name: tale of the princess

author: ScribbleYourThoughts

genre: fantasy, adventure

- book cover/book cover quality - [5/5]

personally, I think that apart from good images and lovely text, a good book cover should be yours. while I understand it was made by someone else, I do believe it was still under your direction. the text is really pretty and still managed to relate to the title by forming a little crown at the bottom. overall, beautiful cover- it's very attractive.

- the title and its ability to relate to the story - [4/5]

the title is also pretty good. the only thing that knocked down this score is that it is quite a generic title. what I mean is, it's a little bit common. not that I myself could find a better title, haha. but yeah, it does relate with the storyline very well- even a fool could see that. so, while I'm not telling you to change the title, if you decide to do so, own it and make it something that flows with your style.

- the blurb - [4/5]

the blurb could be a little shorter and maybe give away a little less, but other than that it's perfectly fine.

- the first few (five) chapters - [4/5]

we are brought straight into action via the first chapter. what i like about it, is it provides enough information relative to the plot at that time. what do i mean by this? multiple people make the general mistake of introducing things that either don't even matter at that time or plot points that probably shouldn't have been revealed at the first chapter, so well done for that.

you made a great use of descriptive vocabulary that maintained my interest throughout and added that sprinkle to your work without being over the top. it's important for people to understand that you don't need to try too hard to make your writing 'super interesting' or intellectual especially if it isn't supposed to. or else, it will sound exactly that- like you tried too hard. however, certain words could be used differently. for example:

everyone's hands were brimming with paint cans

could be changed to

everyone's hands were alive with or crammed with paint cans.

whichever suits your tastes, since this is just an opinion. the reason for my advice for this is just because the word 'brimming' from 'to the brim of' is usually used for liquids. eg, my cup of water was to the brim.

anyway, apart from minor things like this, each chapter is structured well, maintaining an average reading time of eight minutes per chapter. 

- spag (spelling, punctuation and grammar) - [4/5]

your spag skills are great. i like that you typed the non-english words in italics which is actually a grammatically correct thing to do, and explained them at the end of the chapter, just like how a published book would do. the only thing to correct here would be to attempt to decrease the length of some sentences, as it can become a bit tiring to keep track of for certain readers, especially considering ones who struggle with concentration for long periods of time. e.g, people with adhd.

- uniqueness - [4/5]

your plot is based off of the familiar plot of a potentially rebellious figure having to choose between duties and what they want to do. this is something seen before, but again, you've found a way to make it your own. i like to think of it this way- those who have gone by a similar idea got it from someone else. so long as you haven't copied the work of someone else and changed the names around, it's yours and it's great.

- overall: [29/30]

i think you are a great writer and that your book has amazing potential. the only thing i could say to further advise you, is what i have said throughout. make sure to own it. don't go by the words of others alone. do what suits you, while also not writing for yourself alone. if you feel it's what your desired audience will enjoy, then go for it!

keep it up! ;)