For @Agent_Luna. Next oc will be Wind That Rattles Trees. I don't have many ocs left to do and I'm feeling great.

Name: Shadowheart

Hmmm... I see this name a lot, actually. While it is cool, it just isn't very original. Shadow- is a bit overused in ocs, and -heart is overused in ocs AND in the books.

Gender: She-cat

Yes... ok

Appearance: A ginger she-cat with black fur on her ears, tail, cheeks and 2 paws. One of her other paws is white and the other is a mix between white and black. A green-brown hybrid left eye and a silver right eye. She has 3 claw marks one her left eye and a scar across her mouth. She is also missing a massive chunk out of one ear.

WOW! Descriptive. Loved it until you got to the eye color. I... hate ocs with multiple eye colors. She has 3 different eye colors, even! It just makes your oc seem like a Mary-Sue.

Clan: Dark Forest previously NightClan

Hmm, is NightClan an oc version of ShadowClan?

Rank: Previous Deputy

Ok

Personality: Cunning, Smart, Very sarcastic, anything but loyal, secretive

I like this.. sort of. On one hand, yes, she has flaws. But she seems so... generic? For a bad guy, anyway. For ONCE, I'd just like to see a villain with a personality other than "secretive, mean, evil!"

Though I do like the sarcastic part, that's cool.

Backstory: She was a normal kit until one day she was playing with her litter mates and decided to climb up a rock. She got to the top and fell off after a brief moment. She was left with a missing ear chunk and a scar arose her lips after they scrapped on the rocks. The other teased her and when she became an apprentice she was talking to her friend, a rouge called Fang. Her brother, Firepaw spotted the rouge and chased him off towards GrassClan. He was killed by a monster chasing off Fang. Shadowpaw blamed herself and joined Fangs group of rouges. During her initiation test she got the claw marks on her left eye. Her group killed many clan cats, including her father, before declaring war. During this war she killed even more cats and was eventually killed by her sister. Just before she was killed she begged for forgiveness even thought she knew she would die. Her sister forgave her in Shadowheart's last moments. She is still roaming the Dark Forest today with her mate Fang and kit Feather.

Hmm. I like that she had a reason for disliking her Clan, but wanting revenge just because she was teased seems a bit... dramatic. And why was she friends with a rogue? I suppose it was because her Clan rejected her. Overall, this is alright, though it isn't that.. original.

Mother: Jaywing

Canon name, overused...

Father: Stormstar

I have a Stormstar :D

Siblings: Firepaw and Skypelt

I like these.

Mate: Fang
Kits: Moondust(joined NightClan), Wolfpelt(joined NightClan)and Feather

Hmm, okay. How come this wasn't mentioned in her backstory..?

·~*OVERALL*~·
5/10. Honestly, she seems kinda... cliche. The heterochromia bothers me. The name is overused, and her backstory is alright, but nothing really.. stands out. Her personality just isn't unique, the only thing I really liked about her is that she's sarcastic. I like that she was given forgiveness in the end, but.. I'd fix her up a bit :l