For @TheCrystalTorch. Next oc will be Whisper That Chills The Bone.

Name: Wind That Rattles Trees (Wind)

I like this. I think "Wind That Rattles Branches" would make more sense, unless this is a really strong wind we're talking about... regardless, I love it. Tribe cat ocs are really neglected, so it's pretty uncommon that any tribe name is overused. It's good to see another Tribe cat, yay!

Gender: Shecat

Okie

Appearance: black with white tailtip, paws, head fur, and legs. She has majestic blue eyes that look more on the purple side.

The fur color is alright. Surprisingly, I've seen a huge decrease in the number of black & white ocs. I like this pattern too, the mostly black with a little bit of white. Usually, it's the other way around, mostly white with black patches.

But can you expect me not to point out the blue eyes? They are soooo overused. Taking points off for that, sorry.

Clan: Tribe of Endless Skies (my own)

Cool! This makes sense. It sticks to a nature-y name, not something odd that cats wouldn't think of.

Rank: Young Cave guard

I like that, she-cats are usually prey hunters, and toms cave guards, so I like that you didn't do that.

Personality: Sweet and kind with a hint of mischief. She would normally roam away from her tribe. She is too trusting and is now broken due to her trusting heart.

I love that!! She has flaws, but is overall still a good cat -- and not cliche! Not much to say about this other than good job!

Backstory: As a kit she always wanted to be like Flower That Grows In A Meadow, a prey hunter. But she became a cave guard. She was always mischievous and roamed away from the tribe at times. But she would always come back to the tribe. One night as she was wondering she found a loner by the name of Storm. She brought him to her tribe after they kept meeting for about a moon. She tribe accepted him as Storm That Comes From Clouds. She fell in love with him. He felt different. One day she was going to tell him. He rejected her and said he loved another cat in the tribe. She was broken now. She continued on with duties and never roamed away from the tribe again. Soon she formed rage and killed Storm, despite him having kits to care for. She did it in secret. She regretted it all. No cat suspected she killed him. She feels sorry for his mate and tries her best to be friendly towards his family.

GREAT! It's so great to see a cat who's a murderer and regrets it. I can tell that she's a good cat that really only made a deadly mistake, she was heartbroken and not thinking rationally. You can really tell that she has her flaws, she made mistakes, but she learned from them and became a better cat. That is what I like to see in ocs; a cat with a realistic personality. Not that you can't be realistic without killing someone, but I like that she isn't a stereotypical bad guy OR good guy.

Mother: Bird That Flies Above (Bird) white shecat with black paws and blue eyes.

That's where she gets her looks from, then? I like it, it's odd when people make their parents look really different from their kits. I did that for my first ever oc... his mother was a white cat, his father a silver cat. What color was he? Brown. And his brother? Ginger. It makes no sense. He was my first oc tho, so at least I have an excuse...

Father: Wolf That Stalks Its Prey (Wolf) brown tabby tom with emerald green eyes.

Coool

Siblings: Flower That Grows In A Meadow (Flower) (from another litter) light brown tabby shecat with forest green eyes.

Um, I think the word 'A' should be taken out. Tribe names usually leave out words like that. For example, she's "Wind That Rattles Trees," not "Wind That Rattles THE Trees."

·~*OVERALL*~·
I really like her, I just... get really annoyed at blue eyes. 9/10, only took a point off for eye color. Everything else is goood!!!