These are just tips for you to write in order to make it easy for both of us. 

1. Don't write like '*She ran away* *came across them*" write in a short but understandable away like "She ran away and soon came across them." Mind ya, you will have to describe properly where your character is, what they are doing etc etc.

2. Don't go all sugary or sweet on seeing your crush here.

3. Express your feelings, emotions properly for it matters very much. I'm not saying to write in all detail but at least there should be the feels like a decent writer. 

4. Don't write:

"She looked around a saw trees surrounding her. They looked unsettling in her opinion."

Write like:

"As she looked around examining her surroundings, she noticed the trees around her and felt them giving off an unsettling feeling."

I ain't expecting too much from ya all so...... let's continue shall we!