User:

Name: Wavestar

Clan: FallenClan (Like WindClan) (I don't like the suffix 'Fallen,' and I would've liked it if you would've explained why the Clan is called FallenClan. Also, Fallen is a frequently used suffix) -1 point

Gender: She-cat

Rank: Leader

Appearance: A small blue she-cat with hazel eyes. (Blue cats, like the Russian Blue, are more likely to have green eyes)

Personality: Bad Traits- Short tempered, stubborn, clumsy, sometimes stupid, has short-term memory loss, usually depressed, and closed off to others. Good Traits- Fast, strong, brave, loyal, and a quick thinker. (Her personality is very unbalanced and somewhat scattered. I don't know how I feel about her having short-term memory loss and when I read this story I don't see any of her good traits.) - 3 points

Backstory:

0-6 moons

Wavekit was bullied a lot for her parents, them being rouges. She soon lost the friends she had, Frostkit and Smokekit and fell into deep depression, trying to entertain herself.

6-12 moons

Wavekit, now Wavepaw, soon became an apprentice to her foster brother, Forestpelt, and she still was depressed, even as Forestpelt tryed to cheer her up, but was unfortunately unsuccessful.

12-24 moons

Waveheart, formerly Wavepaw, became a warrior and was still depressed, making it worse, she witnessed Forestpelt die of a fox and she always thought it was her fault. She soon became deputy, which lifted her spirits slightly, but not all of the way.

24-death

Sadly, Waveheart witnessed Smallstar died to greencough and she became Wavestar, and she fell back onto her normal state, depressed. She died after many moons to her killing herself with death berries.

(First off, I'm not quite sure whether you meant her parents bullied her, or that others bullied her because of her parents. Second, I'm not sure how I feel about the suffix Forest-. Otherwise, the backstory is okay.)- 2 points

Mother: Annie- A tan-colored she-cat with dark brown swirls on her sides and hazel eyes. (I don't like how you added the swirls to her description. Maybe put stripes instead? I love the name Annie though, and I've used it myself)

Father: Nitro- A pure black tom with pale green eyes.

Sister: Tantail- A white she-cat with a tan tail and ears, and darker tan stripes on her tail. She has pale, crossed eyes that are blue in color. (I don't like the use of tan colors here. I'm not saying that your cat can't be tan, but maybe a name like Sandfur or Suntail would fit her better)- 1 point

Mate: Skipheart- A gray tom with blue eyes and long fur

Breed: Maine Coon (? Is Skipheart a Maine Coon, or are her family members all Maine Coon? I need you to do a little more explaining)- 1 point

Points taken: 8

Results: 92%

The story is okay, but it's really missing something to make it pop. Your character's personality is unattractive, and it doesn't balance well. I think maybe if you had explained her interactions with other characters a little more, I would've liked the story more. However, your characters and storyline are very original, and I think that's what counts.