For @-TheAlphaRider-. next oc will be Aquafrost.

Name: Furypaw (Formerly Fury)

A N G E R Y

Why is he named Furypaw? That is an odd name. Who looks at a tiny, fluffy kit and says "Behold, I name thee FURY"

Like that's a bit harsh, but he was a loner, and I guess they do have some odd names sometimes.

Anyway, you don't see Fury- often, so good job on that. I'd like to know what his warrior name will be.

Gender: Tom

N i c e

Clan : Thunderclan (I know, super uncreative)

It's fine. We do know the most about ThunderClan territory, so that's why a lot of people do this Clan..

Appearance : Soft black fur with stormy blue colored eyes

Very plain. I like the black fur, you don't really see many black ocs. It would be nice if he had some more unique patterns on him, though.

As for the blue eyes, we all know that this is terribly overused. However, the "stormy" was a nice touch, and it fits his name.

Black cats can't even have blue eyes, can they? In order to have blue eyes, a cat must be white in some place, usually the face. I'd recommend putting some white on him around his face and in other places :3

Rank : (older) apprentice

Nice.

Personality : Usually shy, has some trust issues due to his past, but around cats he knows very well he is known to be funny & sarcastic. Bad at hunting and strategy. Good at fighting and climbing.

I like how you included what he is bad/good at. That's a very nice touch. When a cat is named after an emotion, it kinda would make sense to have their personality have something to do with that..

Like, he should be grumpy, snappy, something like that. To match his name.. you know?

Backstory: He used to be a loner named Fury and had a very happy life with his parents who were also loners, until his mother died of sickness. His father survived with him until 2 moons later when his father ran away and left him in the middle of the night. Fury hardly survived and lived off of the little that his father and mother taught him about hunting. When he turned 8 moons old, he went into the forest that the clans lived in without knowledge of who was living there, and ended up in Thunderclan territory. Thunderclan decided to take him into the clan since he was in bad condition due to near starvation. He wasnt welcomed into the clan right away and soon proved his loyalty through trying to hunt / fight in battles. He was given the name Furypaw.

This is great. A loner joining the Clans is quite overused, but you did it right. He wasn't immediately accepted, which is more realistic. Reminds me a bit of Scourge and Rusty combined. I like it!

No mate/kits

Ok.

·~*OVERALL*~·
He's alright, 6/10. His name doesn't make much sense with his personality, and his appearance is pretty dull.. I'd put some white on him, preferably on his face. Maybe give him white patches or something, or change his eye color.

I'd like to know what his warrior name will be !!!