PAINTING DESCRIPTIONS
An important and essential technique that is good to have are the descriptions of your characters. Let's get started with a quick example.
There was a man.
Alright. Be honest. The sentence looks a little bit plain, doesn't it? Now, let's add in a bit more detail. What is he wearing? What are the descriptions and detail of his clothing?
There was a man. He wore a large, brown cloak that was wrapped tightly around his body, and a brimmed hat shielding his face. His black shoes were polished, and as he grabbed onto my wrist, I could feel the course texture of his gloves.
It starts to sound better already! Now, fill in more details! What is his posture? Is he visible to the character? What is his expression?
There was a man who stood in the shadows. His eyes darted around from side to side, as if he was expecting something, or, someone, to emerge. His large, brown cloak swayed gently in the small breeze, as it wrapped around his body. I tried to get a look at his face but his brimmed hat shadowed it. His black shoes shone in the sun, indicating that they had been polished recently. Suddenly, the man rushed up to me and grabbed my wrist. I could feel the course texture of his gloves, as he tugged me towards him.
Paint a picture in their (readers) heads. What do you want them to see? What do you want them to experience. Here's a tip, ask yourself what you want them to go through. They are going through an emotional journey with your characters. As the author, what do you want them to experience? After taking that into consideration, write it all out! You got this! Don't forget to add as much detail as you can, but only if it is deemed appropriate. Sometimes, bear in mind that too much detail can really turn your story 'murky'.
A tall man was standing a few feet away from me, hiding and prowling in the shadows. His blue eyes were cloudy and tired, but they darted from side to side on full alert, as if he was expecting someone to arrive. As a gentle breeze swayed past, he stood as calm as ever, his long brown coat swaying with the breeze, wrapping around his body. His wide brimmed hat shadowing his face, his black shoes were shining in the sun that filtered through the trees, as the bronze leaves fluttered to the ground. Despite the serenity of Autumn, the man began to walk up to me, rather quickly and grabbed onto my wrist, his blue eyes locked onto mine.
"Come with me."
His voice was hoarse as he said those words. Nodding reluctantly, I knew I had no choice but to follow him.
That's it for this chapter! If you have any queries at all about this topic, please do not hesitate to ask us!
A few more tips:
-Use repetition.
By repetition, we mean to use words repetitively. For example, I reached out, as his figure disappeared into the distance. "No!" I cried out. "No! Don't leave!" I sank to the ground. "There's still so much that I don't know about you." Tears began flowing out. I cried, and I cried and cried myself empty. "Why," I asked myself. "Why, why did you have to go?"
-Use 'one lined paragraphs' to make your story more powerful but be careful of overusing it.
I swung the metal pipe across, hearing the whoosh of it as I missed my mark. She was still standing. She was still standing, with that evil grin. That evil grin plastered on her face. That evil grin which I wanted to wipe away so much. Placing all of my conviction in my last strike, I swung.
And I hit. I hit her straight on the head.
The metal pipe came crashing into her face, blood seeping through as her knees buckled and she collapsed onto the ground, still and lifeless.
-Step into the shoes of your character. What are they feeling? Write it all down!
-Know your character's 'voice' well. If your character is a young teenager, you wouldn't want them talking like a senior woman. It just wouldn't make sense at all!
-Practice! Honestly, practice does make perfect, so keep writing and writing until you succeed and reach the top!
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