Again, for @somemorebooks. Next oc will also be for somemorebooks.

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echoshade

Echo- is horribly overused. It gets on my nerves. -shade isn't as common, but I do see it a lot. I haven't seen the particular name Echoshade, but echo and shade are unoriginal..

she-cat

Ok

dark grey with lighter flecks, greenish grey eyes

Hmm. Her fur is like a reverse Ashfur. I hate Ashfur. I haven't seen this particular pattern before, so good job with originality. I also love greenish gray eyes.

rainclan

Pretty overused, oh well.

senior warrior

Great!

kind and great mentor to many apprentices. she can become impatient with younger apprentices and although she is a good teacher, she can get irritated very easily. she also can be very forgetful. she also doesn't create close bonds with others, even her parents and best friends.

This is great! I LOVE it! You don't see many ocs that are great mentors. That kind of cat is normally a background character, so good job on that. I like that she is forgetful and irritable. Really, don't change any of this.

no mate or kits

:'(

she was born to rogue parents who joined the clan because where they previously stayed was becoming crowded with a badger family. they tried to find a new home and found the clans, but her parents, who were old at the time, couldn't cope with clan life. they both died of the illnesses which were easy to catch, and didn't respond to medicine. echoshade was given her warrior name, and served the clan since, despite what had happened with her parents. she had never really got on with them as she should have, so she didn't feel enough pain at their death.

Simple backstory, I like it. It's a cliche, rogue to Clan, but the death of her parents added a bit of a twist to it. I like that she wasn't hugely impacted by it, that was kinda unexpected. Awesome!

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Really, she's awesome. 9/10. I just don't like the prefix Echo, it's so overused. Other than that, this is pretty awesome!