The Faerie Forest by: CayliRhea
Requested by: CayliRhea

I actually enjoyed reading your book. Plus I loved the cover of it as well. It definitely screams faeries and fantasy so much. It's also very beautiful looking too.

I enjoyed the plot of it and there wasn't any grammar errors that I could see.

But I do want to point out that the pacing of the story seems to be a bit rushed in my opinion. The suggestions I have are as followed:

Having a flashback or two to when Arthur came out as being gay to his mom to add a bit more to what his relationship was like with her before their relationship was strained or maybe show a flashback to when he coming out to her and what her reaction was before hand that way, we feel a bit sad for him when he does have that one moment with his mother about getting a girlfriend and knowing full well that he is gay.

Also, maybe we also expanded on his human life at school a bit more as well rather than a just a day maybe we could get the full extent of him being bullied that way when he does end up going to the world of the faeries, we know why he chose that world over his own.

As much as I liked the faerie world and it's magic system, again it felt rushed and not very flushed out to me. I liked the way you described the world but as for the magic system, it just never got explained well and it was just turned me off a bit from the story. Like maybe I had more interactions between Arthur and the faerie and creatures living there in the beginning of the story and how the basics worked like maybe in a flashback or when he danced with the faerie, there might have been more or an explanation for how the magic system worked or at least for the beginning part of the story.

Plus it would have set up nicely for the plot going ahead as well because then it would have flowed nicely together and flushed out without feeling rushed whatsoever.

Overall, it's a good story but just needs a little work. But would recommend this book to anyone who loves reading books like it.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly