18. A Poem


Blue crane gently steps
across bare sand and concrete:
a poem in the dirt

©Anneshiningstar2020
13/07/20

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Blue Cranes are South Africa's National bird and they are some of the most beautiful and elegant birds that I have ever seen.😍

I was trying to say that seeing the Crane amongst such ugly  surrounding was like finding a beautiful poem that has fallen on the ground when all you expected to see was mud. My Mom says that it doesn't really make sense in the haiku.
I thought that I would post it anyway and maybe ask for your opinion
Does it make sense to you? If it doesn't is there any other way that you might phrase it within  5 syllables? 🤔
The image above comes from:

http://www.nejohnston.org/birds/2013/04/Images/IMG_2904.jpg

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