Written by @Rei_bassy - I read 13 chapters!

Ok so in all honesty I loved this.

I wasn't sure how I'd get on with the y/n style, but I feel like you carried the 2nd person off so well! I was plunged into the action and could feel what you described so acutely.

Indeed, this was largely down to your language style... You clearly have a well stocked vocabulary and choose your words carefully - it really pays off!

You mentioned in the form that you wanted feedback on character. As I said, I was completely with the main character, but I did struggle a bit to connect with the other characters as a result. Maybe can you describe them more? You have very natural dialogue, which is effective, but don't stop there! Give us more!

Thanks for letting me read this - it was fab!