Carrie: Blood of Redemption - L1ve2R1se

Title (5): 5

Catchy title, which also shows exactly what the story is about.

Blurb (10): 8

The blurb is a little bit vague and short, you can definitely add a bit more to really hook potential readers in. However, it does contain all the important information and those questions at the end made me eager to find out more.

Cover (5): 4

The picture catches the eye and I like the font for Carrie. The only thing is that I can barely read the author name; I'd suggest making that bit a little clearer.

Plot (20): 15

The balance between narration and dialogue is great and the plot moves at quite a steady pace. What I really don't understand is how it's possible that Carrie kept her own name. How is it that nobody recognises her as the girl that murdered all those people four years ago? I'm not sure if I missed something or if this is a plot hole, but I'd suggest clearing this up.

Characterization (20): 13

Could use more description of characters' feelings. What seemed strange to me what that in chapter two we skipped four years, yet that conversation could've been the same night. Not only did Carrie still talk and feel the same as she did in the hospital, she also suddenly told Desjardin something (very easily, I might add) that she could've told her years ago.

Creativity/Originality (10): 6

I like the idea of her coming back to life and, sort of, having a second chance. It would've been even better if the author had come up with a specific reason for her to suddenly live again. The characters don't even seem curious about this.

Spelling/Grammar (15): 8

Seemingly random words and phrases in capitals or italics. Some switches from past to present tense and back. Paragraphing a bit off as well: when a different character starts speaking, a new paragraph should start.

Enjoyability (5): 3

Apart from the actual premise of Carrie coming back to life, there wasn't really much to hook me into the story. There are also no cliffhangers to keep me on edge and keep me wanting more. In short, it's quite an enjoyable story, just not very gripping.

Literary Devices (5): 4

Some literary devices used, though in combination with more description, I think more literary devices would be advantageous as well.

Description (5): 3

The story could definitely use more description of surroundings. I often wasn't sure exactly where they were. Painting the picture in our heads is really important.

Total (100): 69