I pull up to my friends house with my grandmother who drove me there. I get out of the car and grab my bag and pillow as we get out of the car I walk up to the front door and knock. It's quiet, but not the usual quite, a more dangerous quiet from inside the house. I can hear the sounds of my friend's mother and brother arguing upstairs- not too uncommon as he's a game addicted teen. Then, through the window of the front door can see my friend skipping up to the door dressed in Pinks as usual and a huge smile on her face. smile back as her dad and she open the door i say goodbye to my grandmother who walks back to the car to go home. And, as I walk inside her father frowns a little., i brush it off, my friend drags me up to her room and closes the door we laugh a little, happy to be able to hang out together for the night. we start to set up the floor for our sleepover and from her brothers room we can still hear him and his mom arguing but we tune it out eventually her father joins in, we continue to ignore it, after a few minutes the arguing stops. then her mom comes in and sees me and looks as my friend and me and explains to me that because of the problems at the house i wasn't supposed to be hear and that they had given her permission to have a sleepover as long as it was at my house. i got angry at my friend for going behind her parents back and blatantly disrespecting them and their wishes. after her mother and her stop arguing her mother is going to bring me home which i was happy about i was so angry i didn't want to be with her much longer, and her mother said that because i had gotten my hopes up about hanging out with her that if my family was OK with it she could stay a few hours but be picked up that night, i was OK with that because as mad as i was i wanted to talk to her and try to explain to her just how disrespectful she was to her parents for going behind their backs we arrive at my house and after explaining why i'm already back and giving a brief overview my friend and i walk in and we go to the kitchen and when her mom leaves i start telling my friend how she was disrespectful for doing that and that i was mad at her for doing that and going behind their backs, she just laughed it off which made me even more mad, for the next few hours until her mom came to pick her up i keep trying to get through to her and explain where she went wrong and why everyone mad at her and she just laughs and says that despite what her mom said shes not going to get into trouble and i just feel myself getting angrier and angrier at her for this to me what she did was so disrespectful and inappropriate and uncalled for and she had no reason to do it and she tried to tell me that she does respect her parents and i asked her how she shows it and nothing of what she said was respect hugging your parents and telling them you love them while being nice is not respect, listening to what your parents tell you and doing what you're told to do and not doing what you're told not to do IS respect, buying them things from the dollar store when you go there's not respect taking your parents wishes into consideration when making a decision to make sure that your not crossing any lines is respect, and i tried to explain this to her but it was like trying to move a brick wall with a feather, a complete waste of time that will get you nowhere. i thought back to all the times i was upset with her for her treatment of her parents and i knew at that moment i had to end this friendship because she was a bad influence for me.

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70/100 

Her comment "you have still not made any of the changes that I asked you to make. IF you don't add in the information I am asking you about - this essay is all about your friend and not enough about you. I don't learn about YOU or where your values come from! While this is an interesting story - it is not meeting the criteria of the college essay."

i talked with her after about this

she wants me to change the entire story i'm writing and write on a completely new topic >n<

she wants me to scrap what i have to far     /(ono)>

so for the sake of my grade i am going to do so (-n(\) 

so i'm-a write a COMPLETELY NEW ESSAY FIRST DRAFT for our LAST DRAFT of our collage essays 

god/gods/goddess/goddesses/dog/dogs/giant floating sentient cheese sandwich help me *currently slamming head on table*