"Hi, I don't really mean for any self promo but could you please check out my story "The Voices" if you have the time? And maybe give me some feedback please cos you've inspired my writing so much😊" - @tae_kookie_chim

I have read what you have written so far, I am a little confused of who her love interest is but overall it is good. It has plenty of twists and turns so far, which keeps me on edge reading. As advice, I would tell you to remember your plot, so far in the story I still have no idea what "the voices" are.