For @Owlstar-Rippleclan. Next oc will be Wavestar.

Name: Snowdust

This is okay! Snow- is a bit overused, but I like -dust. I've never seen this particular name before. This is very pretty, I like it. It really fits her appearance well.

Gender: she cat

She is cat

Appearance: snowy white she cat with dust colored patches, one blue eye and one brown eye

I like the fur color! It fits her name perfectly, and you don't see it often. Very nice.

BUT! The different colored eyes make her seem like a Mary-Sue. Cats that have eyes that stand out just make it seem like they're meant to be perfect. It bugs me.

Rank: Starclan warrior

Okay *throws glitter*

Clan: starclan (Mapleclan)

You see MapleClan a bit, but I like it. There must be a lot of maple trees there.

Personality: curious, attitude of a kitten, brave, stubborn, energetic, arrogant at times

Nice! She's got some flaws. I love cats that act childish, it's very cute. That's all.

Backstory: snowkit was born the smallest of the litter she almost did not make it through birth, her brother and sister, frogkit and breezekit always taunted her of being the smallest. One day when she finally opened her eyes everyone laughed at her blue eyes and brown eye, she was always bullied until she became a apprenrice. When snowpaw and her best friend hollypaw were battle training she accidently moved wrong and landed a death blow on her neck. She was thrust aside by her mentor leafleap. She was dragged back to camp roughly everyone thought she purposely killed her friend. For many moons she was treated like a prisoner. She was starved and tired everyone hated her she thought she had nothing to live for until one day. There leader Spiritstar reported that it was an accident that hollypaw died. Everyone still treated her differently but she was once again a member of her clan. Her brothers and sister were name frogleap and breezerunner. Her warrior ceremony was postponed from because of her little insident. One day when she was hunting she scented a whole patrol of Frostclan cats. She raced back to camp to see a huge battle raging she leaped into battle imedetley spotting spiritstar unmoving with a the large Frostclan leader towering above her. She launched herself at him no knocking him away from her leader. He turned and sunk his fangs deep into snowpaw neck and she went limp. After the battle spiritstar announced that even though she was dead she deserved her warrior name and was named snowdust. The whole of mapleclan regrets the way they treated her and now all they remember was that she was a brave courageous cat.

This is interesting. I've noticed that quite a bit of people make their ocs the runt, but oh well. At least you had a reason for doing that. Technically, all kittens have blue eyes as first, so she wouldn't even have the amber eye until later in her life. I do like that she was bullied, but nothing about this story really.. stands out to me. She was bullied throughout her life, but died a hero.. seems kinda like a generic backstory. Not very original, but still nice.

Mate: Jaggedfeather

I like Jagged-

Kits: Owlsight, Cherrywhisker

Owlsight sounds just like my oc, Owlflight XD

Cherry is a nice prefix.

Mother: Petalfall

I like this.

Father: Brokenbreeze

I'm curious, why is he named that?

Sister: Breezerunner

Sounds too close to Wind Runner :/

Brother: Frogleap

Pretty sure this name is canon.

·~*OVERALL*~·
7/10. She's pretty good, I like her personality, fur color, and name. But her different colored eyes bother me :/ and nothing about her backstory really stands out, but it isn't bad. She could maybe use a few changes, but overall pretty good!