Mallowface

For @Warrior_at_Heart. This is her last one I think. Next oc will be Riverleap.

Name: Mallowface

Awesome! Mallow- is very very underused. So is -face; you really only see it in background characters. I love this name a lot, it's nice to see an oc with a more boring --but still unique-- name.

Gender: Tom

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Appearance: He is a beige tabby tom with brown eyes

I like this! Beige is very VERY underused. I think this may be the first oc I've ever seen that is described as beige, actually. Brown eyes are a teeny bit more common, but they are generally ignored. Even when someone wants a more uncommon eye color for an oc, they tend to stay away from brown because... it's boring, I guess. Anyway, good job on this. It's a simple appearance, which goes to show that you can make your oc original without having to go into great detail on their looks.

Clan: ThunderClan

Overused, but oh whale.

Age: 24 moons

2 years

Rank: Medicine Cat

Oh, I didn't expect that. Mallowface seems like a warrior name to me, but hey, it reminds me of Barkface :P

Personality: Jittery, nervous, wants to prove himself, good at interpreting signs, can't remember every herb and its use

This seemed a bit like a cliche medicine cat, but the last 2 were a nice touch. I like that he can't remember the herbs. That's a detail that most people don't bother adding to their ocs... I like this personality. I'm a bit annoyed by the "nervous, shy, awkward" personality that medicine cat ocs usually have, but the rest of this makes up for that.

Mother: Dead

Do they just stop having names when they die?

Father: Thrushnose

I like this. -nose is really cute.

Sister(s): Horsepaw

Horsepaw? Lol

Brother(s): Crowleg, Cougarfur, Lionfire, Hareleg

Do the warriors know what cougars are? I guess they might, but according to legend (I thiinnkk) the old Clans were LionClan, TigerClan, and LeopardClan. So those should be the only big cat prefixes. There may have been a CougarClan I guess... that just wasn't mentioned?

Backstory: Mallowface was the fifth born of his parents and one of his brothers was a warrior and three were apprentices. He looked up to Crowpaw, Harepaw, Lionpaw, and Cougarfur at that time. They were fantastic cats and the clan enjoyed them. Crowpaw and Harepaw were definitely mischievous. Lionpaw wanted to be respected and Cougarfur was deputy. Mallowpaw wanted to do something as great as his brothers. He was very excited when Mallowpaw was apprentices to the med. cat. His sister was born soon after. Her name was Horsepaw. Mallowpaw had a great connection with StarClan, but he only knew the basic herbs. He wondered if he would have to train as a warrior instead but he didn't he just kept trying. He eventually started memorizing more than the basics, and received his name, Mallowface. He still can't remember everything to this day.

I like this! It's pretty simple, but this is good. I like that he looked up to his siblings and all. There was no death or other sad part, which was nice. Not every cat has to go through something traumatic to have an interesting backstory. I really like this oc. Really.

·~*OVERALL*~·
10/10!!!! Glad to add another cat to the Hall of Fame. This oc was very original, but somehow still so... simple. It was nice, to say the least. Really, good job.

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