Wildpaw/Wildpath

Name: Wildpaw (later on will be Wildpath)- (I had an OC named Wildpaw. Good job.)

Age: 17 moons old.

Clan: Shadowclan- (Okay)

Gender: Tom

Rank: Medicine cat- (That's fine.)

Appearance: he's a Japanese bob tail with a bit of a strange pattern of fur. He has white fur and black spots on his ear. He has a little black patch of fur where his small tail is, black paws, and a large scar on his side when Thunderclan attacked Shadowclan- (This sounds reasonable.)

Personality: As a kit he was known to be quite reckless and wild. Making him a very troublesome kit. Later on in life when he became an apprentice, his reckless personality seemed to change to a more mature one. But his wild side still stayed with him. He spends his life as a medicine cat and tries to be as comforting as he can be. He can get angry and snappy very easily. He will talk back to anyone, even deputy and leaders if he wants/has to. Most of the time he is calm and collected. He can be very wise, yet he also tends to let his mind wander. (I think it's okay for him to have  a personality change once he becomes older, but he seems a bit confused. You said that he gets angry easily, but that he is mostly calm and collected. I see how you're trying to develop a good personality for him, but you may want to work on it a little.)- 1 point

Sexuality: Asexual

Rank: Medicine cat

Likes: exploring, going out to small fields, kits (even if he doesn't say), playing with some leaves, helping sick cats- (Sounds fun!)

Dislikes: snobby warriors, bees (he was stung) fighting, hunting, having small anxiety or panic attacks- (I'm not sure I understand why a high-strung cat would have anxiety, but he's your OC, not mine.)

Backstory: he was born in leaf bare, which was also a very troublesome time at that point. Wildpaw had gotten sick with Greencough. Batear (medicine cat at the time) had said he wouldn't live to see the next day. But Rosethroat (Rosepaw at the time) didn't give up like her mentor. She gave Wildpaw every herb and berry that could possibly help. She gave him hope and strength when that seemed to be failing. After a moon, he was up and about. Ready to start his life. He had gotten a bit wild at that point. Starting fights, stealing prey. Hell, he even yelled at an elder. Until Rosethroat stepped in. She showed him a different way of approaching life. When he had became an apprentice, he had begged the leader to let him go on the path to become a medicine cat. The leader let him after a day of begging. It was the happiest day of his life. He loved the medicine cat den, since it's where he spent most of his kithood. One day his clan was attacked by a surprise ThunderClan raid. He protected the kits in the nursery, but had gotten a nasty gash on his side. He would've been killed if it wasn't for his father, Stoneheart for stepping in. From that day forward he had vowed to protect everyone in his clan. Even if it meant giving his own life.- (Awesome.)

(Wildpaw also has dark green eyes. Forgot to mention)- (Thanks, I hadn't thought about that.)

Reason for name: Wild- for his attitude when he was a kit. Path- for staying true to the medicine cat ways, helping others before himself- (Awesome name, too!)

Cause of death: he had frozen to death when searching for a kit in leaf bare- (Aww, poor Wildpath...)

Father: Stoneheart- a lanky gray Tom with a scruffy pelt. He had a dark gray face while his body was a light gray. He had a white underbelly and yellow eyes. His coat is littered with scars- (Not bad.)

Mother: Soottail: A black Japanese bobtail with white paws. Her muzzle had a small white patch of fur, making it look like she licked the black off her fur. She has dark green eyes. Her body is small but slender- (Good names, and believable descriptions.)

Brother: Bearpaw- a dark gray Tom with patches of black littered on his body. He is a large built cat with bright hazel eyes.- (Okay.)

Mates: none

Kits: none

Crush: none

Other: he has a fear of fighting. When something violent happens it can trigger a panic attack- (A fear of fighting seems reasonable.)


Points Taken: 1

Results: 99%

Your OC is definitely interesting. I love the names you've given most all your cats (except for Batear...which, I forgot to mention...) and although unique pelt colors are usual for main characters, I haven't seen a lot of Bobtails. Something about your OC's personality is odd to me, but it's good that you're trying to develop his personality. In general, your OC is pretty good!

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