Author~> SAMminur

Book~> Pieces of the puzzle

Status~> Completed

~Cover 9/10

The cover is beautiful, leaving the hints of plot by the pictures of the seven leads. The fonts are good and amazing, and the contrast of various colors in it makes it more intriguing. To improve, the author can add filters, little warm ones, to make it match withe the light storyline. They can also add more elements at sides, stickers or maybe some designs, to make it stand out.

Lastly, the author should also write the name of the author in a larger font to make it visible as it is not clear due to Wattpad ruining the qualities of covers.

~Title 5/10

I apologize if my feedback seems harsh, but I didn't notice a clear connection between the title and the plot; a title should ideally foreshadow the story, but I didn't find any resemblance in this case. I suggest reconsidering the title and choosing one that accurately reflects the story or plot. A harmonious title and story can make a significant difference in capturing readers' attention.

Here are a few suggestions for the title of the story:

'Stuck Between The Seven'

'Love Unscripted'

'Eight Hearts, One Home'

'Confessions In The Silence'

~Description 7/10

The description isn't as descriptive and professional written as the chapters. Although it briefly describes the plot, I'd appreciate it if the author considered rewriting it with the same passion they've shown in the rest of the story. I've also observed some grammatical errors in the blurb. I will discuss these in the other category.

~First Impression 8/10

Initially, I felt neutral about the story after reading the description. It didn't spark my interest. I recommend rewriting the blurb as I've mentioned before too. The story started well, but as the chapters progressed, I suspected that it might lead to a polyamorous relationship. Sarang reacted similarly with each one of them, making it unclear how she would choose between them.

I suggest the author to clear this inconsistency as she felt her heart beat and feel flushed with each one of them.

Despite these issues, I remained engaged and curious about the story's progression. The chapters were well-written with vivid descriptions and harmony. The author did a great job showcasing moments with each of the characters.

~Plot 15/15

The plot was at its best point, providing the readers with different moments of Sarang with the boys. All of them had a unique chapter with her. Their uniqueness shone through the chapters.

Here are a few lines which I've liked in the story:

'The morning sun filtered through the window, casting a warm glow over the kitchen.'

'The rain poured down in thick, steady sheets, its rhythm a constant drumbeat against the roof of the house.'

'The day had been sunny and warm just hours before, but now the world outside was a blur of gray.'

~Grammar and Punctuation 11/15

The grammar and punctuation was good but I noticed some errors. I recommend that the author consider these suggestions.

In the description - one of the elements which determines for the reader whether to the read the book or not - had a few minor errors.

What originally the author has written:

A girl just needs a place to live, and the room in a houseful of handsome seven boys is the right price. But as soon as she moves in, her habits and theirs just don't mesh. There's plenty of romantic tension, but things don't go smoothly when they all falls for her and she has to choose one of them as her boyfriend.

Let's see who she will choose as her boyfriend.

After correction:

A girl just needs a place to live, and the room in a houseful of seven handsome boys is the right price. But as soon as she moves in, her habits and theirs just don't mesh. There's plenty of romantic tension, but things don't go smoothly when they all fall for her and she has to choose one of them as her boyfriend. Let's see who she'll choose as her boyfriend.

Additionally, in the first few chapters, I've noticed that the author made a common mistake by putting more than three dots to represent an ellipse. (...)

Moreover, I've observed this minor error in the last chapter. The capitalisation of "O" in our was clearly accidental, I believe.

The text which was originally written by the author:

The moment I opened the door, Our eyes met, and the air shifted between us.

It should be:

The moment I opened the door, our eyes met, and the air shifted between us.

Furthermore, I've spotted the incorrect use of dashes in the whole story. In standard punctuation, dashes are typically used to indicate a break in thought or to set off a parenthetical phrase, and they should be surrounded by spaces.

Correct examples:

I went to the store—which was closed—for milk.

The blurb – one of the most important elements – had a few errors.

Incorrect example:

I went to the store-which was closed-for milk.

I hope this feedback will help the author improve.

~Characters 9/10

The characters were well developed and sketched. They have advanced nicely. In my opinion, the author should rewrite the perspectives of the seven characters and alter their feelings and differentiate them. Their feelings, emotions, and thoughts felt identical and could be differentiated further. I would appreciate if the author alters these and add their own unique feelings.

This would give each one of them a special touch and add character depth in them, which would enhance the look of the story and plot.

~Pacing 10/10

As for a short story, the pace was well-balanced. The story had a brisk pace, moving quickly without feeling rushed. I had a nice experience while reading the story.

~Overview 9/10

The book has potential and just needs a little bit of refinement to touch the heights of professionalism and perfection. I had a wonderful time reading the book which erupted warmth in me. Everything was almost perfect.

Total 83/100

Keep up the great work, and I'm looking forward to seeing your future writing!