A Bit About the Author:

CaptainSarcastic101 is THEE master of wit, sarcasm, and the sword--in that order. When not ranting on Wattpad and its problems and how much she hates being mistaken for a dude, she can be found writing--you guessed it--fantasy. (Though not with romance--she hates that stuff.) Despite her rough appearance at first, she is absolutely hilarious and great to talk to and rant with. 

'Nuff said, I think. I've already had way too much fun with that description. 

*coughs*

Title: 

Being honest, I get How To Train Your Dragon vibes. Not your fault at all, but the first thing that came to mind was a Nightfury. Considering that your story does indeed have dragons on it, that's not necessarily a bad thing. It's a good title and easy to remember. 

Cover: 

Perfect in every way. I love it--especially the vibrant colors. Personally, I'd like to see more dragonness, but that's just a personal preference. 

Blurb: 

I normally don't like long blurbs--especially on Wattpad. Yours is the exception, though. While a bit lengthy, it provides just the right amount of information to get me interested in the story without feeling info-dumped or weighed down by vagueness. Great work! 

The Good: 

Normally I have a systematic way of going through this stuff, but that's just been tossed out the window--mostly due to the fact I read this over such a long period of time. So forget order and let's get down to business. 

Characters - I know Nirvana is supposed to be the main character, but Hawkins and his Wisp (which, by the way, I adore; let me know where I can get me one of those) seemed to fit the bill a lot better in my mind. Excellent work with Hawkins and Wisp and those involved in his story up to chapter nine. 

World-building - I have to congratulate you on the depth you've established. While there are issues, which I'll talk about below, there is a lot of stuff going on that really added a richness to your story that I found really enjoyable. The whole Traited system, while still a bit confusing to me and would be better if worked more into your story (show vs. tell; hold back on those info-dumps, etc.), was very unique and cool to read. 

The Bad: 

First issue. Grammar. After the first couple of chapters, this was a lot better--and I usually commented when I saw something. But this ticked me off a lot and I would have just shut the book except for the fact I promised to read it. Nothing that proof-reading wouldn't fix, but please do fix it and soon. ;) 

Pacing. This was the second biggest issue for me. I applaud you managing to pull off two different stories going on at the same time once the prologue was behind us, something I'm terrible at. However, the parts with Nirvana were always confusing to me after being in Hawkins' situation. The change was jolting and I often found myself skimming her sections just to get to the next Hawkins scene. This is probably just my personal preference, but I'm just stating that the change was jarring, even reading sections all at once. Try to smooth things out more in that area. Though the problem might have also been that the Nirvana sections were all about the Traited stuff and I was still trying to figure that all out and hence it was hard to follow and therefore boring. In which case, just ignore what I said. ^_^

What the Reader Thought: 

Something that really stood out to me was chapter lengths. I know, this is Wattpad. And as much as we enjoy ranting about Wattpad together, this is an issue that has made many books on here hard for me to enjoy. I'd encourage you to split up your chapters so instead of scrolling through eight or so pages to get to the bottom, it'd be less. It'd be so much easier for me and I think others might share the same sentiment. 

But anyway, while much of it was over my head (I guess I need to start reading more fantasy outside of Wattpad), I actually enjoyed reading your story. You have a lot of great stuff going on that one day is going to make an epic book. Unfortunately, due to stuff I mentioned above, your story was hard to follow in places and so I am not going to continue reading. I read up to how much you had when I originally added it to my reading list, and maybe one day I'll read more. But for now, this is where I'm stopping. Don't get me wrong, I did enjoy the book, especially the parts with Hawkins and Wisp that had me literally laughing out loud, but I didn't enjoy it enough to continue reading and I didn't want to force myself to keep on reading and end up disliking it for that reason. 

I sincerely wish you all the best with this story and your writing journey! 

Score: 6.5/10