Tigerflame

For @EspeonMeister again. Next oc will be for you... again.

Name: Tigerflame

Cool name. Tiger is a bit overused, and so is flame. But these two together make a very cool name, and I really like it. Though, I've seen this name a few times..

Gender: tom

Nice

Apprearence: golden brown with black stripes, golden eyes

Ahh, this is good. Reminds me of Tigerheart. Golden brown isn't used very often, and the black stripes were a nice touch. Golden eyes are much better than green or blue, so you can't go wrong with them :3

Clan: LeafClan, then StarClan

I like this name. I imagine they live in a forest. LeafClan isn't very original, but I like Clan names that make sense.

Rank: senior warrior

Okay :3

Personality: playful, annoying, brave, cheerful, sometimes bossy, stubborn, protective

Flaws! Nice! This is a good personality, though it can be a bit typical for main ocs.

Backstory: when he and his siblings, Applefur and Fallentree, were kits there were always getting in cats ways. They were the liveliest apprentices LeafClan has ever seen. Once they became warriors they were very happy. Applefur was always the kind and caring type. Fallentree was the clumsy, brave kind. Tigerflame was the stubborn, protective type. When LeafClan was attacked by badgers, Fallentree died fighting to protect Applefur when she was injured. Fallentree's death took a tole on Tigerflame and Applefur. Applefur accepted that Fallentree wasn't come thing back, but Tigerflame slipped into a deep depression. He barley ate and barley slept, all he did was stare at the stars at night. The only one who brought him out of his depression was Leaftail. Leaftail brought him out of his depression. When she said she would be expecting his kits he was overjoyed. Then the badgers came back, he died protecting Leaftail and his unborn kits. He died saying: "I'm finally going to see your face, Fallentree. Leaftail, protect our kits." Leaftail did end up giving birth to a tom and she-kit. She named them Tigerkit and Rosekit. Rosekit died when she was an apprentice by getting ran over by a monster. Then when Leaftail became Leafstar Tigerpaw became Tigerfrost. Then he died in a battle with DarkClan. Tigerflame is now in StarClan with his brother, Fallentree, his two kits, Tigerfrost and Rosepaw and is still currently going into all of Leafstar's dreams.

This is good! Applefur and Leaftail are both canon names.. so I have to remove a point for that. But otherwise, this backstory is good. I love how Leafstar helped him out of his depression, that was a nice touch. Overall, this is alright. Not the most unique backstory.

Mate: Leaftail/ Leafstar

Canon name...

Kits: Tigerfrost and Rosepaw(would've been Rosewing)

Cute names! I especially like how Tigerfrost was named after his father.

Mother: Woodtail

Wood- is a cute prefix..

Father: Wildbranch

I love this!

Siblings: Applefur, Fallentree

Applefur is another canon name..
Fallentree is cool tho.

·~*OVERALL*~·
I have to remove points for the canon names, so 8/10. He isn't the most unique oc, but he's pretty cool. Good job on his name and appearance.

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