A Bit About the Author:

NDeMeer is a Wattpad ambassador living in the Netherlands. (For any who's interested, that's where I was born. XD) Anyway, when not busy with ambassador duties and helping out with  DreamlandCommunity and thereadingcafe_, she enjoys writing YA fantasy works, playing music, and studying psychology. 

Title: 

The title is very intriguing and poetic and excites me almost at once to pick up your book and check it out. 

Cover: 

I love the cover and it's simplistic yet beautiful style. My only critique is maybe to have more stuff done with the font (either in layering styles or in color) because it's rather bland to just have white text for both title, author's name, and subtitle. 

Blurb: 

The blurb is rough and could be better written. I'm getting too much information and not enough suspense is there for me to really want to read more. I'm interested based on the title, but that's pretty much it. I need more questions than answers for me to really want to read your novella. 

The Good: 

The grammar was pretty good overall, minus a few typos and stuff that can't be easily fixed. Your character set-up was very well done and I could easily keep everyone apart. I would, however, like to see more with looks, etc., which would also help to boost this aspect further in your story. The pacing was perfect, and so were the descriptions, in the beginning, but there were some issues further on. 

The Bad:

The main issue was plot. It was excellent until the last few chapters. Good thing is, it wasn't confusing at all. Bad thing was that it felt super rushed at the end. I think that you could easily have stretched things out more. The accident made sense later on, of course, but the reason why--I think it could do with more depth to make it really stand out to the reader. The motives for her dad to do that just don't really make sense to me if her dad really loves her. The plot revealing felt really rushed at the end and I would like to see it prolonged more so the reader doesn't finish the story thinking... "Is that it?" Please don't get me wrong; you have a good story, but I think it could do with a bit more work towards the end. ;) 

What the Reader Thought: 

I really enjoy reading your paranormal works--and I don't even much paranormal stuff. (Mainly because some of that stuff is just downright  w e i r d .  Anyway, I also enjoyed this one. Aside from some plot issues, etc., it was an enjoyable read and I hope you do more with this story. It has a lot of potential. ;) Plus, I applaud you for writing in another language that's not your mother-tongue. I can't even imagine undertaking something like that! It was a good story and I wish you all the best in the ONC! 

Score: 7/10