Life of Ryfon the wanderer by: RiverNote
Requested by: RiverNote

Well, where should I begin with this review. There is quite a bit that I want to say so let's start with the cover.  I would suggest if you're going to continue posting here on Wattpad, that you make a cover for your story since many people tend to be drawn to a story with a interesting or beautiful cover. You can use photoshop or use an app or have someone who's good at making book covers to make it for you.

Now I want to mention the descriptions of the story or what little of it is there within the story itself to describe what's happening other than dialogue. I would recommend taking the time to really describe things so readers can get more of an idea on what's going on rather than a few sentences.

Also, since I know that you have used word docs to put your book onto Wattpad but you can make each chapter into different parts so the one part that you do have isn't so long and that we're not getting a lot of information all at once in one go and it's easier to process.

Plus there's no grammar errors in your story, good job on that.

I also do want to mention that I did enjoy the whole DND inspired world that you had going on since I don't really any story with that sort of idea in mind.

Overall, it has potential but it definitely needs some work to get there.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly