WolfsWail

Name: Rainwhisper

Clan: ThunderClan or ShadowClan (You need to decide! Personally, I like ThunderClan, but she seems like a RiverClan cat to me.)

Gender: She-cat

Appearance: Dark gray with a white chest and stomach. Black speckles go from her forehead to the end of her tail, and are scattered along her back. Her eyes are bright blue. She is really fluffy around her tail and neck. (I like this. She seems like a little snow leopard.)

Personality: She can be very serious, but she is happy most of the time. She is very easily angered, but usually gets over it fairly quickly and won't hold a grudge. (Her personality is okay.)

Backstory: She was born in a massive rainstorm, which is how she got the name Rainkit. She is close to her bigger brother. She figured out as a warrior that she loves the rain. It makes her happy and calms her down. (Okay, so I got a few random facts here) She is good at hunting, but was injured in a fight and has a scar along her neck. She was deputy, but she had kits with a WindClan tom. (Who? Again, I'd like you to expand a little on the story instead of telling.) She became leader, and took a mate in her Clan. She gave her last life for her daughter in a battle against a family of foxes. (Okay, I don't have a problem with the story itself, but more of how you told it. I would like to have heard a little more about the key points in her life, like who she had kits with, why she was made deputy after this, and how she made it to leader.)- 3 points

Family:

Father: Stormchaser- A dark gray tom with bright, blue eyes. (I'm not sure how I feel about this name. I kind of like it, and I sort of dislike it.)

Mother: Nightgaze- A silver she-cat with a white chest, chin, and tail tip. He has blue eyes and long fur, with black stripes.

Brother: Crowflight- A black tom with blue eyes and long fur. (I'm not so fond of the name Crowflight. Maybe Crowtalon, or Stormfeather.)- 1 point

Mate: Thorntooth- A gray tom with very sharp teeth and green eyes. He has short fur. (I like gray cats.)

Kits:

Foxkit- Pale gray with black tail and stripe down back. (Gender? I might have missed it in the form.)

Brackenkit- A really fluffy dark gray tabby tom with yellow eyes.

Results: 96%

I think this character is okay, she just needs a little something more. Your ideas are great, but if you're wanting to write a story about this character, you need to touch her story up a little bit and give a little more explanation. Best of luck!