Crescent City by: Lunathecutegamer
Requested by: Lunathecutegamer

First I want to talk about the cover of the book. I like the cover. I liked how it tells you that it's a mystery book and what it is about. I also like the dark colors of the cover as well.

The summary is also pretty good. It tells you what the book is about without giving too much away.

But oh boy, I definitely have plenty of things to say about the book and the plot itself but first let's start with the writing structure and grammatical errors. There were a few grammatical errors in the book but they were hardly noticeable and I did notice you misspelled prologue when I first went to go read the story. But other than that, it was fine. Now the writing structure could use some work. Like separate the dialogue from the descriptions. Don't do a wall of text! It makes it too difficult to read and it's hard to know where the dialogue starts and where it ends and where the descriptions start and end. This will cause many people to be confused on what's happening in the story and who is actually speaking and who isn't. But again don't do walls of text. Learn to separate your dialogue from your other text and you're much better off for it.

Now for the plot and pacing of the story. First let's start with plot. I liked the plot and the concept of having this mastermind behind the murders and how the police are trying to solve the case on what is actually happening. I am also curious to see how the advanced technology comes into play later in the story. Now it's time to talk about the pacing of the book. The pacing I thought was okay at times but there were times were I felt like the pacing in certain scenes were a bit rushed while others were fine. Other than that, it was okay. 

Now finally it's time for the setting and characters of the book. First let's talk about the setting. The setting I felt like could have been described more often in the book. Like when you were describing scenes, it felt rushed and not as flushed out as I would have liked. The scenes could have been longer and described so readers would have more of a better picture in their heads on where the story was taking place. It definitely felt more like tell and not show rather than show and not tell at times but other than that, it needs some work.

Next are the characters. The characters for sure, I felt like could been given more personality to them in the chapters that I've read so far. I felt like they didn't have a lot of personality and I felt disconnected from them as I was reading the book. There was nothing interesting about them that I felt like could connect or even care about with them. Like if we saw them outside of work and got a glimpse into what their life's were like when they're not working, would have made it more interesting. Now I want to talk about the main character. The main character in my personal opinion was a bit boring probably due to a lack of a personality if any at all. Plus him not knowing what a crush was seems a bit much for a grown man since at this point in his life, he should know what a crush is or at least have some idea of what it is. I definitely felt like the whole sex scene in the hospital room wasn't necessary either when he was visited by his coworker who had just started the same day he got hurt. It felt rushed and I get that one night stands can happen but this certain scene definitely came out of no where and there was definitely no chemistry between the two to even make this scene rememberable. Plus his coworker didn't have much personality to her either. It does seem like you tried making him have a love interest but I wish their story was more flushed out and that they have more chemistry to better them work out, rather it seemed forced.

Also quick side note, the characters weren't really described too well either and I wish we got descriptions on what they looked like which I also felt like should been added in the story as well.

Anyways back to the main character. The main character having cat ears all of a sudden was a surprise but I was also confused on why he had them. I am sure there's a backstory to it but I don't seem to recall there being any mention of supernatural characters in this book. So far, we never saw someone say with horns or wings and it felt out of place with him having those cat ears. It didn't really have a place being there and made no sense in the long run or was of any importance to the overall story thus far. Like I wish this was better explained in maybe in the prologue. Like rather than what you had originally which was okay, maybe have a scene that shows him in a lab but we don't know it's him until later in the story to make more believable or having a chapter or two where we get to see more people like him rather than making it seem sudden and out of nowhere.

Overall, it's an okay book. It definitely needs some work to make it better but other than that, it's okay.

Thanks for letting me review your book and can't wait to see you guys in the next one.

-Traveler_lilly