Name: Shortwater 

Ok, honestly, I love that name. 9/10

Name reasoning's: "Short" he was very short as a kit but that didn't last very long... the parents didn't want to change it though"Water" since water can often appear short, or in better terms, shallow, but it's often not. His pelt is also grey with some blue and storm water can also be more grey

I was a bit confused when you said water can appear short, did you mean flat? Yes, shallow is a better term to use. Ok, the pelt explains it. Also, why didn't his parents want to change it? 3/5

Appearance: He's a couple shades darker than regular grey, and he also has some little bits of blue-grey mixed in with the grey. He has some shorter than medium length fur that appears to make him look less malnourished than he actually is. He has dark brown eyes with some hints of hazel. He has a longish tail that often drags across the ground making the tip of it almost brown and covered in dust. His tail is also slightly fluffy and he is pretty tall.

DETAIL! YES! Ok, maybe paw size and scars, possibly how his gaze appears to others? 3/5

Personality: He's really shy in large crowds, but in small groups of at most three, he's pretty friendly and opens up semi-quickly. He's really insecure but he doesn't like to let that show. He can also be really sarcastic and gets in trouble many a time because he doesn't really think before he speaks, or he just wants to get a reaction out of others. He'll also do anything to make his friends laugh, even if he has to do something really embarrassing he'll almost always do it. He also is slightly depressed and has often skipped days of eating and self-harmed, resulting in ending up in the medicine den more days than he could count. Oh, and did I mention he gets embarrassed easily and overthinks a lot?

I'm a bit confused here. You said he was shy in large crowds, and then said that he was insecure, and then said that he would do anything to make someone laugh. Maybe clarify? 5/10

Mate: Raventhroat, a jet black she-cat with short, short fur and a shorter than normal tail. Her paws a larger than average and she's pretty short, but she's also fast. Her pupils are always dilated giving off the notion that her eyes are also black. Her throat is also slightly lighter than the rest of her but that's not why she got the suffix, she got the suffix because the leader thought it would a 'funny' to have her name remind her of when she tried to commit suicide as an apprentice.

BAD LEADER! BAD BAD BAD! Really nice detail! Still maybe add paw size, but really good otherwise! 4/5

I'm gonna guess no kits or friends? 5/5 + 10/10

Sexuality: demisexual/heterosexual

I mean, you could have just said straight...... but okie dokie 

Deformities: none Allergies: he's slightly allergic to mint so when they start dressing a dead body he's put le camp entrance 

Cool

Disorders: *deep inhale* he hallucinates a lot as well as he does have, Sleep paralysis, night terrors, Anorexia, depression and maybe anxiety (I still gotta do some more research on that tho)

Aight. Thats a lot.

Clan: IsleClan— (ignore the very rushedness and flat-out horribleness and lack of detail of this portion 'cause I wrote it when I was really tired)They live on a large island that twolegs rarely come to, except for this guy and his family, who so happens to breed cats. There's a large coral reef that the clan was named after that is to the east of the island. The clans are used to the hot sand and they have developed tough, resistant paw pads but they still get burned sometimes. Their camp is a network of caves and dug out tunnels that are very well put together, the camp is also very close to the water so they often get leaks and sometimes floods so the cats are taught to swim very, very early, mostly when they're three moons old.(There are new assessments as well and nothing changes in the code really)Kits can take the apprentice test at the early age of four moons, but they often fail. The test for becoming an apprentice is to be able to memorize the whole warrior code and be able to remember the different types of poisonous prey. Warrior assessment: being able to swim in the ocean when it's high tide, being able to remember the basic herbs and the poisonous types of fish, being able to repeat the warrior code once again and the basic hunting and fighting tests, they also need to stay on their own/in their own group for at least a quarter moon. Medicine assessment: remembering all the herbs, poisonous prey, swimming in the ocean at high tide, repeating the warrior and medicine cat code.(And here's the new herbs)Aloe: treats mild sunburn Papaya: Mashed, treats stomach ache and helps prevent infections for burns Milk thistle: increases the milk supply Basil: Thyme: used to calm and bring down shockMint: used for burials and bad breath Sea buckthorn: The leaves are used to alleviate cough, fever, pain.Watermint: helps stomachacheChamomile: helps to calm downReptan: reduces fever, inflammation, coughSpeedwell: sinus and ear infections Kava: anesthetic and for asthmaPoppy: sleepyPassion flower: antidepressant, helps with sleep and depression 

I'm just gonna let the score do the talkin' 10/10

Rank: let's just go with warrior

Ok 5/5

Favorite place: there's this large tide pool that is mostly enclosed by this cave, but there's a couple cracks in the top and he loves to sit there at night and watch the moonlight flood through those cracks and small holes and light up the pool.

Great detail! Nice! 4/5

Favorite hobby: uhm... fishing

Could be a bit more creative.... 1/5

Family: Tuftedflame— A white furred she-cat with big, black ears, dark hazel eyes and a small, grey nose and paw pads with a lean-ish frame, fluffy medium length fur that tufts at her ears and paws. Featherystance— a fluffy, long haired light grey tom with shorter-than-normal legs, slightly darker ears and tail with dark yellow eyes and no claws due to them breaking over and over since he often over worked himself as a young warrior. Kavakit—(dead, from his litter) a white she-cat with some grey speckles all over her back. She has fluffy, short-ish fur and a long tail. Her eye color was never known since she was stillborn but it is actually light brown (I figured I should include where he got his blue-grey from)Rapidstalker—(grandfather, dead) a blue-grey tom with some dark grey spots on his tail and back. As well as brown eyes with some green hints and a tall-ish frame as well as short fur.

Coolio 7/10

Alright. I don't know if you still want to PM me the backstory, So I'll just end it here, and maybe update it later if you want to.

ANYWAY! Final score is:

81/100! (For now, backstory will be full points)

The highest score so far! And sorry for the wait!