Book: Komoreby by SuVida777

Reviewer: Nelly [Avenelle09]

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C O V E R:

Here, I have two contrasting opinions. On one hand, the cover is lovely. It is simple but telling.Instantly, the reader gets a general idea of what, or at least who the story might be about. Even before the first page you can already familiarize yourself with the main character. It is also wonderful that the graphics in the book are your own drawings. The life-like illustration also expresses its anime-esque character well and gives the cover its own, unique ambience.Furthermore, it encompasses significant, symbolic details and is really neat. In that case, job well done! 

As for my second opinion, I would still expect more. Like I mentioned, the cover is quite minimalistic and elegant but still simple. On the other hand, your book isn't. The intricate plot, the unexpected travel to an alternate universe, the mystery behind it, the high tech, the language and vocabulary you use – none of this is plain or basic and I think your cover should express it more. Naturally, it is still excellent but in comparison with what the book is actually all about, I feel like more could be done to stress its uniqueness. 

Advice: If you're not comfortable changing the entire cover perhaps try to highlight the parts of the book that really make your story stand out. 

T I T L E: 

At first glance, I didn't really understand it but after reading your explanation and a part of the story, I have to say I really appreciate its simplicity. I can't say it's the perfect match but on the other hand I don't have a better idea in my head. Again, it's straightforward and sums up the entire story quite well. I adore its duality and that it is still applicable as the story progresses. I think you did a great job here! 

B L U R B: 

In general, it's satisfactory. It thoroughly explains the story as well as the unexpected plot twists. It's very fitting but I feel as if I'm still missing something. I usually read the blurb after I read the story I review to prevent myself from automatically filling in the blanks. Frankly speaking, I was quite surprised when I went back to yours. It didn't captivate me the way your book did but luckily (or not)I found the source(s). 

First one corresponds to the second paragraph. Compared with the story's, the writing here was fairly average but it still fit. Although, it was such a difference that I did make a double check at the title, just to make sure I was still reading the right story. However, most of all, this paragraph sounded a bit plain. A typical, cliche Wattpad story and you and I both know that this could not be further from truth. Therefore, it makes me wonder at what point in time did you write the blurb and isn't it the high time you updated it. Luckily, what changed my mind was the last paragraph which is wonderful again and if I were a random reader that would be the only thing prompting me to start reading your book. 

Now, another problem I have with your blurb is easy. It is too correct. You basically did too good a job (if that can ever be a problem xD). It's descriptive, as blurbs should be, but in this case it's too descriptive. Everything is just laid out for the reader to see. Most of the time, it lacks the air of mystery resembling an average wattpad story and again, your story is anything but. Thankfully, you make up for that in the final paragraph. However, by that time I get to it, I feel like I can already tell everything that's going to happen in the book and reading a chunk of your story reassures me of that. 

Last but not least, that part of the sentence "A mean prank, betrayal, becoming an outcast--she thinks it can't get any worse..." feels a little out of wack. I don't know how to explain it but it feels slightly colloquial and doesn't really fit with the writing style visible in the rest of the story or the blurb for that matter. Be sure to take a look at that. 

Advice: Your writing style as well as the advanced language you use is one of your best assets. You clearly know how to describe a scene/situation in order to catch a reader's attention. Use it here!You have all it takes to make it perfect. Second thing, try limiting the details you give out in the blurb and perhaps substitute them with more unanswered questions and secrecy. You certainly aced the skill of building up tension throughout the book so, again, use it here. Also, try rephrasing the part oft he sentence mentioned above. It doesn't have to be changed completely, simply upgrade its language level. 

C O N T E NT (aka grammar, spelling, writing style):

I decided to group these components together in one paragraph so as to avoid repeating myself. This is most definitely the 'rave' part of this review. Each constituent is simply impeccable so all I can say is job extremely well done. I tried, really hard mind you, to find something that would require correction, but surprise, surprise, nothing popped up. The dialogue is well written, paragraphs are just the right length and even the scene descriptions are enthralling. Also, I don't even have to mention how advanced and immaculate your language is. Outstanding job!

O V E R A L L   O P I N I O N:

Simply speaking, the book is amazing. Even though I haven't had the time to read the entire story, I have been enthralled by the part I got to take a look at. Every aspect of this book is simply impeccable. The plot, the grammar, the writing style, the graphics, absolutely everything. 

Another element that really surprised me was the presence of a note to potential judges reviewing this particular book. It shows that you are not only a remarkably skilled writer but you are also an incredibly thoughtful and respectful person. Hence, as a reviewer I would like to express my gratitude for taking the time to add this, not so short, 'note' and send congratulations on a job well done. I have read quite a few books that were either published or featured and yours has certainly stood out the most. Not only because of its addictive storyline but also because it has been perfected to the last degree and I can't stress it enough. 

To sum up: It has been a great pleasure reading Your book and writing this review. Not only is your book a true gem here on Wattpad, I think you, as a writer, have an amazing potential as well. I wish you all the best on your journey, keep going! 

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