BEST ANTAGONIST

Thoronris- Tom Riddle in Remorse I

( Side Note: It has been years since I read Harry Potter. I don't remember Tom Riddle at all, hence I will be judging this character as an original character borne out of your writing style and the way you have represented him in this story. )

( mature topics have been addressed in this review)

So, right off the bat, he is slightly misogynistic--thinking that anyone, especially a woman couldn't possibly equal him in power. I also like how he tries to manipulate the reader into thinking Hermione is the villain by portraying her in a bad light in his thoughts, when it may not be the case. It plays on the readers' emotions they become conflicted on whose side to choose--who really is the troublemaker amongst the pair? Whose POV should we believe? Well done!

It is then continued to show how people ridiculed him, but he believed him to be wrong in doing so, because he deserved to be worshipped. Very narcissistic and egotistical indeed, believing he ranked higher than other people and people had to treat him like a god. That comment 'work with fear' also hints that he likes to use people emotions against them and that is manipulative and sly. Hermione's perspective of him also shows us how she and possibly others perceive him and we are now on the other character's POV, viewing the villain with a different pair of eyes--and he is not looking good.

And then he uses his physical strength to manipulate her-- and that's the last straw for him--in a good way. You are really making the reader feel and your descriptions are magnificent. We see both him the aggravator and Hermione the victim and their sharp contrast and readers quickly see who is the bad one. Tom plays on the hate card in every reader's heart in a good way. And the fact he gets sexually aroused as a result of her pain and fear? Ugh, what a monster. He makes people bend to his will be exploiting their weakness. All of these characteristics make him a very 3D character. We also see his flaws--like how he lets people get under his skin, his pride, vanity and ego and how sex/masturbation toys with his thoughts--in a way it can be perceived as his weakness too.

The entire masturbation scene was sickening in a good way and we got to see the cruel, twisted, sadistic side of him. It disgusted me--but that's good. You want the reader to hate him. But it was the end I think really showed his true nature--how he pretends to be good, care for her almost, but the entire undertone of that conversation being VERY creepy and horrific. That placation and that careful conversation dancing and knowing he has the upper hand. Awesome. I love reading about him--not decided if that is good or bad XD, but he was very well crafted. 5/5

BEST FEMALE PROTAGONIST

greydaygirl- Ao in The Wandering God

So, from your small paragraph, you had promised me an anti-hero, so let's see what's up.

The opening paragraph of chapter 11--wow it gives me a such a strong character narrative voice. I am impressed. Already I can make several assumptions about this character and know some character traits. Awesome! She's funny in an unusual way--kind of snarky and sarcastic but sassyish--reminds me of Fallon from Dynasty.

Overall, you show us many different sides to Ao in this chapter which I really like. While I didn't get 'anti-hero' vibes, I certainly got a strong vibe from her in general. You show us her caring,

loving side at first with Lu, and the way she feels nostalgic about their memories together. In their initial meeting I like how, true to her personality, she thinks the duel is something violent in nature, which she seems to enjoy quite a bit. I like how she appreciates her friends too, and her connection with her friends is portrayed very well. You show how they relate to each other and how much Ao values that. You show us she is nostalgic about the time she met him and how great a loss it was, which makes us feel sympathetic towards her.

I also senses she was rational. She liked to have fun, but yet still remained practical and kept her wits about her. She is quite observant, which makes her a good warrior because a true warrior knows what is happening around her all the time. She also seems a tad careless, which is a good flaw you have highlighted. She died and came back alive and sis didn't have an explanation or story for why that happened. In all her centuries of existence why didn't she think f on? Didn't she think that this could one day be dangerous and that someone could out her?

All throughout the chapter, she is very snarky and sarcastic, cocky and sassy. Not entirely tactful of her words but very amusing and funny. She knows when to say things out loud and not, and hence she can't be perceived as rude, really. She seems like a character to take no bs from anyone.

Again, with the nostalgia about her husband. That makes us feel for h husband. Even in that situation she is bit bitter, like her usual self and makes a snarkish comment about where he died--which is very apt for her. It befits her personality and I admire how you have kept her the same and not constantly wavering. I also get the sense she is a very curious person who likes to get to the bottom of everything, as demonstrated by her bookstore scene.

She is also a bomb badass, No makeup ( nothing wrong with makeup, but is makes sense with who she is as a character. But she is so independent and knows how to fend for herself on the street. Like she can barter and survive with what she has. I also like she has other interests that just the 'plot' if it makes sense-like the lute or drinking.

I also feel like she has a the flaw of believing the worst in people, but can't be hundred percent sure because I haven't read prior to chapter 11.

I like that she is a woman who knows what she wants. She knows her limits, her needs her craving her tastes. And she takes it. She is very straight up with her desire, which many women aren't. She is refreshingly not coy and fiesty.

And she can totally fight and won't take any man touching her inappropriately. That scene where she kicks all their asses is so bomb. You don't mess with Ao, and she makes sure they know it. Give me a girl who is strong and fierce and don't need a man to defend her from other man.

Overall, she is a very 3D character with many sides of her showcased. I can't classify her as anti-hero with what I have read but she is a complex, well-woven character. I would like more emotional descriptions and physical ones here and there, but overall, very well done. She is a character I can get behind who is admirable and strong, but with her share of flaws too ( i would like to see more in this particular chapter though. There wasn't too much I could spot) 4.5/5

BEST MALE PROTAGONIST

- Jack in Peach

In this chapter, especially in the beginning, Jack seems quite reserved. I get a feel of the other characters more than him. And then when the news is broken about Emma being attacked, I feel like his reaction is too mild. He just yells "What?" at first. I think more body language is required to show us this character cares a damn lot about Emma. Maybe he suddenly rises up, pushing his chair back and hits the table. Or maybe he runs his fingers through his hair. Give us that immediate reaction to make us readers fell with him and connect with his emotions. I see he later grips the chair very hard, but I think a stronger reaction will make seem less passive. I also think going into his internal thoughts would help make him more 3D, as well as physical descriptors. Does his heart skip a beat when he hears the news? I see it does later, but make us feel like we are hearing the news ourselves by using enough description to put us in Jack's shoes.

But after that, it is very cute. I like how his concern gradually turns to humor and appreciation for her smile. I think having something tighten in his chest when he hears her laugh can have us go more aww for Jack, more than we already are. But after that, I was very hooked and I think the entire romantic moment was very well written. I would like to see more of Jack's internal thoughts during it, not only after. But by the end of this chapter, I can feel him coming to life. I can see his determination to make things better, his soft and compassionate side, his slightly enraged side. I can certainly get some traits to implement in my own life, once I have finished reading about him, such as his determination.

He definitely came to life for me and all his emotions were appropriate to the situation, but adding a tad more can definitely help as he seems to withdrawn and slightly passive in the beginning. But overall, from one chapter, I get the sense of a very rounded character. Awesome job! 4.5/5

MOST ORIGINAL

lekro01 -Tears of A Lost Soul

The fantasy world you've created is like no other, very original and creative. The plot line itself and the characters also feel original. I have not come across anything cliché in this story do far. 10/10