Looking in by: Buttertech
Requested by: Buttertech

First off, what is your book about? I went to read the summary but there wasn't really a summary that told what your story was about. I would recommend putting a summary, so people can get an idea on what it is about, since some people read the summary and then the story to see if it interests them enough to read it.

Also what is the plot of your book since there wasn't a clear plot on what's happening, so, I was confused when reading it. Plus, you didn't describe really anything at all or set up the story or characters very well to make it seem interesting enough to be called a story. The chapters were also a bit too short as well since each chapter was only like one or two pages long to begin with, which didn't help much.

Overall, I would recommend that you go back and write down or think about what this story could actually be about and what the plot is, so it grabs in more people to read it and to make the chapters a bit longer.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly