By Maci_gumball , thanks!

Name: Frozenpeak/star
Ooh, cool name! Both Frozen and peak are very underused, and the name doesn't scream 'evil'.
Gender: Male
Another male ._.
Clan: Windclan now Dark Forest
Mhmm
Rank: Warrior now Leader
Mhm
Appearance: A white tom with grey stripes and black paws, burning amber eyes.
Ooh, descriptive! I like it. Amber eyes are pretty underused.
Personality: Cold, relentless, timid, crabby, but protective of his mate and kits
This is great!! Definitely lots of flaws, which is typical for an evil dude, but the flaws aren't stereotypical, for example, Dark Forest cats aren't usually timid. Awesome!
Backstory: Eager to be the leader of Windclan, Frozenpaw was the most loyal apprentice there could ever be. Since the deputy was sick, Frozenpaw thought he would take over when the deputy passed away. Frozenpeak, a newly made warrior was crushed when the Windclan leader, Duststar, chow a more experienced warrior. He was so hurt that he attempted murder on his leader, but was then banished from the clan for his crimes. Living the life of a loner, Frozenpeak joined the Dark Forest in his dreams, and soon became part leader there. He also took on a mate, Nightrunner from Shadowclan. The great battle came, and Frozendeath found himself fighting along with the Dark Forest, being killed by his own brother. Since he was now dead, he became the full leader of the Dark Forest, now Frozenstar. He didn't realize his mate had been expecting kits, and he watched over her as she gave birth to three healthy kits.
This is great! I just have a few issues. Why did he become part leader of Dark Forest? Was he like skilled or something? Why did he take a mate from Shadowclan if he was a loner :0 did they sneak out and meet each other or something? Other than that, this is great!
Mate: Nightrunner (all black she-cat with blue eyes)
Mm
Kits: Shatteredlight (light brown tom with darker flecks and hazel eyes) Darksky (black tom with green eyes) Deathsong (Grey she-cat with black stripes and hazel eyes)
Ok, who looks at their tiny fluffy kit and says "your name will be Deathkit." Seriously?! The other names are cool though
Mother: Icetail (beautiful she-cat with blue eyes)
I've seen these names a few times.
Father: Hawkstone (grey tom with amber eyes)
Kin: Tunnelstep (brown tom with a black face and paws)
Tunnelstep is kind of a weird name, but I'm here to judge Frozenpeak, not Tunnelstep.
Cause of death: Murdered by his brother
Who's his brother :0?

Rating: 9/10
So close to 10! I'm just slightly confused in the backstory and I'd like to know who his brother is..! Other than that, this OC is AWESOME!!