Name: Oceanbreeze 

I don't know why, but I really don't like cats with Ocean as a prefix. No downgrade though, because the prefix and suffix match really well. 8/10

Name reasons: (prefix) Ocean— because she had ocean blue eyes and she was unpredictable. She could be sharp, sassy and sarcastic on one day, or she could be calm and composed on another. (Suffix) breeze — because she is the fastest cat in the Clan and loved to run against the wind on a really windy day.

  Okay, I like the reasonings for both of them..... But she cant outrun my OC ;) 5/5

Appearance: small, compact, small-pawed, well-muscled, sleek-furred, lithe, blueish-silver tabby she-cat with startling ocean blue eyes, with ears and tail that are tipped with white, and a scar running down her flank.

Ooh me likey detail. Nice job! I get seek fur, but maybe length? Sleek is just smooth. 4/5

Personality: strong, brave, bold, impulsive at times, intelligent, adventurous, creative, SARCASTIC AS HELL, sassy, calm (at times), composed (at times), secretive, polite, loyal. 

She seemed a bit Marysu-ish, but you fixed it later on. 8/10

Mate: Reedfeather (in RiverClan then moves to ThunderClan, was at first a rogue who was actually Clanborn, but his parents were kicked out of RiverClan, so they had him and his sister outside of RiverClan) — beige tabby tom with green eyes, a long tail, and tufts of fur on the tips of his ears. He loves the river and the lake and swims every day for fun. He has a sister named Shadefrost.

Okay, anything about how he was treated when he came to Thunderclan as a rogue? 3/5

Kits: Willowleaf — silver tabby she-cat with green eyes, small paws like her mother and a mark on her forehead that looks vaguely like multiple willow leaves and a fluffy, sweeping tail, very close with her brother. Like Squirrelflight/Leafpool close. Eaglestorm: sleek-furred, broad-shouldered, long-haired, small-pawed brown tabby tom with icy blue eyes, a white underbelly and a really short tail. 

  I like the detail on the appearance,but could you add a bit ore on personalities? 3/5 

Friends in the Clan: Emberwhisker — light flame-coloured (so, light orange) she-cat with pale blue eyes, long whiskers, normal-sized paws, a torn ear and a skinny tail. Blizzardflame — short-furred chimera she-cat with one amber eye and one sky-blue eye, a scar along her foreleg, small paws and a relatively long tail (for those of you who don't know what a Chimera cat is, a Chimera is a cat that has an extra X chromosome which then makes it basically like its own twin. It is also known as a two-faced cat as it is one colour of fur on one side of its face and another colour on another) 

  Emberwhisker sounds like one of my OCs. And the name for the Chimera is amazing! If you have Bluestar and Fireheart as Grandparents, "Blizzard" and "Flame" fit really well, as well as being complete opposites, resembling their Chimera pelt. I don't know if you did that on purpose, but extra for creativity! 6/5

Gender: Female 

  Okie

Sexuality: straight 

  Nice, nice

Flaws: she sometimes snaps at people, she can be impulsive, she's very quiet and she doesn't really get along well with others; she mainly sticks with Emberwhisker, Blizzardflame, Jayfeather and Stormheart.

  Aight

Skills: she's the fastest runner in her Clan and is a formidable fighter and strategist 

  Again, not faster than my OC, but okay. Smart and fast... STOP MAKING THINGS SEEM LIKE THEY ARE COPIES OF ME! 

Enemies: Ashfur (she hates people who have threatened or have been rude to her, her family or her friends) 

  What did he do? Guess we'll find out... Oh wait, this is actually Canon times.

Favorite colour: indigo 

Ooo creative 

Deformities: none 

  'kay

Allergies: none 

  M'kay

Disorders: insomnia 

  Oooo also creative!

Clan: ThunderClan 

 Rank: young Warrior (becomes deputy, then leader after Mistystar, her mother) 

  OH YEAH BABY! (Sorry Spring.) Also, what did the clan think of Bluestar being leader, and then her Daughter? And then Her daughter after that? 10/10 and 5/5

Favorite place: the gathering island on the top of the tree 

  That's different.. Any specific branch?4/5

Favorite hobby: running against the wind, hunting, training her apprentice battle moves, making combinations of her favorite battle moves, doing self-made obstacle courses

Also nice! I like all of these creative people! 4/5

Family: Sisters: none Brother: Stormheart — huge gray tabby tom with green eyes, darker gray stripes, a white chest, a normal-sized tail and paws, and a back leg that got dislocated, so he walks with a limp sometimes Mother: Mistyfur (later Mistystar. You know what Mistyfoot looks like, so she's basically the same cat, just note that Fireheart and Bluestar are now the same age and they're mates) 

I'm gonna have to rebel...... FirexSand forever.

Father: Pinewhisker — short and sleek-furred, broad-shouldered gray tabby tom with amber eyes, a stumpy tail and normal-sized paws. Grandmother: Bluestar (you know what she looks like) Grandfather: Fireheart (you know what he looks like) 

FIREHEART YOU CAN DO BETTER THAN HER!!!!

Cousins: Jayfeather, Hollyleaf, Lionblaze, Alderheart, Sparkpelt, Juniperkit (deceased, Squirrelflight's son), Dandelionkit (deceased, Squirrelflight's daughter)

If Squirrelflight was born as Bluestar's daughter, does she still have her feistyness? Anywho.. 4/5

Backstory: (Okay here we go. Be prepared for a TON of rambling) Born to Mistyfur and Pinewhisker, Oceankit was always the smartest of all the kits in the nursery. Ever since the first time she saw her grandmother, Bluestar atop the Highledge, Oceankit knew that she wanted to be Clan leader someday. When she was an apprentice, she vowed silently that she would work harder than her denmates. Apprentice to Bluestar, Oceanpaw had her first hunting assessment much earlier than her denmates, which made others jealous of her. They would usually tease her, except for Jaypaw. She would usually rant to him about her annoying kin. One day, Oceanpaw had had enough. She ran out of the camp and was sadly wandering the territory. She was so angry that she began plotting ways to battle Hollypaw, Lionpaw at the same time. Bluestar found her doing a self-made obstacle course and when Oceanpaw explained her battle plan, she knew that she would make a great leader someday. When Oceanpaw's mentor had finally persuaded her to come back to ThunderClan, she saw that Lionpaw had become Lionblaze and that Hollypaw had become Hollyleaf and became incredibly sad. Though, she wasn't sad forever, because as soon as she returned, Bluestar named her Oceanbreeze for her love of the wind. For many moons, she was happy. She watched her mother become deputy, and saw Jaypaw become Jayfeather. Though her life was once again plunged into tragedy when Reedfeather, a RiverClan warrior fell in love with her. He wanted to meet her, but Oceanbreeze remained loyal to her Clan and didn't meet Reedfeather. Although she could not get the RiverClan tom out of her head, so at the next gathering, she agreed to meet him. They met in secret until Oceanbreeze told Reedfeather that she was expecting kits. Reedfeather, overjoyed, told Oceanbreeze that he did not want their kits to grow up without a father. Oceanbreeze finally revealed to her Clan about her secret meetings with Reedfeather and said that her mate wanted to leave RiverClan and live in ThunderClan. Bluestar was curious but gingerly accepted Reedfeather and his sister, Shadefrost into ThunderClan. Shadefrost became another medicine cat, but later had to step down. (Instead of Bramblestar's imposter, Half Moon was reincarnated and joined ThunderClan) Oceanbreeze met the reincarnation of Half Moon, and after seeing that Jayfeather was attracted to the beautiful white she-cat, Oceanbreeze warned him not to get too attached to her and to stay loyal to the Warrior Code. Later, Oceanbreeze's kits, Willowkit and Eaglekit were born and soon became apprentices, during the Great Battle, Oceanbreeze fought with all the strength of LionClan, the ferocity of TigerClan and the swiftness of LeopardClan. She died of her wounds, but the spirit of Bluestar passed into her and revived her. She made her way up in the ranks of ThunderClan and eventually became deputy and then leader.

ARGH TO MANY CATS ARE DYIN' YOU'RE GONNA MAKE ME CRY- I just realised that Bluestar revived her. Maybe a bit more detail, but I like alternatives to stories! 12/15

And that wraps it up! Thanks so much fro your OC, I really enjoyed rating it while still in my PJ's (Don't judge)! I'm gonna have to give two separate ratings though...

Normal rating: 76/100

Personal Rating: 70/100 'cause you said FirexBlue was better than FirexSand, and you said that she was faster than my OC, which is impossible because he is faster than the fastest WindClan cat (Book coming up soon, possibly with your Cover. Or Spring's, I still have to decide.)

Just go off of the normal rating! You have the second highest score! 

Maple

Also, is it sad that most of these OC ratings are longer than the chapters in my book?