For @FireWolfUnder. Next oc will be Peace/Foxheart/Peaceheart.

Name: AdderStrike/AdderFur

You aren't supposed to capitalize the suffix. It's only Adderstrike, Adderfur. I like these names, they're okay. Adder is used a bit, but never for main ocs, it's normally background characters. Adderstrike is fairly overused. Adder and fur kind of rhyme, which makes the name kinda... silly.

Gender:Tom

Okay.

Appearance: brown tabby with light brown under belly and white forepaws

Pretty overused, brown tabby and white. The lighter underbelly is nice tho, I like this appearance. Please give me his eye color..

Clan:OceanClan

I like this name.

Rank:Warrior/Deputy

Okay :3

Personality:Can be grumpy at times,hard working,caring,brave

No flaws here, really. Add some. Being grumpy isn't a major flaw, make him clumsy/forgetful/etc.

Back story: AdderStrike ventured apon many she-cats,but one caught his eye,RiverStar,leader of OceanClan,he drove out his uncle although he never came back,Hus spirit took the form of a young kit who then became Oceanclan's new deputy, AdderFur.

I'm confused. Who is his uncle? Why did he drive him out???? Why was he reincarnated????????

Mate:RiverStar(formly),SnakeHeart

Nice names.

Kits:ShadowClaw,RedFur,JayBlaze,
LilyFeather.

You don't capitalize the suffix.... again. Sorry, but this bothers me.

ShadeKit,DapplePaw and NeonClaw

Do cats know what Neon means??? What

·~*OVERALL*~·
Sorry, but I'd say 3/10. He needs some work. His backstory is confusing, he doesn't really have any flaws, and his name is a bit meh. Sorry if this seems very rude...