Author : AbhishekMalhan_Mixed
Reviewer : dramaqueen_Nahar

Title (Titre) : 10/10

I found it perfect for the story.

Cover (Couverture) : 10/10

Story cover is perfect and totally depicting the story theme.

Blurb (La Description) : 5/10

Story blurb is not that interesting. It should be attractive enough to make a reader curious to read it.

Storyline (Scénario) : 4/10

I didn't find the storyline interesting. The male protagonist abuses his wife without any strong reason. As if she is a toy to play with. At least kids also have some love for their toy but this man doesn't have any humanity. He hires 4 goons to rape his own wife. Who does this kind of inhuman act? And why? At the end, the female protagonist committes suicide. After all the blander it is revealed that it all happened in the previous birth. A reader will surely get disappointed after reading the whole story.

Dialogues (Expression) : 5/10

The Dialogues are good but not expressive. Hindi dialogues are used a lot so those who don't know Hindi won't be able to understand the story.

Creativity/originality(La créativité/Originalité) : 4/10

Creativity needs to improve a lot. Writing skills and dialogue delivery also needs to be improved.

Overall engagement (Engagement global) : 5/10

A reader will lose interest in this story when the male protagonist starts abusing his wife without any strong reason. How can a man be so cruel to an innocent girl?

Grammar (Grammaire) : 6/10

Grammar needs to improve a bit.

Characters (Personnages) : 5/10

Without the main characters I couldn't find any other effective characters here. There is no character to help the female protagonist.

Flow (Couler) : 4/10

Story speed is too high. It doesn't explain the total drama or any emotions properly and top of that, sudden writer's pov is a bit off the track for a reader.

Reviewer's opinion :

I will suggest the writer to reconsider the story line. There are lots of loopholes in the plot and the maximum language is in Hindi. You can at least give translation for those so that everybody can read. Story flow is too speedy and it is too abusive without any strong and rational reason. Writing skills also needs to be improved.

Total:- 58/100

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