GMTSchuilling -The Watch Seeker

Title (5): 5

The title is intriguing and eye-catching and corresponds perfectly with the story, too.

Blurb (10): 9

A gripping hook, a bit of insight into the Main Character and in her struggles, the blurb has it all. I have to admit I didn't read the blurb properly before opening the book (what can I say? Your cover already had me hooked). However, when I came back to the blurb after reading the five chapters, I was a bit surprised. The blurb is all about her learning about the watch and looking for it, yet in the story she's already used it, hasn't she? Therefore I feel like the focus of the blurb is just a little bit off.

Cover (5): 4

The cover is smashing. The colours work well together and the watch is appealing and intriguing. It also fits perfectly with the story. One thing I can say is that I can't read the lines at the top, nor the line in white in between the title and author name. Don't can definitely be larger.

Plot (20): 18

I found this a bit difficult to judge, since this is the second installment of a series and I haven't read the first book. Therefore, I am judging the way I would any other book, which means my feedback can be a bit off. Apologies if it is.

The main thing I can say here is that the first chapters felt a bit too telling. There was too much narration of the past and not enough real-time action. Maybe you can find a way to weave this into the story a bit more. On the other hand, the plot is coming along just fine and every chapter definitely pushes the plot forward.

Characterization (20): 20

Your characterization is brilliant. This really seems to be your strong point. The dialogue, internal thought and description of feelings all work together brilliantly to make such strong characters. They have rounded personalities and obvious flaws, making them very believable. Both Matt and Anaya are conveyed really well. 

 
Creativity/originality (10): 10
There are quite a lot of stories on time travel and yet you managed to make yours stand out. I feel like I've never read anything like this before, even though time travel is a well-used subject. The characters, too, seemed to have unique characters.

Spelling/Grammar (15): 14

Some of your sentences get a bit too long. I'd suggest breaking them up, so that readers don't loose what you're trying to convey.

Enjoyability (5): 4

I genuinely enjoyed reading this story very much. The characters are hooking and intriguing. However, I do feel like there is so much focus on characterization, that not a lot actually happens in every chapter, making the pacing a little bit slow. The first chapters definitely made me want to read more, though!

Literary devices (5): 5

There were lots of metaphors etc. used along the way throughout this story. They helped make the writing even more interesting and captivating. Great work.

Descriptions (5): 4

Every now and then, we could use a little more description of surroundings, to really picture the setting. An example of this is the pub his uncle runs. I'm not quite sure what it looks like there, because there wasn't much description.

Total (100): 93