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𝟙𝟘. The Game of Revenge by MochaChocolateRose 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 11/20

There were some interesting parts, but I felt nothing happened that would make me read further.

Concept 5/10

The story is compiled from a bunch of different scenes which don't connect that well. The lack of natural flow in the story makes it hard to follow and understand the concept as well.

Cover 8/10

The cover is good, and it fits the genre. But I'm not sure how it connects to the story.

The book description 6/10

The description is not pulling enough and tells nothing about the story to peak interest.

Technicalities 30/50

The descriptions were good enough. Grammar, punctuation is also not bad. But the way the story is written feels very confusing, there are so many characters introduced all at once that it is hard to keep track of, and scenes with characters are sometimes so short and have no essential meaning as well. I honestly don't know who the main character is since the story is told from different points of view and the point of view shifts so fast it feels like it's barely there.

Total 60 /100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 10/20

It has a good hook, but it's not intriguing. It's hard to follow and read.

Concept 4/10

The concept is confusing to follow. There's a lot of people with different points of view, some things don't make sense when reading.

Cover 8/10

The cover is very eye-catching. It makes me feel very interested in reading. The cover does fit well with the theme.

The book description 7/10

The description is short but good. It makes me want to keep reading. I wish it gave me more about the protagonist and the book itself.

Technicalities 30/50

There's a lot of dialogue. But I feel like it's too much. There isn't enough description to paint a picture in my head. The writing style can be confusing for me. It's hard to know who is speaking with so much dialogue. Lots of things are thrown into the book at once that it's hard to know what's happening.

Total 59/100

Total from both judges 119/200

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𝟡. THE NYMPH  by loonyywriter 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 12/20

The first chapter is not very captivating, the second one seemed to have a hook and raised my interest. The idea and story are there but it needs work to make it better. It seems every aspect of the story is good, aesthetics, description, and idea of the story but you should try to edit it. The way it's written now takes away the pleasure of reading the book.

Concept 9/10

The concept is great and something which is not common. It has a good hook, but the way it's written could be better.

Cover 9/10

The cover is great and fits the genre. Unfortunately, the title is not very visible, especially the word "Nymph".

The book description 8/10

The book description is good and mysterious enough. The second part just of description could be better, first two sentences slightly confusing and out of place with the rest of the blurb, that could be placed elsewhere and would look better.

Technicalities 30/50

The writing style is descriptive enough, and the grammar is decent as well. The most common mistake I noticed is not finishing the dialogue with proper punctuation. The slang stands out too much and it's not necessary for most places. Changing from the third point of view to the first is not necessary, you can be close to your characters in both. And in this case, the shift is out of place and disrupts the story's flow. All caps also feel unnecessary when characters are shouting, it could be said in the dialogue description. Overall the story itself is interesting but editing would be useful.

Total 68/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 13/20

It has a good hook, and it did capture my attention in the beginning. The first chapter made me want to keep reading, especially when we were introduced to Jace, but it's very hard for me to understand what's happening in the book so far, some lines blend together and it's hard to keep interested when I'm confused.

Concept 10/10

I've never read a story like this before about serpents. Especially since the book is placed in the human world it really gives us this mystery about everything.

Cover 8/10

We can tell that it's about a girl who appears to be not human. The cover is very eye-catching to the audience. The title of the book maybe should be in a different color so it stands out more.

The book description 10/10

The description of the book made me want to read it. It was very intriguing to me and got me very excited.

Technicalities 30/50

To be honest, the slang was quickly distracting, and also it was hard for me to follow along with who was speaking at some times. The writing style is okay. The sentences could be better with descriptions. The characters are described well, there's a little bit of development with the main character's parents, and Jace.

Total 71/100

Total from both judges 139/200

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𝟠. The Ager by kimberly_rash 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 15/20

The start of the story starts in a classical way. The story does have some new aspects but not that much so far. It's similar to a lot of movies/books in a similar genre.

Concept 8/10

The concept is well known, creepy old houses with someone inside, and people disappear there. So it all depends on the rest of the story.

Cover 9/10

The cover looks great, the secondary title at the bottom is not visible at all though.

The book description 8/10

The book description is good, but perhaps a little more description would be useful, to show how this story is different from other similar stories.

Technicalities 35/50

There are some minor grammatical, punctuation errors, nothing too major. The photos in mid chapters are very distracting and more description would work better instead of pictures. The dialogue seems a bit unrealistic, and there is a lack of action/reaction as well. The characters so far are very shallow and they are labeled a lot and not described so that the reader could judge them and not Michael saying what characters are supposed to be.

Total 75/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl

Engagement 16/20

The events are a little fast-paced, the hooks okay, but the story kind of reminds me of the movie 'Monster House', and it's okay if they're similar, a lot of movies are, but they're all different in a way. This book could have had a lot of engagement if it didn't start off so soon, and we got to know the characters better, and their lives.

Concept 8/10

It is kind of a cliche and scary house that no one ever goes into.

Cover 10/10

I love this cover. It's very eye-catching. We can tell that the book is going to be about young kids by a young girl and that it's a scary thriller by the blood and the cold tones.

The book description 9/10

I really liked the book's description, it gives me what the plot and theme of the book are, and it intrigues me and gets my attention. It could be a little bit longer, telling us possibly about the main character and their role.

Technicalities 37/50

The description and writing style could be better. Some things need more description. I'm not getting a visual of things that are happening, especially when things are described to me as "there" as the reader I don't know where "there" is, and a lot of the words are used in the past tense when it happened at that moment. There are some spelling mistakes, but it is not too distracting, or noticeable. The photos throughout the chapters are a little distracting. If you put them above the title for the chapter it would be a lot better. There's also not a lot of character development.

Total 80/100

Total from both judges 155/200

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𝟟. Arctic Heart by penpatron 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 15/20

The story has a great hook and seems very intriguing, keeping mystery as well. But the lack of dialogue keeps us away from the characters. The story is written mostly in description and it gets repetitive at times.

Concept 8/10

The concept is not very new, a girl meets a mysterious boy, the topic is common. Usually and in this book as well the mystery about the boy is something newer. The world of the story is something new as well, so far the concept is good.

Cover 10/10

The cover definitely captures attention, not sure yet how well it connects to the story though. But it looks great.

The book description 10/10

The description is captivating and very intriguing as well.

Technicalities 40/50

Grammar and spelling are decent, there were a few misspelled or seemingly incomplete words. Numbers are sometimes written not in letters and stand out too much. The lack of dialogue makes the story lesser than it could be, it has potential for sure. The majority is just description and it works to some extent but some parts could be written in dialogue. The existing dialogue is written poorly and takes away the pleasure of reading an otherwise good story. The story might need a balance between dialogue and description.

Total 83/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 16/20

The first chapter really caught my attention, it was very interesting. I think I would have understood the text more if the paragraphs were shorter. It was hard for me to follow along, but I think that this story overall had a good hook.

Concept 8/10

The concept is good. I have however seen stories like this one before, but I liked how you directed the theme and plot.

Cover 7/10

The cover did change while I was judging, and I like the new cover, but I feel like the old one was a better fit. It's still an eye-catching cover though.

The book description 7/10

The book description seems interesting. I feel like I would be more interested if there was more of a description, also I was a little confused when reading the description. I had to read it a couple of times to figure out what the book was going to be about.

Technicalities 38/50

There were some incomplete sentences. The writing style was good, but there wasn't much dialogue. I noticed it in the first chapter, and I was hoping that the other chapters wouldn't do the same. Some chapters have literally no one speaking. But it is a good story, and you can get the gist of the plot, but you want the readers to understand everything that's happening, but it's hard when there are incomplete sentences and barely interactions with the characters. dialogue.

Total 76/100

Total from both judges 159/200

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𝟞. The Law of Beasts book 1 by JabreelWilson 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 17/20

Concept 8/10

Cover 8/10

The book description 10/10

Technicalities 40/50

Total 83/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 17/20

The story so far is very interesting. it grabbed attention from the prologue but I was kind of confused with what was happening sometimes. Especially in the first chapter, I feel like we had more information about the characters and their lives. it would make more sense, and wouldn't leave me confused.

Concept 8/10

The vampire theme is very cliche, but I like what you did with it. It was a new approach that I haven't read before.

Cover 4/10

Honestly, it was hard for me to figure out what the cover was. The cover fits with the theme of the story, the name placement over the eyes is a little distracting. The title of the book and the name is a little off-center with the cover, also the style of the words used to say the title is very distracting, and hard overall to tell what it says, and the stickers on the cover are very squished with the title. The cover has too much stuff going on.

The book description 10/10

The description is good. It gives me enough information about the main characters, and what the reader will see in the book.

Technicalities 39/50

Total: 78/100

Total from both judges 161/200

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Books which going to round two!

𝟝. Parlor Tricks by 0liviaRose436 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 10/20

The first three chapters felt dull, there was no action. There are a lot of descriptions and the majority of it felt like an info dump, especially chapter one. It could be divided throughout the book. The more interesting part was the fourth one when Josie appeared. With that part, there is more dialogue as well and it's more balanced that way.

Concept 6/10

The concept is not entirely new. A stranger arrives in town with some type of secret. But so far the context does not seem like anything I have read before.

Cover 8/10

Overall the cover looks interesting enough and fits the theme as well. The bloody prints could be more visible if it's something related to the story. The story title could be more visible as well, perhaps spread wider than it is right now.

The book description 9/10

The description is good and interesting, it matches the book theme as well. I think it's a bit too much information about Hank's father there but other than that it's great.

Technicalities 43/50

The descriptions are great and grammar as well. There were a few punctuation errors but nothing major. The only thing which stood out was numbers, they should be written in letters. Other than that the work is polished almost to perfection. The writing style is a very individual thing but I felt a big lack of dialogue so far a lot of the story would feel much better if Hank would tell his background perhaps to Josie or share a memory of his father in dialogue with his mother. Like I said in an engagement part there was a lot of info dumped in the first two parts. It could be divided and told in dialogue.

Total 76/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 15/20

The story has a good hook. The first couple of chapters didn't really spark my attention, but when Josie came into the book and saw how Henry reacted to her, it made me want to find out more about her. The way Henry is feeling towards her is making us think that she may know something he doesn't. Also, the relationship between Henry and Wendy captured my attention, making me want to find out more about them together.

Concept 9/10

I've never read a story like this before. But a random person coming into town, and knowing secrets about a person, I have seen, but the way you tell the story and how you set it up makes it feel like an entirely new thing.

Cover 7/10

It's kind of eye-catching. It's hard to see the bloody hands because the color of the cover is light red. The shadow in the cover helps you gravitate your eyes to the building and the hands. The cover does fit the story theme. It's set in a town and it looks mysterious just like the book.

The book description 10/10

The book is described to be the mystery circling around Josie and the town, and when you read the book that's exactly what you get. The description did see my interest a lot, it made me want to read the story asap.

Technicalities 47/50

I didn't notice any spelling errors, but I think there was a word placed down that wasn't supposed to be there so it made the sentence seem off. The writing style is perfect, the characters are described very well, and how we get to see more into Henry's life and get to know more about him and his mom is developed very well.

Total 88/100

Total from both judges 164/200

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𝟜. Cocytus by empiresofwater

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

 Engagement 17/20

The story does have a good hook and is very interesting, however, I missed the dialogue. I would like to see characters interacting more instead of some descriptions.

Concept 9/10

The story is definitely something new to me. The concept is great and there is a lot of mystery to it as well.

Cover 9/10

The cover is amazing and captures the story perfectly.

The book description 10/10

The book is very well described. It captures attention and gives enough information to want to read the story.

Technicalities 45/50

Grammar, spelling is great and there is a diversity in word choice as well. There is not much dialogue so far and some of it is confusing, dialogue tags would be useful, to make sure readers know who is talking. The descriptions are great, it was easy to imagine everything, except the characters' reactions. That is again could be added to the dialogue. Overall the story is interesting and has a great hook as well.

Total 90/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 18/20

Just by reading the first chapter, the story captured my attention. I personally don't read stories set in later decades, but the hook in the storyline was so good I keep reading. I feel like there weren't enough interactions with some of the characters.

Concept 10/10

To me this story is something new. I've never read a story like this before, or heard of one set in the 1860s with a horror, paranormal theme. I thought that it was very unique.

Cover 7/10

The cover does fit the theme of the story, the ship tells us that the story is going to be set on the ship. The colors are neutral and how the background looks makes me feel that the story would be set in a later century. The cover isn't that eye-catching, but it is very pretty, and in a way intrigues me.

The book description 9/10

The book is described to be some sort of mystery. The description describes the book perfectly. The description of the book did seek my interest and made me want to read the story. I do wish that the description was a little bit longer, so I got more details about the plot and the theme.

Technicalities 46/50

I really loved the writing style. They described the events, and things happening around them very well. Some stuff may have dragged on a little bit in some paragraphs, but overall it was really good. Although there was more narration than characters talking.

Total 90/100

Total from both judges 180 /200

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𝟛. Keep Busy by simplyhorrible 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 19/20

I was interested from the start and it kept getting better with each chapter. I usually like more dialogue but having just one person in the book so far there is no way around the lack of dialogue. And it works very well.

Concept 9/10

The concept is nothing new, but I loved the story so far. It's similar to "The last man on earth" but with zombies.

Cover 8/10

The cover is good but doesn't do justice to the story.

The book description 9/10

The description is good, but a few key details about Frank might help to make it better. He is the reason which made me so interested to read more, so adding more about his character might help.

Technicalities 48/50

All technical sides seemed great. I loved descriptions. The only thing which needs adjustment is writing numbers in letters, not a big issue at all. And we don't have a clear image of Frank's description as well, but it still works somehow.

Total 93/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 16/20

The hook was good. The only thing was it moved a little slow for me. I was really interested in reading it, but the beginning of the book moved a little slow for me to keep interested.

Concept 8/10

This theme used a lot. Zombie books are pretty common, but it was shown well. Making him be seen as the last man and human on earth is intriguing.

Cover 7/10

The cover is eye-catching, but the words stand out more than the photo does, so your eyes don't drift to the skeleton. I do think that a skeleton may not have been the right choice for the cover. I'm getting more of a pirate theme by looking at it.

The book description 9/10

I like the description, It tells you the theme, and gives you some plot, but I do however wish it was just a little bit longer, so we can get a better idea of the book.

Technicalities 49/50

I love the writing style. It's amazing. Everything was described very well. There were a few mistakes with spelling and punctuation, but overall very good. Character development was good. We got just the right amount of information about Frank to get to understand what he looks like.

Total 89/100

Total from both judges 182/200

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𝟚. The Housewife's Secret by m_writes_45 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 18/20

The first chapter did wonders when it came to mystery, and even though later there was no major action, I was still pulled to read more.

Concept 9/10

So far the concept is mysterious and I want to know if Heather will ever find her daughter. And also there is a big gap between the first chapter and the story later on and I want to know what happened in those years.

Cover 8/10

The cover is good, but it could be more mysterious to fit with the story theme better.

The book description 9/10

The description is good and intriguing. However, the title is not representing the story that well and it could be something more intriguing.

Technicalities 49/50

Everything seems very well written, the descriptions were great. Some parts could be written as dialogue but weren't too much of an issue.

Total 93/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl

 Engagement 18/20

The book does grab my attention, especially with the very first chapter. Also reading about the two main characters' lives seemed interesting, I can't wait for more of a mystery to come into play.

Concept 8/10

I do like the concept of the book. I've read some books like this before, but I really like how we can see both of their lives, and I like the mystery so far. This first chapter really grabbed my attention, and I can't wait to see what happens.

Cover 8/10

The cover does fit the title of the story, but it also can make you think it's a romantic book when it's a thriller. The figure of the person kind of throws the cover off cause it's faded in with the background, but the cover is very pretty and eye-catching.

The book description 8/10

The description is good, it gives the theme and plot, but I would like it to be a little bit longer giving me more information. Like the title, I don't know who the housewife represents.

Technicalities 50/50

I like how the family tree was brought in, very clever. I love the writing style of the book. Everything is described perfectly, I can visualize everything. The character development was great, we really got to know the main character and little about her neighbor. I felt like I was reading a real novel.

Total 92/100

Total from both judges 185/200

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𝟙. What the Eyes can See by heyennbee 

Judge OutOfMyImagination 

Engagement 18/20

The story has a great hook right from the start and my interest grew from the end of chapter one. Each part has something that makes me read more and some unexpected twists as well. I wanted a bit more interaction between Isla and Ryan, before the event. It did have an impact but if we would see them interact more it would have an even bigger surprise.

Concept 10/10

The concept is great and relatively new as well. Isla's power is explained right away in a natural way and I loved that part.

Cover 9/10

The cover is good and fits the genre as well. Not sure how well all hands covering the eyes in the cover relates to the story, but overall it looks great.

The book description 10/10

The description is truly intriguing and gives just enough information to want to read the book.

Technicalities 45/50

Everything looked great enough, there is not much dialogue in the story and usually, I expect more but it works in this case. Isla is a loner therefore she doesn't talk with that many people and the story still doesn't feel like an info dump. There are major twists when it comes to characters and considering just how much I know so far I'm guessing that will continue to happen. The descriptions were good as well, enough for me to imagine the scenes and characters.

Total 92/100

Judge that-1-shy-girl 

Engagement 19/20

I thought the hook was good. The first chapter is very interesting, it made me want to keep reading, and get to know why she was the figure who had been hurt. Each other really caught my attention and made me feel excited. I do however wish that there was more speaking dialogue. Just my opinion.

Concept 10/10

I've certainly never read a story like this before, I thought the idea was very unique and drew the reader's attention.

Cover 10/10

I love the cover. It's so eye-catching when you look at it you just can't help but feel intrigued. The cover is very in focus and it's not distracting. It fits very well with the theme of the book, we know just by looking at the cover we know that her eyes and sight are going to play a big part of the book.

The book description 10/10

The deception of the book is very well done. It tells you the theme, and plot of the book.

Technicalities 47/50

The writing style was great. I could follow along with what was happening. I wish I knew a little bit more about Ryan, and got a good idea of what he was like even more than what was described to me because he left the book so soon. The twists were good and kept my attention.

Total 96/100

Total from both judges 188/200

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