Turn- mahana258 

Title: 5/5

-It's original. One-word titles have mystery and intrigue (I use that pattern for one of my own series).
-It's interesting, for sure. Liked the "book one" part, meaning it's a series (I LOVE series).
-It did catch my eye. Again, the one-word thing, and just wondering what the heck TURN stands for. Someone will turn into something?! Someone will turn around and see something? WHAT DOES IT MEAN? Intriguing.
-It does pertain to genre. Turn is super "open" and could mean anything.
-It doesn't seem to correspond to story yet. BUT it oddly points to it, in some way?

Description/blurb 9/10

-It's just vague enough. Gives some information, leaves the rest to mystery.
-It did make me want to open the book. It got my attention for sure, because I love hardcore world-building creations like this.
-It seems to correspond to story. But it still brings on questions. I like how it quickly introduces the MC too.

Cover: 5/5
-It's very appealing. It actually looked professionally made.
-I definitely wanted to pick up the book based on it! The electric vibe, though a bit on the fantasy side, was awesome.
-It appears to correspond to story. One of the individuals on it seems to be the MC.

Plot: 19/20
-It really has a perfect pace. It moves along at a good rhythm while providing backstory and no info-dumping.
-A good balance of dialogue and narration. Both are well-done with little telling, lots of awesome showing.
-Every chapter gives information to further the plot. We get tiny details each time that build our curiosity.

Characterization: 17/20

-The characters are definitely 3D. A mix of physical descriptions and little details to help us picture them, you slid that in nicely.
-They feel realistic for sure. The MC did have a bit of a cliché vibe and I didn't love the "I'm perfect all must fear me" attitude, but... I'm still intrigued by her.
-They portray emotions well. There's really a good balance of show and tell.
-They definitely stick out. We get the vibe the MC will fall hard on her face when investigating and will change her attitude--her behavior is memorable for sure.
-I could definitely feel it all in my head. Even secondary characters came to life in your words.

Creativity/originality: 9/10

-The plot is definitely original. I'm not an anime fan, but one show my boyfriend made me watch was Gurren Lagan--your world totally gave me those vibes (if you've never watched it, is has an under-ground style world because of apocalyptic conditions above the surface).
-The characters appear unique. Like I said before, the MC had some cliché vibes BUT I have a feeling we'll see deeper into her mind later and things will change.
BONUS: I loved the names and the thought behind your world.

Spelling/grammar: 13/15
-You had mostly proper grammar. Just be careful with your dashes: you used 3 (---) when it should have been 2 (--). Your punctuation was good.
-Very easy to read. Just watch out for repetitions of the same word/expression in close proximity.

Enjoyability: 4/5

-It was definitely enjoyable to read. Your style is great, your writing is awesome, and the chapter length was perfect.
-I did want to read more and definitely plan to. I will save it in my list!

Literary devices: 3/5
-Overall, decent and proper usage. A few odd combinations and some over-usage of eye-related expressions.
-This story had mostly rich text and sentences. Good vocabulary, but you could definitely expand and diversify.

Description: 4/5
-I'll say there was nothing extraordinary about them BUT they were well-written. They definitely brought characters and setting to life.
-I could visualize everything quite well. Maybe a bit more at the HQ would have enhanced experience a little.

OVERALL: Well, you surprised me with this! I thoroughly enjoyed this read and I look forward to diving in deeper. Very creative and thought-out.

TOTAL 88/100