name: Last Wish

author: MeghaS3

genre: fanfiction

-book cover/book cover quality- [4/5]

it's a bit plain and i certainly think you have the potential and skills to make it better, but other than that it's very fitting. sometimes, less is more. it has taehyung on the front, which does make sense as he is one of the main leads.

-the title and its ability to relate to the story -[5/5]

from the blurb (which will be spoken about in the next part) we can tell the reason you have named it 'Last Wish'. though seemingly quite a minimalistic choice, it's also very fitting. in short, it makes sense. it's not some fancy, Latin word you googled. it sticks to/with the plot, and that's basically all that matters.

-the blurb -[2/5]

the blurb is the attractive, descriptive part of the book that should bring in readers the most. it's one of the first things they should/do read. while yours is short and adds a little bit of suspense, it could be a lot longer. the blurb should tell enough without telling too much. yours tells too little. you can add a little more to the dialogue, so spice here and there. check out the review prior to this one where i corrected the blurb of someone else and feel free to use it for inspiration.

-the first few chapters -[2/5]

upon reading the first chapter, i already started to make a conclusion. i think you are someone with great ideas. you have a writing potential you haven't even begun to discover, as all writers do, simply because anybody is capable of writing a book. however, your style of writing matters greatly. heavily, even. I'll be blunt and honest here- your structuring isn't so good. i might even be able to say it's the main reason your marks in this section have been lowered.

however, i'd also like to say that I'm not a mean person. i love to see writers grow. let's have a look at chapter one from the beginning.

.if you are aiming for the look of a well-written book, never add pictures. yep. don't you dare do it. the whole reason for writing is so you can provide the picture in the minds of the readers through the description. if you cannot do that with your words, that's some homework to do.

.please, please and please. this is advice i gave to my last 'customer' but please make use of something like or Grammarly. it's free and it helps with writing especially if English is not your first language. there are way too many grammatical errors and blunders and it makes it hard to read. in fact, this is what makes people click off of your book.

for example:

shoes taping sound was echoing in basement room indicating that someone was coming.

Door got opened . Allowing that person to enter. He was walking slowly to the girl. His dark aura giving devil's wibe. A dark long coat was looking ethereal for his Beauty. His attractive facial feature was doing there work properly. Black shiny hairs adding fuel to his Beauty.

instead, it could be:

The sound of shoes tapping on the basement floor indicated that someone was coming. The door opened soon after, allowing that person to enter. He walked slowly to the girl, his dark aura giving off the vibe of a devil. A dark, long coat added to his ethereal beauty, alongside his attractive facial features and black, shiny hair.

(in languages such as french, hair is 'hairs' because it's more than one. in English, this does not apply.)

-spag (spelling, punctuation and grammar) -[2/5]

again, use the advice given in the last section. 

-uniqueness -[3/5]

the plot, in all honesty, is not that unique. I've gone through book after book that has an almost identical plot. however, i haven't seen a book that makes use of 'y/n' having a last wish that determines her life.

[overall: 18/30]

notes

i think with a little more practice, you're writing will get better. don't let anyone or anything pull you down or make you give up on it. try activities that test your ability and read books for inspiration on how to structure your chapters. don't copy anything though, because as i was reading through i noticed a few words i have seen repetitively in other books/cliches. just make our book your own.

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keep it up!  ;)