, Seamlesslove, titles her short story collection as Succinct Tales, and I think both of those titles are awesome since they give the collection's title a little flavor/style that attracts readers while also fitting in with what the collection aims to do. So my suggestion would be to consider giving it a more specific title to attract readers. I hope that makes sense!

As for the blurb, it is as follows:

Some lines.....

Rhyme in hearts....

For the blurb, I would recommend having something more concrete. The poems themselves being abstract is okay and even encouraged, though the blurb here I wouldn't really call a blurb since it almost looks more like an excerpt from the story, so I would recommend having a short blurb explaining what the collection is going to entail, like maybe inform readers that you are going to give them a poetry collection about certain themes you feel passionate about and things like that. I hope that makes sense. That said, I like the "rhyme in hearts" and think that's clever. I'm not saying you have to remove the some lines rhyme in hearts (it can stay in no problem), but rather just consider including a short description of what the collection will be about underneath it.

As for the cover, it has an interesting concept with the purple color scheme and more somber atmosphere. There's an umbrella on the ground, surrounded by rain and trees. It definitely fits the aesthetic of a poetry collection and sets the tone you're looking for with this work. Suggestion-wise, I'm not a graphic designer, so take all of this with a healthy grain of salt, of course, though it could be interesting if the English was a bit smaller since it was a bit large for me, and it could also be interesting if the title card was a bit closer together since the "My Poetry Collection" words were spread out and taking up a lot of the cover. There are also little borders on the left and right sides, like a little pink blur effect, and readjusting the cover so those little borders aren't there and the cover is full screen could be interesting as well. I wasn't a huge fan of the blur on the left and right sides, but that could be just a me thing and a lot of other people like it. Like I said, take all of that with a grain of salt since I'm not a designer by any means.

Total: 34.5/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) Cold War Games by Gabriel Lewis (Not Explicit)

- This instrumental is upbeat and fun to listen to, which I think reflects how it feels to read your collection: fun. I think poetry collections are better suited for instrumentals, and this one is perfect to match the atmosphere of your collection! Especially the horse poem since this instrumental feels adventurous, just like the horse poem did.

2) Welcome To The Other Side by DPR Ian (Not Explicit)

- DPR Ian is an incredible artist I've recommended in basically every category I think. This category is no different since DPR Ian's music is basically poetry with music behind it as he recites it. Welcome To The Other Side has this adventurous feel to it that makes it feel like it matches your collection. It has that feel of a call to action while also feeling like you're getting transported away on a journey you'll remember forever!

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

Take Me To The Lake Where All The Poets Went To Die by erinyes21

Review:

Creativity: 7.5/10. This poem collection is mostly centered around love, and I think the poems themselves are pretty interesting. It was cool to see some experimentation with the structure, like in the like men i read chapter, there was a vastly different structure, and I encourage you to keep experimenting and playing around with how you format your poetry! I liked it when you did, and I think you have a talent for it!

There were interesting takes on love present throughout the collection that made it fun to read. I liked how the longer you kept reading, the more the poems started to branch out and get more experimental. The beginning portions were primarily about love, and there were love poems present later, too, though I liked how there was more diversity as it went along, and I enjoyed those poems a lot.

Suggestion-wise, what I alluded for above applies here where the beginning segment of the collection was basically all love poems. I'm all for a collection that has a common theme, though some diversity with the themes could be interesting. Like the Miss hope poem was awesome and really creative, and it wasn't about love. Nothing wrong with making poems about love, but some more diversity like that Miss hope poem could be interesting to see to really push the boundaries of your creativity!

Another thing is it could be interesting to see more diversity with the word choice with more advanced vocabulary sprinkled throughout. There's nothing wrong with not using more advanced vocabulary, though I encourage you to play around with the vocabulary! Not too much since you don't want to risk sounding over-the-top or anything, but it's just something worth considering.

Overall, there is strong creativity here and great potential! This is a completed collection, though if you create any further collections in the future, I'm sure they'll be great!

Timelessness: 7.5/10. This section deals with how memorable and emotional the collection is, and I'd say it's pretty memorable! This is one of those collections where the longer it goes on, the more I like it. I found the wildflower chapter particularly interesting since it was so prose-y and unique from all of the other poems I read. I think the final poem in the collection was also a good one to end off on, as it was powerful and basically summarized the overall theme of the collection, which makes it the perfect note to end on.

In summary, the poems have interesting themes and ideas I enjoyed reading, and I thought they were pretty memorable!

Suggestion-wise, deductions come from things I've mentioned or will mention in the next two sections. There could be some diversity in the beginning since there were a lot of love poems, and there could be some tweaks to the structure, word choice, and flow to help the emotional impact of the poems, though those are things I'll cover in the next two sections, I'm just bringing them up here since they also impact this category.

Overall, the emotional impact and memorability of the poems are good, and there were quite a few poems that stood out to me.

Structure: 7/10. The structure of the poems is pretty good. It's classic structure with quite a few four line stanzas, though there are quite a few poems without that classic structure as well. The diversity made it more interesting, and I appreciated seeing it. When you do have the four-line stanza structure, it's executed well and keeps the readers engaged. Normally I don't have too much to say about structure except if it's good or not, and here, it's good, so good job!

Suggestion-wise, I would recommend some more consistency with the tone of the stanzas, as sometimes it would be more serious and then slip into casual slang, but I'll go over that in the next section with examples since I already wrote that section before writing this one.

Similarly, there were times where how you spelled words was inconsistent. For example:

I waited for youu for years

Even though u never came (Nobody).

See how you is spelled as both youu and u here? I would recommend consistency with how you spell certain words, and I would recommend sticking to spelling it as you.

Another thing that's similar is I would recommend not using shortened abbreviations of words, such as abt for about or nd for and. I say this because the language of poetry tends to be more prose-y, and you do have prose-y moments and advanced vocabulary, so the shortened abbreviations felt a bit out of place. I hope that makes sense!

Overall, the structure is good and keeps the readers engaged in the poems!

Flow: 7/10. Throughout the collection, there are solid lines and stanzas that do a great job immersing the reader and getting them ready to keep reading your poetry. I really liked the third poem (for once, i want to be in love). It was a solid poem, and I loved every line. I particularly liked the final line, which was this:

Even just for once...i'd love to be in love.

It clearly summarizes the theme of the poem and ends on a sad note, where I'm sure most people are going to be able to relate to the narrator since they want to experience these emotions, too, so great job with that poem! It flowed well and kept me hooked!

I also really enjoyed the Miss hope poem and thought it had a great flow and structure to it. Both that and the for once, i want to be in love poems were my favorites!

Suggestion-wise, there could be some tweaks to the grammatical flow of the lines along with some of the word choice to keep the tone more consistent. For example, from poem 1, one of the best mornings:

"Damnn..."

This is a grammatical error where the damn has an extra n. Consider: Damn...

Another example from the first poem: "Prolly he could feel me being shy..."

Here, the tone feels a little inconsistent. The rest of the poem is relatively flowery and pretty, but the slang of "prolly" felt a little out of place, in my opinion. There are a few ways to take this, but one way could be: I bet he felt me being shy... That's just one way, but there are plenty of ways to take it!

Similarly, from poem four (sweet and kind): "Cuz I've been broken before."

Considering the rest of the poem is very melancholy and has stronger word choice, it could be beneficial to remove the shortened slang of cuz and replace it with Cause or Because.

From the second poem: "Does everything meant to be in pairs??"

Here, the sentence is grammatically incorrect. It's okay and even encouraged to break grammar rules in poetry, but here, I would recommend tweaking it to help the flow. Consider: Is everything meant to be in pairs? I removed the extra question mark since it was unneeded. When it comes to ? and !, I would recommend always only using one, as using more than one can become distracting.

From the fourth poem again: "And i knw im not perfect." The im not being spelled as i'm I'm okay with since it can add emotion depending on your intention behind spelling it that way, but I would recommend fixing the spelling error from knw to know.

Overall, there is solid flow present throughout the poems, and I just had a few recommendations for how to tighten it even further.

Album Presentation: 6/10. Take Me To The Lake Where All The Poets Went To Die is the title of the piece. It is an interesting title that I think will catch people's eyes, though the one suggestion I have is it is a little lengthy, and I wonder if there's a way to trim it a bit to better fit Wattpad's dimensions, as the full title is only visible if we go to your profile. Maybe if it were The Lake Where All Poets Died or something of the sort, it could capture the essence and be a tad shorter, though I do think it's interesting how the title flows off the tongue and clearly connects to the poetry collection, so it is an intriguing title nonetheless. Capitalization-wise, every letter is capitalized. According to Chicago, it would be capitalized like this: Take Me to the Lake Where All the Poets Went to Die. Though, if the current capitalization was purposeful or you're following another writing format where all the letters need to be capitalized, then that's fine and can stay as is.

As for the blurb, it's a tad vague. After reading the collection, it makes a bit of sense since it gives a hint that there's going to be romance involved in the poems. I would recommend having a more clear blurb, though, to give readers a stronger idea of what they're about to read. Maybe a small summary (1-4 sentences) stating it's a poetry collection centered around the different stages of love or something of the sort. There are a lot of ways you can take it, so I encourage you to play around with it!

As for the cover, it's a pretty image of a sunset and two people, a guy and a girl, sitting in front of it likely on the beach. It fits the poem collection since it's clearly a love kind of cover, which matches the majority of the poems inside. My suggestion, though, would be to consider tweaking the dimensions so the black borders on the top and bottom aren't there and it fully fits the 512x800 dimensions that make up Wattpad's cover size. I would also recommend including the title on the cover. That said, it's still a nice image for the collection.

Total: 35/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) The Night Window by Thomas Newman (Not Explicit)

- This is an instrumental from the movie 1917, a phenomenal movie with incredible cinematography and music. This track has the vibes of your collection, in my opinion, where it has that melancholy feel along with a sense of wonder and mystery, and the swells feel like revelations, like the kinds you make while reading your poems and putting the pieces together to unravel the various themes throughout.

2) Hurt by Johnny Cash (Not Explicit)

- Johnny Cash is a legend, of course, though Hurt is particularly great because it has a melancholy feel that matches the vibes of the previous track on this playlist while also matching the vibes of your collection, in my opinion. It's a great song with haunting vocals that are packed with emotion!

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

Mellifluent by ivyb4winter

Review:

*Poems judged: My Love & Collide

Creativity: 8/10. The two poems are vastly different from one another in terms of their theming. One is a sweet tale of love while the other has much more anger present throughout it. The structures are different, too. The first poem, My Love, feels almost like a stream-of-conscious love letter, while Collide is more in your face with harsher language and shorter, punchier stanzas, and I think this works great.

Both of them are oozing with creativity. My Love has unique language that makes it stand out from other poems I see, and considering a lot of poems are depressing, it was nice to see a positive, uplifting poem that cherished love. It was one of my favorite poems I've read in a while, and I was left with a fuzzy feeling by the end of it! Collide having that punchiness worked in its favor and made the emotions feel more impactful, so great job making them feel fun to read!

Suggestion-wise, the first poem, My Love, leans into the adjectives a lot and has many adjectives in a short amount of time. Diversifying this could be beneficial to strengthen the feelings presented in this poem. Another thing is there are some structural issues within the My Love poem that has to do with the compliments, but I'll get to that soon. Otherwise, the creativity is very good, and it deserves a high score!

Timelessness: 8/10. This section refers to the emotional impact and memorability of your poetry, and of the two poems submitted, I thought they were both pretty memorable! My Love stuck with me due to its positive messaging, but Collide was great, too, and it had many memorable lines, such as the following:

"Like a broken star on the thirsty ground."

This was a great line that had me pausing to reread it to make sure I could appreciate the prettiness of that line. It's a beautiful line that isn't over-the-top but still uses the vocabulary well to make an intriguing line. I also loved the line almost right after it, which was this:

"You burn the world from inside your cage."

Another moment of more simplistic but smart word choice. You don't need a hundred pretty words to be impactful because you know how to make any level of vocabulary engaging. And even then, the more advanced vocabulary you use in the two poems is well-used, too, so great job with that and making the poems feel emotional and impactful.

Suggestion-wise, this section tends to be just a compilation of my other suggestions for other categories. That means nothing I say in here will be anything crazy. The suggestions I have are to consider diversifying the amount of adjectives there are in My Love since it does over rely on the adjectives a bit, and there are some critiques I have for the structure and flow I'll get into in the next two sections. Otherwise, though, I thought the memorability of these poems was good!

Structure: 7/10. The structure of the two poems was good and made sense. Like I mentioned in the creativity section, I liked your choice of poems that you submitted since they had different structures that made them feel unique not only to me as I read them but also in general as poems. It was great to see you experiment with the way you went about presenting these poems, and I appreciated how they were vastly different yet didn't feel like they didn't belong in the collection. Both of them were welcome additions to the collection, and I enjoyed them a lot.

Suggestion-wise, there could be some tweaks. This is a small thing, but I think the chapter title is misspelled as Collied instead of Collide. In your form, you named it as Collide, and the poem itself has collide in it, so I thought I would bring it to your attention.

For My Love, some stanzas are packed with compliments and adjectives ("golden soul," "adorable," "sweet," "smart," etc.). It matches the speaker's feelings, but the repetition of praise can start to feel less impactful as the poem continues. Consider choosing fewer but more vivid or unusual descriptors, that way there is still depth, but it doesn't risk teetering on the side of repetition.

For Collide, the poem covers skies, stars, demons, hounds, cages, and abysses. These are all great on their own, but they come from different worlds (cosmic, mythic, emotional, etc.), and sometimes feel a little scattered. A bit more grounding or leaning more heavily into one set of imagery could strengthen the emotional through-line.

Overall, the structure of the poems is good and keeps the reader engaged throughout the entire read time.

Flow: 7/10. The flow of the two poems, like the structure, was good. The word choice was pretty good and did a solid job keeping me immersed in what was happening. I thought the Collide poem in particular flowed extremely well with its beautiful lines that I mentioned earlier. My Love had a consistent theme that also flowed well and was clear by the end of the poem. I liked the ending of My Love and thought it did a good job tying up the lovely themes (literally) the poem had!

Suggestion-wise, there were some moments the flow was a little hard to follow. Here are some examples from My Love:

"I'm starting at my love...". Consider: I'm staring at my love.

"Right his eyes...". Consider: "Right—his eyes. They're as dark as tar." OR: "And then his eyes, as dark as tar."

"His careful act sends my heart flying a million beats a mile." Here, this metaphor could use a little polish to avoid confusion. By that I mean the "beats a mile" is a bit confusing. Consider: His careful act sends my heart flying a million beats a minute.

For Collide, here are two examples:

"Mixing with nothin' no more than peace." Here, this line is a bit hard to follow grammatically. It raises the question what does "mixing with nothing" mean in this context? It's okay to to have abstractness in poetry of course, but this line feels like it could have been refined to have a more clear metaphor/meaning.

"Let them collide like a rebound." Here, "rebound" is a bit awkward metaphorically. Is it referring to emotional rebound, or a physical one? Similarly to the last point, clarifying the intended meaning here just a little could be beneficial.

Overall, though, the flow of the poems was good and deserves a good score.

Album Presentation: 7/10. Mellifluent is the title, and it's capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines and is a pretty word that matches the feel of the poetry collection. It's pretty and fits the collection, therefore I have no critiques for the title!

As for the blurb, it looks like an excerpt from the collection rather than a blurb, so it's a bit tough to judge. It's a nice excerpt, and it has this underneath it:

Piece of my mind.
& peace of my soul.

I liked that part, though I would recommend having a brief blurb just to say what the readers are about to read. Maybe consider having a sentence or two, or up to a paragraph, describing the collection and the goal of it, if there's a consistent theme, some general themes you want to cover, your poetic style, etc. Giving the readers a clear idea of what exactly you're going to do could be beneficial and generate more clicks.

As for the cover, it's nice. It fits in with the overall aesthetic of your profile. It's nice for a poetry compilation, and I liked the glow the text had. My only suggestion is the title could maybe be a tad bigger since it looks small on the cover, but otherwise, it's a nice cover with a great poetry vibe to it!

Total: 37/50.

1) So Beautiful by DPR Ian (Not Explicit)

- This beautiful (pun intended) song is calming and has an amazing instrumental behind great lyrics. DPR Ian always knocks it out of the park, and this song is no different. I think it fits My Love perfectly and is also just an awesome song.

2) Anguish by Mr.Kitty (Not Explicit)

- Mr.Kitty is mostly known for his hit song After Dark, though he makes very emotionally layered music. I think Anguish sticks with the general vibe of the playlist So Beautiful set up, but it better fits Collide, whereas So Beautiful fit My Love more. It's a funky song with a deeper meaning that I think fits the collection well!

Link to playlist --->

Album Scorecard:

The Clusters of Thoughts by Iamjustasapien

Review:

Creativity: 7.5/10. The poem ideas throughout the cluster were good! I liked how it started with a melancholy, deeper theme, but seeing as this is meant to be a cluster of vastly different thoughts, it makes sense that there were ideas on the other side of the spectrum, too, such as the second poem being far more light-hearted with the adventure feel to it, or poem seven being from the perspective of a murder victim to add a new perspective to the mix. Poems 1, 3, and 4 were all about love, and it could be interesting to see some more diversity in the beginning since there were some other awesome topics (such as the balancing in poem 5 and the adventure in poem 2) and it being a cluster, it could be interesting to see the thoughts go back and forth with no one poem in a row being about similar topics, but that's not a big deal since I enjoyed those individual poems anyway.

I'm not sure how I feel about AI doing an analysis of the poems, as I'd much rather hear your thoughts as the poet about each poem, though it is a neat idea to have an analysis at the end of each poem showing an interpretation of it, and for the people who are new to poetry and want to get into it, it's good to have since sometimes poems can be hard to follow, so that little analysis is good to help steer them in the right direction and a good idea.

Suggestion-wise, other than the small things I mentioned before, it could be interesting to see more diversity with the general poem structure, as all 38 poems, even the one not written by you, are four-line stanzas, often with five or less stanzas. They get longer later in the work, and the length isn't necessarily something I take issue with, but I'm bringing it up because it makes the poems sometimes not feel as unique as they could. The poems all seem to be mostly lyrical poems, like free verse. I think it could be interesting to experiment with more styles, especially for a collection where the concept is clusters of thoughts. It could be interesting to see unique styles and experimentation for different clusters of these thoughts we're reading about, giving each thought and poem more individuality. That's not to say you can never repeat styles, as it's also important to write what you want to write, but that's just an idea that could potentially really fit in with the general concept of the work. I.e., maybe every new "thought" has a specific style or structure to it, like every poem with love has a certain structure, every poem with hate has a certain structure, etc., which can make them feel organized yet also unique. That's just a random idea, though, and not something I'm saying for sure will work since it depends on your goal with the collection.

Overall, the idea of the collection is good and shows strong creativity. There are cool ideas here and a variety of topics that makes this an interesting read.

Timelessness: 7.5/10. This section refers to how much of an impact your work has left on me. I'd say this piece left quite a nice impact on me! This section tends to be my shortest because it's more about the concept and general lasting impact rather than anything narrative-specific, but I still want to take a moment to talk about the themes, so bear with me while I talk for a paragraph or two.

Something I really enjoyed about this piece is the way you talked about unconventional topics. While in the beginning I did mention how the first few poems could be diversified, that's really the only instance I thought that since the rest of the collection is so rich with new ideas and concepts I've never seen before in poetry, like the concept of a scholar falling from grace. Every poem is almost like a dance in that sense, where we're dancing around the words to see what the underlying meaning is. I liked how environments played a role, too, where the poems would have almost a dystopian and fantastical feel to their "environments" while having an awesome theme as the forefront of them.

So when it comes to the emotional impact, there is strong potential and execution present throughout the collection. I thought you did an amazing job thinking outside the box and making it feel unique, so when it comes to suggestions, I don't have much, and nothing that I can really explain here and will have to delegate to other sections, but I'll leave my few suggestions below briefly.

Suggestion-wise, I believe there could be a bit more experimentation within the poetry style, as I mentioned in the previous section, and I have suggestions for the general word choice, flow, and structure that could strengthen this piece's emotional impact further, though I will explain the majority of those points in the next two sections.

Overall, the collection has strong emotions and themes that make it memorable and help it stand out from other poetry collections on the platform.

Structure: 7/10. The structure of the poems is, as I mentioned in the first section, primarily four-line stanzas and often having five or less stanzas, though there are longer poems the later you go in the collection. This structure works and looks nice on the page, leading to an easy reading experience. We need fluid sentences in order to understand what's happening, so it was nice to see a clear pattern here. As much as I did recommend branching out and experimenting more, that doesn't mean there was anything wrong with the familiar stanza structure. I just have a few critiques regarding some of the specific grammatical errors.

Suggestion-wise, while poetry is of course open to grammatical breakages, there were some lines that felt like they could have been smoother. I'll use a couple from the first poem as examples.

Example: Then the truth sung.

Consider: Then the truth sang.

The reason is because "sung" is a past participle, therefore it needs something to support it. By "something," I mean a supporting verb, like had or was. That means "sang" would be the correct verb form, and it flows the same as sung would but is more grammatically sound.

Another example, this time from poem 4: Crystalline tears ran down by my crimson cheeks.

Consider: Crystalline tears ran down my crimson cheeks.

Not only does this flow stronger, but it's grammatically correct. Having both "by" and "my" made the sentence a bit awkward.

There's a spelling error in the seventh poem: as I scream in angony. I think you meant agony here. I tried looking into angony but found no matches, so if this is like some archaic term, I would recommend using agony. There are a few other spelling errors present throughout the collection I would recommend tweaking, but I'll provide more examples in the next section.

There are also some word choice critiques I have, but I'll save those for the flow section since that has to do more with flow.

Overall, the structure works for the collection and often feels fluid to read, which I'll go over more in the next section, though there was awkward grammar that could have been tweaked.

Flow: 7/10. The general flow of the various poems was good! The ideas were all intriguing and presented in interesting ways to do them justice. There was plenty of solid word choice throughout that made the lines feel like they flowed together well. For example, from poem 8, I loved the line "Often seen in a deceiving collar, who knew you were a lawless citizen?" It was an interesting line that kept me engaged, and that poem is probably my favorite of the bunch. The idea behind it is great, too, and very unique from anything I've seen from poetry collections.

And in the poem after that one, I liked how that was more focused on scene setting and the environment/world. Poem 8 was more about the character, while poem 9 feels more like a prose dance. Having that diversity back-to-back along with awesome central ideas acting as the foundation for these poems made for great flow, easy readability, and high engagement, so good job! I just have a few suggestions about the general word choice that could be beneficial.

A lot of my suggestions already popped up in structure since structure and flow do impact each other, though I'll explore a little more here about some flow-specific things.

Let's take a look at an example to go over some ways to improve the flow:

Elegantly waltz in my suited fiancé,
as he bows and kisses my bruised knuckles.
He gays (straightens) up, as he snickers, "How cliché!"
as they venue delightfully chuckles (poem 11).

My suggestions for the flow would be to read these poems out loud and/or run them through a text-to-speech (TTS) generator to hear the text aloud. Hearing my text has massively improved my writing and has been a game-changer for me, hence why I'm tossing the idea out there if you haven't experimented with this yet, as hearing the text shows you just how natural or unnatural something is. But with that general suggestion out of the way, let's dive into some specific suggestions about that passage.

If you're using a word that you feel isn't going to get across to the audience to the point where you put the intended meaning of the word in brackets, I'd suggest not using that word. In general, using the word "gays" here feels a bit forced, seeing as it's such an abstract definition of the word that the "straightens" definition of it isn't listed in the Merriam Dictionary. Or if you're not saying it means straightens and are using it in a different way, then the straightens in brackets is misleading. Even if there is a credible source out there defining gays as straightens, the fact that one of the most notable dictionaries out there doesn't have that definition listed is a reason to steer clear of it and use different vocabulary.

But moving away from that since it's just one word and ultimately not a big deal, let's look at the general flow here. The first two lines are perfectly fine, but the final two lines include two more "as" clauses. It's fine to use as clauses, and they're useful and can be very powerful, though consider removing one of them to give these as clauses more weight and individuality. Having three as clauses in four lines can get repetitive, so for flow purposes, you may want to consider downsizing. I.e., He straightens and snickers, "How cliché!" That's not exactly what I'm saying you have to do since I understand that's relatively plain compared to the rest of the language around it, but it's just a general example of a way that it could be taken to remove one of the as clauses.

Another thing is the last line, to me, feels a bit odd to read. "as they venue delightfully chuckles." If you read that out loud, you may notice how the flow could be tweaked. Like I said, I'm all for breaking grammar rules, though the "delightfully" here is the part throwing me off. It feels like it's supposed to be "as they venue delightful chuckles," or if you're using venue as the place definition, therefore the venue itself is personified and chuckling, then it'd be, "as the venue delightfully chuckles." But "they" and "delightfully" make the sentence a bit hard to read, and tweaking the word choice here could be beneficial.

Let's look at one more example:

They told it was a mystical journey to its liberty,
not to a burning seat of war.
They sent it of, to a confict of emotional volatility,
this was the result of its unheard roar (poem 9).

After reading this passage, I was left wondering what it meant. Not thematically, but what the intention of the passage was from a grammatical perspective, as it's a bit confusingly written. I think "They sent it of" is supposed to be "They sent it off," but the first sentence I still don't understand, and some clarity about what it's trying to say could be beneficial. It's okay to be abstract in poetry of course, but from a reader's perspective, that first sentence didn't flow for me. Was "told" the right verb there? I think the "told" might be throwing me off a bit. And the other thing is confict is I believe another spelling error. I'm going to guess you meant conflict there, though I'm sure other words could work as well.

So all of this is to say when it comes to the flow, there could be some smoothening by tweaking some of the word choice and improving the spelling, as there were frequent spelling errors and/or confusions. I hope that makes sense!

Overall, the flow has solid moments with great word choice supported by great ideas, and I just had a few suggestions for some moments where the fluidity could be a tad stronger.

Album Presentation: 6.5/10. The title is The Clusters of Thoughts, which is capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines. The title fits in with the cover and the general atmosphere of the work. It could also work as The Cluster of Thoughts, as it runs off the tongue a tad smoother, but Clusters is fine, too. All in all, it's a good title that works well with a poetry collection.

As for the blurb, it tells us what exactly your work is, highlighting that it's poetry and including a short excerpt to give a taste of what the collection is going to entail. I like that you chose to keep it to a one stanza excerpt instead of anything crazy long, as blurbs are meant to be short.

Suggestion-wise, some of the sentences could be a bit restructured. For example, the opening line is: These poems capture raw human emotions in many different scenarios. Instead of "many different" scenarios, consider: These poems capture raw human emotions in a variety of scenarios. It's a small tweak, but it flows a tad smoother.

Grammatically, let's look at this sentence: The gates to a different realm awaits! Since you are using the plural form of "gates" here, the verb needs to agree with it, therefore awaits needs to be await. So it would become: The gates to a different realm await!

There are punctuation errors present throughout. I'm all for poetry breaking grammar rules, though in a blurb, I recommend keeping it as smooth as possible. The punctuation errors are mostly present after the "await" sentence I just spoke of. I'll go over them in a minute, but I want to give one final suggestion first.

Moving back into creative suggestions, I would recommend splitting the paragraph after the "await" and making "Ballerinos" onward its own paragraph simply because it's like a new idea and may flow a little smoother as its own thing.

So, with all that combined, the blurb would become:

These poems capture raw human emotions in a variety of scenarios. Love, heartbreak, loneliness, and more are expressed in these poems. It is time to unwind and unravel, to marvel at the mystical world of poetry. The gates to a different realm await!

Ballerinos, ex-lovers, and many more are waiting to tell us their tale, so come along! The tales told can show you the harsh reality or amuse you to no end—the choice is yours to make, without any mistake. Make yourself comfy because this is an unpredictable ride written by a VERY unpredictable poet.

There were punctuation errors (I added "so" before come to make the comma more correct, I swapped one comma out for an em dash since the sentence was a bit awkward with the comma there, and I tweaked the final sentence), all in the second paragraph. Wattpad likes to not allow em dashes in blurbs, but there is a symbol that looks identical to an em dash that you can use as a loophole that does appear in blurbs. If you look at my story, Starboys, that has an em dash in its blurb you can copy paste since if you use that one, it will appear in blurbs.

As for the cover, I love the concept of the cover and how all the stickers feel like clusters of thoughts. It has a vintage aesthetic to it where everything feels like old paper with the stickers on it to make it pop, which I thought made for a unique visual. I liked the font of the subtitle and Thoughts, too. Suggestion-wise, not much. I felt the rainbow and different font on the The Clusters of could be tweaked to all be the same since there are already a lot of visuals on the cover, so having a bit of consistency with the title text could be beneficial, but otherwise, I liked the cover.

Total: 35.5/50.

Songs chosen to reflect the collection:

1) AM I DREAMING by Lil Nas X (feat. Miley Cyrus; Not Explicit)

- This song is super underappreciated, in my opinion. It has a beautiful instrumental and great lyrics that make it fun to listen to while reading your work. It really does feel like you're dreaming while listening to it, and it's calm enough that listening to it while reading isn't distracting!

2) MODUS by Joji (Not Explicit)

- Joji is an amazing artist with layers of meaning in his work. MODUS, like the previous song, has a beautiful, elegant instrumental. I think it perfectly fits in with the deeper feelings present in your work, and, in general, it's a great song!

Link to playlist --->

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