Bibliophile005-The Blonde Mystery 

Title (5) 2

Vague. The only thing revealed is that there is a mystery surrounding a blonde.

Blurb (10) 9

Clear and to the point. Corresponds perfectly with the plot. I couldn't spot a single typo, and it was very well paced.

Cover (5) 3

After reading the blurb, the cover starts to make sense. I'm left with the assumption that the faces of the girls are not shown, so as to emphasize the 'mystery ' quality. I also noticed that the girl's heights fit the character description perfectly. The title doesn't stand out at first glance. I suggest a clearer font.

Plot (20) 18

The plot flowed perfectly, without seeming rushed or tardy. There was a good balance between narration and dialogue.There was a good dose of cliche incorporated with an original twist. To emphasize, although the school hierarchy is something quite common in teen fictions, the fact that our MC belongs to the popular cliche, despite not being pretty or rich was very refreshing. It also piqued my interest, making me wonder why she belongs to that particular group.

Characterization (20) 19

I really admire how the characters were portrayed. The main character stood out in particular. She seemed to have strengths as well as weaknesses. I did wonder why she didn't stand up to Nichole or Minnie. Maybe it was to maintain her 'popularity' status.

Summer on the hand, turned out to be a pleasant character. I'm left wondering what mystery is associated with her. The characters were three dimensional and I was able to picture them very well.

Creativity / Originality (10) 9

A teenager suddenly turning into a spy is not the most original story line, but your creativity stands out in terms of defying the cliches. I admire how you've deviated from the stereotype and made the MC someone who lies to the teachers for not doing homework (I was not expecting that). Hopefully, you get what I mean.

Spelling and grammar (15) 12

Other than occasional typos, there were no spelling errors. I noticed a few changes of tense in some chapters. Most of the sentences were too long and many lacked commas. I suggest breaking the longer sentences.

Enjoyability (5) 4

I'm on tenterhooks, wanting to know what this mysterious 'mystery' is all about. Also will Eleanor end up with Dean? Hope not! I had a hard time, restraining myself from reading the next chapter.

Literary devices (5) 2

Literary devices did not stand out to me. I suggest filling up on them to enrich your writing.

Description (5) 4

Character descriptions were on point. The first person POV was not distracting the readers from the story setting. Great job!

Total (100) 82