A Bit About the Author:

Spruce_Goose is a Wattpad ambassador and a university student majoring in English. She has completed five novels on Wattpad, with two more on the way, and enjoys Harry Potter, Percy Jackson, and musicals. 

Title: 

Simple. Wouldn't necessarily call it eye-catching, though it does make sense by the end of the book. I personally don't care for it, but it serves its purpose. 

Cover:

Again, simple and fitting to the story, but not necessarily eye-catching. Even if the font was more than a standard type font, it would make the cover more appealing to the reader. 

Blurb:

Nice and short. My critiques are these: the first paragraph basically says the same thing in two different sentences, not to mention the phrase, "Despite the stories that and the noises that—" you could simplify by taking the that after stories out. I would suggest combining the two sentences and simplifying them. I like the last line, but the paragraph before that is rather bland and doesn't excite me about the story. I would encourage you to dramatize it more so it grips the reader into opening up your novella and reading instead of glossing over and going on to something else. 

The Good:

Minus the occasional typo, there were few grammar mistakes. Your characters are fairly well-rounded and they were easy to keep apart. I like the way you worked history in while contrasting our modern lifestyle in comparison with the 1800's. The dialogue was easy to follow and fit the story, though when in the 1800's, it should sound more refined and less like modern lingo. The pacing, even though it's a novella, was smooth and even, despite the fact it all seemed a bit rushed—hard to do with a word count and time limits like these!

The Bad:

I don't really have anything major to say about your story except the lack of descriptions of places. The characters were fine and the things they use and talk about were fine, but I was missing descriptions of the places they were in. I would like to see more of the settings described so I can better picture everything in my mind. It would add so much more depth to the story. 

What the Reader Thought:

I really liked this take on the prompts, and especially the whole time-travel idea. I also had to deal with time-travel in my story, though I used totally different prompts, and I really liked how you explained the time-travel theories. It was really interesting to read and I enjoyed this ONC entry. Kudos and I wish you all the best of luck in the contest! 

Score: 6.5/10