Here's the Merlot you requested. Without further ado, let's get this show on the road.

First Impressions...

I like the graphic on your cover. There is something ominous yet captivating about it. Unfortunately, your title and name are hardly visible on the cover. They almost blend right into the vignette.

There isn't much of a summary for me to comment on. I'm not sure if you plan to use this book as a place to jot down story ideas or turn it into a collection of fables.

On to the stories...

As individual chapters, they do make an interesting read, that is, if you can look past the grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes (more on that later). They reminded me of Aesop's Fables and folklore, stories we tell during bonfires or cautionary tales our grandparents used to tell us. The moral at the end is a nice touch.

You asked me to read chapter four, so that is what the rest of this review will be focused on.

First of all, it's unfinished. From what you have written so far, the whole thing seems out of sequence. It looks like you're just tossing out whatever that pops into your head. The storyline keeps veering off into different directions, making it hard to understand what kind of story you have in mind.

You have some descriptions of the background and setting, but those should've been placed at the beginning rather than in the middle of the story. If you're creating a fantasy world, it's essential that readers understand the setting and background of the story first. Otherwise, nobody is going to understand the concept of the teardrop and its significance.

The yin and yang reference is confusing, as is the backstory on the gods. I don't know where you're going with this, and honestly, I don't think you know where you're going with this, either. Mixing western mythology with Asian philosophy just doesn't work here. Different cultures have different mythology and religion, so be sure to get a sense of that before you use it in your story. 

About your grammar...

Unlike the previous chapters, where everything is cluttered into one massive paragraph, chapter four is separated into small paragraphs, which is good. There are still quite a bit of grammatical errors and punctuation mistakes, though. There needs to be a space after a comma and a period, something you have forgotten to do. There are also some typos and misuse of words, which makes it hard to understand your story at times.

To wrap things up...

You have some interesting ideas and descriptions in chapter 4. You just need to organize them better. Reading up on religion, mythology, and philosophy of various cultures is another thing you should do to get a better sense of how they can be used in your story. One suggestion would be to make an outline of your story using the five w's and one h. It'll give you more insight on crafting your story.

And that marks the end of your review. If you have any questions, feel free to leave a comment or PM me. Good luck with your story!