For @WolfSerenade63. Next oc will be Bloodmoon.

Riverleap (other names: no name, Riverkit, Riverpaw)

((Would normally point out that River is a forbidden prefix but she's in an original Clan so its ok))

Hmm. River- is a bit overused, tbh. -leap is one of my favorites, but I have to admit that it is also overused. I've seen this name a few times. It's very cute, but no points for originality.

Gender: she-cat

Of course...

Appearance: long-haired calico she-cat, a pink nose with a black spot, and yellow green eyes

Aw! I love that you specified the color of her nose, no one ever does that. So cute. Yellow-green eyes are common for calico ocs for some reason, but they also aren't overused. I love this.

Clan: ForestClan

Mmm, overused, but alright. It makes sense. Clan names are meant to either be named after their founder, or their territory. Obviously ForestClan lives in a forest, like RiverClan lives by a river. (It was also named after River Ripple but u get wat i mean) It makes sense.

Highest Rank: Elder

Most ppl don't make their ocs elders for some reason.

Personality: cautious, loving, shy, timid, outgoing with her kin

Sounds like my cat. (who looks just like Riverleap btw, but not long-haired) But she doesn't get along with her kin.... in fact, her little brother is her greatest enemy. Poor Oliver

But this personality could use a bit more... flaws. Cautious and timid are flaws, but they aren't that major? Just doesn't seem very unique.

Backstory: Riverleap was born to a she-cat named River. She had two sisters and one brother. When they were very young, River was killed by Twolegs, Riverleap's siblings died of starvation. She found her way into ForestClan territory and collapsed in exhaustion at a stream. A patrol found her and they brought her to camp. Fallenstar was kind of like Riverkit's mother. Eventually she became a warrior and became mates with Darkfeather and had kits.

I like this, but.. I'd like to know more about her life in the Clan, please! Like you described how she got to the Clan, but you just... didn't really mention anything after that except that she had kits...

Mother: River

So Riverleap was named after her mother, I'm assuming? How did the others know her mother's name? Did Riverkit tell them? Was she old enough? I'm curious.

Foster Mother: Evermist

So her prefix is... Ever? Like she was Everkit, Everpaw? That's weird.

Siblings: unknown tom and two unknown she-kits

:(

Foster Sisters: Galekit, Swallowkit, Poppykit, and Asterkit

Love the names! What were their names as warriors tho?

Mate: Darkfeather

Overused :l

Kits: Springflower, Violetdream

I don't like Springflower. The warriors don't know what Spring is... unless u mean Spring- like jump or the body of water, but considering u made the suffix -flower, probably not. Correct me if I'm wrong tho.

·~*OVERALL*~·
7/10. Add some flaws, a more detailed backstory, etc. Otherwise, she's good. I like her appearance, and she reminds me of my kitty, Bay..... Bay is a jerk lmao