A bit about the author:

SongofLightandShadow is a very talented author and book-trailer-making-person who's an awesome girl to hang around. She enjoys writing stories with lots of tension, fast paced action, and angsty feels. 

Title:

I personally feel it unnecessary to have all those numbers with the title as it's rather long and confusing--sounding more like some sort of scientific journal entry. The Aleysha part is rather dull and doesn't excite me to pick up the story either. 

Cover:

The cover is good and fits in with the Marvel-y feel. However, it feels a bit bland. I need more color or something to make it pop out more than just black and white for the background and type. Also, the author's name is rather hard to read against the white. 

Blurb: 

Your blurb is good. Short and straight to the point. My only critique is that the comma after But isn't needed in the third paragraph. ;) 

The Good: 

You have a good set-up for your story and it's very well-written---especially for a fanfic. I don't generally enjoy reading fanfiction because it's usually written by young teenage girls who don't know grammar rules and are writing this highly-emotionally-strung cheesey story about their crushes. (Please no one take offense to this; I used to be this way as well--it's how I started writing.) Anyway, for a fanfiction, it was a fascinating read and I look forward to reading more! Your inclusion of this story within the Marvel Universe was also very well done and your establishing the characters most fans already know was executed in an enjoyable manner. 

The Bad: 

Minus a few typos here and there, the main issue I had was pacing. You have an excellent start, but then things get so slowed down that I nearly quit reading. And the reason for this is your inclusion of way too many details during an action sequence. Yes, details are good and help make the story interesting, but not when there should be tension building because it's an action scene. Loosen up on those details so that the tension is right and the reader isn't bogged down reading about all these tiny things that don't really matter when they just want to know what's happening and what will happen next. 

The only other issue was characters--to be specific, the Marvel characters. Granted, we should already know them from the movies, but I want to get to know them the way Aleysha knows them. You had so many details with pacing that it was an issue, but you didn't have enough with the characters. Try to balance them out more than just that Aleysha met them and this is her opinion of them. I want to get to know them through her, not just through a few paragraphs about them. 

What the Reader Thought: 

I enjoyed this story a lot more than I thought I was going to. (And congratulations again for being one of my winners ;)) Besides the two issues I mentioned earlier, you have a great story going on and I'm excited for the next update. I did guess the whole H.Y.D.R.A. thing with Aleysha though before it ever showed up in the story, but I did like how you kept the connection with your OC and the MU until later in the story instead of just revealing it right off. 

Overall, great work, and keep it up! 

Score: 7/10