(Lets make this chapter so orginal.... hmmm... lets give the charcter and the enemy no development as kits and make Silverkit an apprentice right away!)

Silverkit herd Firestar yowl,"All cats old enough to catch your own prey please join me for a clan meeting. Silverpaw raced out of the den and Frogpaw, Lionkit, and Lepoardkit all looked at her. She was the most beautiful She-cat ever! Williowkit  padded next to her, the second most beautiful She-cat. Finally Swankit who wasn't beautiful and was an ugly Calico she-cat. No toms looked at her."Silverkit and Williowkit, the beautiful she-cats will now be knows as Silverpaw and Willowpaw! I will mentor Silverpaw and Squirreltail will mentor Willowpaw. The clan yowled their names,"Silverpaw! Willowpaw!"."Finally Swankit is now Ugly" she joked"Swanpaw, Darkpelt can mentor her if she wants. The clan laughed at her.

"Sure, I've wanted an apprentice" Darkpelt meowed."Meeting over" Firestar meowed at last. Silverpae hopped up,"What will we be doing today Firestar!?"."We will be touring the territory and showing you off to Sunclan".

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*Face palm*
1. So alot of toms like Silverpaw!? Only Silver tabbys are pretty! They are magical unicorns with 10 000 pounds of makeup. So over used.

2. Don's just jump to the apprentice ceremony. Theres charcter development to be done!

3. Poor Swanpaw :( #Swanpawisbeautiful

4. Just 182 words.... this chapter is too short.