reviewed by:

HalieNobles

title of the book you reviewed:

The Beginning

author of the book you reviewed:

CatherAStewart

review on title:

It is simple and I like it. I think it goes very well with your story.

review on the cover:

I like the cover, but it doesn't really show what your book is about. It has the ocean, but what's the story have to do with the ocean? Something more detailed would help a lot.

review on the grammar:

There were only a few grammar mistakes, nothing major. You could easily go back and edit them.

review on the punctuation:

Everything seemed to be in the right place. If it wasn't, it wasn't that big of a deal for it to make me stumble over anything

review on the character development:

You're characters came together well, but they were thrown together too quickly.

review on the plot:

Your story is coming together well, and I believe it has potential. You're moving a little fast with the characters though and I think it would be a little better if you put more detail into each chapter, it seemed like they fell in love just like that. You should put a little more time in between events.

overall review:

Overall, I like the story, you just need to put more time in between all of the events happening. Everything was just happening a little to quickly.