For @EspeonMeister. You entered a few ocs, so the next few updates will be those. There was too much to put in one update, soo...

Name: Coldstar/ Coldbreeze

Cold- is one of my favorite prefixes. Coldbreeze is seen quite often, but I love the reason behind the name, so I wouldn't change it at all.

Gender: She-cat (lol sorry)

It's cool dude

Apprearance: white she-cat with silver splotches, icy blue eyes

Eh. The silver splotches are good, you can't go wrong with silver. But the icy blue eyes are horribly overused, so I just... eh.

Clan: IceClan

Pretty overused, but it's better than SnowClan.

Rank: leader duh

Yeah duh

Personality: sweet, kind, gets angry when a cat from her Clan is in danger, very stubborn, was a little bossy when an apprentice

Ahh, flaws. Not many flaws, I'd add one or two more. Otherwise, this is good.

Backstory: Coldstar well Coldpaw then was a hyper, stubborn, bossy apprentice. She was quite a handful to her mentor Twinklefur. Her mother had died giving birth to her and her only brother, Frostpaw, died when he got ran over by a monster. Coldpaw was devastated when he died. She shut a lot of cats out except her father Troutclaw and Waterpaw. When she became a warrior she requested to be named Coldbreeze, because her brother was saying how he wanted his name to be Frostbreeze, so that's what she wanted to be named. After training Silverpaw into a warrior, she became the deputy after the other one retired to become an elder. She was a great deputy but still had her apprentice personality. When, ironically, FROSTstar died she became leader and has become a great leader. She named Waterclaw as her deputy since he was the only one she didn't shut out. And they became more then friends.

Perfect! This isn't the most exciting backstory, but I love the bit about Frostpaw. I love the reasoning behind her warrior name. This is good. I'm getting Bluefur/Snowfur feels.. Matching names, and dying on the thunderpath, then becoming leader.. ay.

Mate: Waterclaw

N i c e

Kits: Saborkit/Sabortooth tom, Polarkit/Polarspirit she-cat, Arctickit/Arcticfrost she-cat, Rainkit/Rainstorm tom

I don't think the warriors know what sabor, polar, and arctic mean... but I guess IceClan does :3

Mother: Freezepelt

This is just one letter away from Breezepelt.

No one likes Breezepelt.

Father: Troutclaw

Nice.

Sibling: Frostpaw (Wanted to be Frostbreeze)

Poor lil guy.

·~*OVERALL*~·
9/10. I say just add a bit more flaws, she has the stereotypical leader personality. I liked her as an apprentice, tho.